Reviews for Harry Potter Fate's Child: A Destiny Revisited |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Desperately needs a beta! For Harry's birthday her wore "Khaki shorts" "and a nice polo short." Among many others to date. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I would like to point out a mistake in this chapter. Harry states that he was tied to the gravestone of Tom Marvolo Riddle Sr. But Marvolo is Voldemorts second name to honor his mothers father. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I love clear those clear messages. And Lucius losing his wand hand? Sucks to be him |
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![]() ![]() This wouldve been great for a 1 shot... Attempted to read this... story? Hermione.. do you want to go to the yule ball with me.. Sure harry, but best not to tell anyone Hermione, do you want to be my girlfriend? After a pause, and a think Sure harry, but best not tell anyone... ***waiter cheque please! I'm done...*** |
![]() ![]() ![]() So as I can see. After Fate add some changes it’s looks like Harry are weaker then before. He get poisoned by spider and can’t fight back to Voldemort. So what did you change to be better? Hermione with him and that’s all? You should try to work better or this wouldn’t be interesting to read at all … |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Ok WHAT? Im behooved what do u mean rape this was such an esculation with no back story. Like left field shawty. Like Ron was cool and then was dating luna and bam rape! What? Just how did we get here, i understand this may make sense later but jesus H christ this took a turn like just why was that needed and why was he dating Luna like we have no story just bam u are taking this places idk how this is considered even close to cannon again im confusion but i shall endeavor to keep reading. again now im even more confusion cuz right after she is almost raped she makes love to harry make it make sense. How old are u. U have to be like 15 writing this way there is no way an adult came out with this type of tomfoolery. And then boom on graduation day what? I hope rhis dtory is good cuz i am so gonna go ham if i start reading and the rest of this is just paragraph leaps woth one sentece explenations after i might puke. Yup walking away right now. Idk if ur a child when u wrote this but this is the dumbest thing ive come across. He gets to do it again e it h no memories and a nysterious force egging him on. And dumbles manipulative ass is a grandfather to him nope nope nopity the fuck not im gone. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Im not even all the way through the prologue and im vexed. I read the comments and someone said this was just like Cannon and i still took a shot and then now that im reading. I want to inow Whose xannon is this? Cuz this damn striaght aint JKs work lol i was insulted and complemented for you when they said that which made me read. And now im just sitting her like what? Like ravenclaws glasses sent me and then the hufflepuff cup not being a crux threw me. And now they are back at hogwarts and Harry is Headboy? Again whose cannon is this cuz this is not HP idk im so lost but im gonna keep reading cuz i feel u have a plot bunny in this mess somehwere and i want to find it. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Ravenclaws reading glasses? What? |
![]() ![]() I thought the voice is to help harry, you write like JK. harry should not be as dumb with his feelings. i thought this is a fanfic nont a canon copy. |