Reviews for Angel Saga
Angel Wolf chapter 1 . 9/21/2017
Well, i can see what the appeal is. Logically, Vergil should have turned into a weapon, same as any other powerful demon. DMC has never really been too clear on how that works.

So, I know this is already finished, and, most likely, no one will ever return to resume work on it, but as a fellow writer i couldn't help but notice a few things.

Several words are largely overused, like sword, for instance. It's really repetitive after a while always hearing 'Dante grabbed this. Dante walked here. Dante shot this guy'

Also, several times, this appears to be missing punctuation in certain spots, changing the intent of the message. I know exactly why this occurs so frequently in this story. It's not something to be ashamed of, most fanfic writers do it. It's a writing tip that my dad gave me a long, long time ago.

Never write how you talk.

And it's fairly comfortable for somebody to get into the habit of doing this. How someone talk in real life isn't near close to proper english. When translated on paper word for word, things start to get confusing for people. What you might say to someone in a casual conversation isn't quite right in the context of prose in a book.

Other than that, it's got some spotty grammar. I only bring this up because, sometimes, it's hard to understand exactly what is happening, due to the presence of sentence structure errors.

That's more of a grievance than anything, i still found this story quite entertaining. On to what works. Dante's pretty much in line with who he was in dmc 1, the descriptions really pop when they work, the concept is great (mainly because its original), and the pacing is on point.

That being said, i've only read chapter 1 so who knows. Thats my general estimation for now. I think i'll stay tuned in for this one and see where it goes. Good work, but i think it could have been better.
Rowknan chapter 6 . 6/8/2017
Not bad but, I can't help but feel that Vergil wouldn't be as afraid as your making him. In DMC1 Vergil still adhered to a code of ethics that he had as a human. He refused to attack Dante while his back was turned. That shows that Vergil was able to keep some fundemental part of himself that is not here in this fic.
Queen Kyrie chapter 11 . 8/16/2016
Gosh, this is so great
Queen Kyrie chapter 2 . 6/5/2016
OMG, this is great.
heathen chapter 46 . 11/5/2015
Gods, reading the description of Sparda having hearts floating above his head and in his eyes? I giggle-snorted so hard at that lmao
Guest chapter 51 . 7/5/2015
Skyray chapter 2 . 6/6/2015
Yeah I was thinking that too lol, I mean Vergil did come out and say it, and I quote, "without strength, you cannot protect anything. Let alone yourself"... That line certainly didn't sound like a "woohoo unlimited power to rule over everything" kind of thing to me :P
Shoetsu Otaku chapter 24 . 5/30/2015
Oh the feels! This is so amazing! thanks so much! Dante's family has had such crap put on them that this makes me happy!
AtsukoSchulyer chapter 51 . 11/2/2014
;alsdkfj;alskdjf;alskdfja; sdlkj IT WAS SO GOOD AND THEN POOF NO MORE CHAPTERS WHY WHY WHy...?!

Anyway, omega good job. This story is lovely, and I really like the deipiction of the devil system. Half demon Eva is freakin' awesome. Fan art is definitely a must for this. Anyway, how is Vergil going to be able to be the next leader of the Underworld...especially since he's still relatively fragile? Heck, how's he even going to fare having to go to the Underworld?

Definitely looking forward to more.

Keep it up and thanks!
AtsukoSchulyer chapter 8 . 11/1/2014
Okay, I'm a few chapters in (discovered this today). That said...omfg. I didn't realize I could hurt and be happy this much all at the same time. Well done!

How you portray Vergil and Dante is amazing, by the way. It's very in character.

Keep it up and thank you so much for writing this!
kirallie chapter 51 . 7/29/2014
Glad you finished this even if the last few chapters felt very disjointed and confusing.
Sapphire Assassin 30 chapter 51 . 7/12/2014
Wonderful fic. Didn't really get some of the intermissions at times but I did love this fic nonetheless.

So vergil will become ruler of the underworld since he destroyed mundus' devil arm? So he WOULD ultimitely get the power he craves... Awesome way to end this fic :)
Sapphire Assassin 30 chapter 42 . 7/10/2014
I love these little nestlings. The interaction between sparda and eva here is SO CUTE. Lol

So was spardas reaction to the amulet when dante brought him back as well though I didn't review that chapter. This fic is totally awesome! :)
Sapphire Assassin 30 chapter 28 . 6/30/2014
This fic is... I'm at a loss for words to describe how wonderful it is.

I'm pretty sure ill be reading most if not all of your dmc fics. Keep up the good work. :p
Sapphire Assassin 30 chapter 20 . 6/24/2014
This fic is wonderful, I can't stop reading!

So vergil has finally returned home and the brothers seem to be getting along... But will he once again be used as a pawn against dante by mundus?

Onward to see how the rest of this awesome fic unfolds. : )
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