Reviews for The Darkness Within
CMVreud chapter 11 . 1/17
That's a six, perhaps a seven on the FU-BAR.
CMVreud chapter 9 . 1/17
Damn, I didn't anticipate "the polynesian Hopi-Hopi".
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I was defeated at my own game. Nooooo!
CMVreud chapter 8 . 1/17
Ooooh, is it the doppelganger-gambit, or the Corellian "if a spy spies on a spy, who spies on a spy, who's spying on a spy pretending to be a counter-spy spy" or "the Ghambian fire-pit-ant" or "the english Marauder-turncloak".
Damn, I love inventing plan A-to-F-spygame-names.
CMVreud chapter 5 . 1/17
Oooooh, little princeling now going full assassin?
ylene chapter 1 . 1/15
I have also made a fanfiction about harry potter , read it out by clicking on my profile !
Guest chapter 39 . 1/9
hermione is a bitch ... she always ruins everything!
An chapter 59 . 1/5
Shining is not spelled like "shinning". This is the third time you did that. Stop.
fellowpotterhead chapter 37 . 12/24/2014
please. watch ur language. im kinda late in mentioning it but...idk if ull listen but i might have to stop reading if it gets any worse.
calovestowrite chapter 65 . 12/23/2014
I...I...I...can't believe it's over! I have spent the past couple of days loving this story and now it's just over. I went into a state of panic but them I saw you had written a sequel and nearly screamed with joy! Hope you have a great christmas x
Anonymous chapter 40 . 12/23/2014
The punctuation is not very good and you should be a little less blunt. And you should use the informal words and stuff to make it more smooth...I dunno
And you should try reading over it when you're done so you don't make any spelling or grammar or messed-up-stuff-like-that errors.

Personally I think you should do a rewrite with a beta
Aphrodite Child chapter 14 . 12/22/2014
Poor Snape.
Aphrodite Child chapter 11 . 12/22/2014
Aww!
Aphrodite Child chapter 10 . 12/22/2014
No words.
Aphrodite Child chapter 9 . 12/22/2014
They got him!
Aphrodite Child chapter 8 . 12/22/2014
Uh oh
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