Reviews for More than you think you are
Dr. Scott chapter 1 . 4/18/2006
I enjoyed your story. I found some typos you might want to fix:

rid of him. well I guess I was being kinda annoying he thought to himself.-'Well, I guess, I was being kinda annoying,' he thought to himself.

one of the most important person on this base -persons

“What are you doing here anyway; I thought -anyways

“Penny for your thoughts.” a familiar voice, non other than John Sheppard, interrupted her thoughts.-thoughts," a familiar voice, none...

John asked increduasly “-incredulously

“Well maybe if we could convince them that what they are doing is wrong they could potentially become good allies.” Elizabeth suggested.-"Well, maybe if we could convince them that what they are doing is wrong, then they could potentially become good allies," Elizabeth suggested. (review comma puncuation rules)

“Sir everybody on that planet didn’t do it, in fact I’m sure -"Sir, everybody on that planet didn't do it. In fact, I'm sure...

an internal confliction, He was still angry -an internal conflict. He was still angry...

“Your welcome.” he answered back -You're welcome," he answered...

Okay well if your sure.” she said cautiously-you're

we all know your smart -you're

Well I dunno maybe to get you out of the lab for a while.”-"Well, I dunno, maybe to getyou out of the lab for a while?"

Rodney realized his mind was wondering again and wondered why, -his mind was wandering again...

“That may be so but shouldn’t we at least be sure I mean he was flying a Puddle -...be sure? I mean, he was...

“When your ready Doctor Weir.” Peter told her bringing her back to the here and now.-you're

I don’t want you flying it again someone is coming to pick you up -flying it again. Someone is...

“Um can I talk to you for a minute?” he asked and lead her away.-"Um, can I talk...and led her away.

If you are sure.”-sure?"

He watch watched as the waves lapped at the shore-He watched as the waves...

Just another air force Major.-Air Force Major

not knowing where I am on a mission.-where he was on a mission

“Its nice here is it not?” Teyla asked surprising him-It's nice here. Is it not? or It's nice here, is it not?

You have seen extremely down since receiving the message -You seem extrememly down...

That is exactly what your doing Major-you're

Rodney made his way to the Jumper bay and fast as he could. He couldn’t explain it but he wanted to be there to pick Major Sheppard up. Just incase -as fast as...Just in case...

Rodney yelled getting the mans attention-man's

for he had ran most of the way-had run

No worries, lets get going-let's

Once minute we were running about our daily lives -One minute...

Okay then if your sure man-Okay then, if you're sure

he had been surprised to here from Bowen-hear

He would be glad to get back to the piece and quiet-peace and quiet

area that Grodin had pointed too -pointed to...

water wouldn’t compromise the hall-hull

its getting pretty cold down here he told her-cold down here," he told her.

Good to here you awake sergeant-Good to hear you're awake, Sergeant

If I don’t here her orders I can’t disobey them -hear

his best friends life was on the line-friend's life

he dived back under and headed for the jumper-(consistency, you capitalize Jumper everywhere else)

Bother Rodney and Greene were shivering -Both Rodney..

Hey look its Major Sheppard.” Greene -"Hey look! It's Major Sheppard," Greene...

Smartest person on Atlantis, yet he could think himself out of this mess.-yet he couldn't think...

So I think your pretty safe Rodney-you're

It liked three people swimming-It looked like three...

next to Teyla he should his head -he shook his head

Now that, that had been tended to she headed to the Infirmary -That having been attended to, she headed...

Rodney your dripping wet-you're

heard the Doctors familiar Scottish accent -Doctor's

Thanks.” John said than turned in the direction of the commissary. Rodney and Teyla following-"Thanks," John said then turned in the direction of the commissary with Rodney and Teyla following.

he was trying to be usual self -be his usual self...

wiping the smile of Johns face-John's face

sat there with the mouths open in shock-sat there with their mouths open...

Rodney and Teyla looked after the Major not quiet sure what -quite sure

He was still the best commanding Officer he had, had since joining the Air Force-(you can write had had without a comma) or less awkward might be: He was still the best commanding officer he had served with since joining the Air Force.

Zelenka got just as much joy pissing of Kavanaugh -pissing off Kavanaugh

co-pilots chair-pilot's chair

Johns helping hand -John's

I never felt superior from the gene Rodney and no I’m not leaving the team you had me convinced yesterday with your lecture-I never felt superior from the gene, Rodney. And no, I'm not leaving the team. You had me convinced yesterday...

Well maybe he didn’t of everyone here like family-Well, maybe he didn't think of everyone...

I've never sent to much proof reading before! I hope you're not offended. Truly, I liked your story and am really trying to help so that it reads more smoothly. In general you should think about apostrophes as being needed for possessing something and when you contract two verbs together. I hope you keep writing as your ideas and dialog are very good, the puncuation just gets in the way a bit. Hope to see another story from you again soon.