|Reviews for A Little More Than Friends|
| reading turtle chapter 1 . 7/17
Just read the first chapter. its not too bad but it could use a bit more detail in bother world and surroundings and in the interactions/conversations. You don't want to overload readers but it just feels like there's not enough at the moment. You could have added just a few sentences about the fountain or the weather to draw the reader in a bit more. With all that said however, I'm looking forward to reading the rest and will try to provide some constructive criticism as I go.
| jun-Tao chapter 5 . 1/24/2008
why'd u stop? i love it i just found an read all 5 chapters. i want to kno wat happens!
| Cardplay chapter 5 . 12/30/2007
And will he be okay? I realise this hasn't been updated since 2006, but is there any hope of a revival?
For the story and for Koh?
| Cardplay chapter 4 . 12/30/2007
| Cardplay chapter 3 . 12/30/2007
Looking forward to more.
I really think this fic gets better as it goes on.
Nice ideas too.
Was that motorbike you mentioned supposed to be the 'Aura Bike' from the General Store?
| Cardplay chapter 2 . 12/30/2007
I enjoyed this one more than your first, actually.
I can't pinpoint why that was.
I think in the first one your writing didn't flow so easily like this one did.
| Cardplay chapter 1 . 12/30/2007
Aw...Poor Koh. :( Nice story.
| SasuSaku Forever and Ever chapter 1 . 9/1/2007
| 1134 chapter 5 . 1/21/2007
I like this. Update soon, okay?
| Ex Oxide chapter 5 . 11/6/2006
Ah, okay. We're putting the story together now. *nods* I see progress.
| Ex Oxide chapter 4 . 11/3/2006
Well we've got the curse part down. We don't neccesarily make the connection of the monsters and the curse per say and the story likely doesn't end here on that note either.
I just don't understand how you plan on fighting this curse is all. Or how the story progresses with Koh so badly hurt. You've got my attention but what happens now?
| UnsanMusho chapter 4 . 10/5/2006
Woah bloody much ! Cool story but what happened to Kico ? Hurry with the next chapter i really want to finish this story !
| Scion-of-Thanatos chapter 2 . 7/26/2006
I think this is rather good, and as for your reviews... seeing as this isn't a well known game, I could understand why there aren't many who review here, but I could be wrong. as for the story; only one problem that I found was your use of '...' when some one would speak instead of "...". that's my only probelm with the fic, but as for the rest of it, it's pretty good storywise! and also; you actually made me want to go back and start playing the game again, thanks!
| Scion-of-Thanatos chapter 1 . 6/23/2006
Hmm, interesting, to say the least.
This game is still one of my
absolute favorite games of all time, ya know?
It seems good, although I sometimes have the attention span
of a gnat, so I haven't really been able to read
very far into this.
Well, I will have to read further in the next time!
Anyways, I hope you go all the way with this.
Well, so long!