Reviews for Christmas Present
Guest chapter 1 . 8/5/2013
madbutterfly chapter 1 . 9/15/2009
I know that picture you based this on, it's cute. :P So was the fic, kind of OOC, but meh. :3
grimmich chapter 1 . 7/19/2009
OK that was adorable. It would have been funnier if Al and Winry had come back to hear the commotion though... but it was still hilarious.
Seeker Zenn chapter 1 . 3/26/2008
ep! really cheesy but sweet.
Madame de Coeur chapter 1 . 11/25/2007
poor ed...

loved it!
Roy Mustang 08 chapter 1 . 11/16/2006
Nice story update soon
Kitsune Tanaka chapter 1 . 11/10/2006

So cute...
Harkbus chapter 1 . 10/6/2006 sweet! Anyway, with the box present and the Ed in side it, I saw the EXACT THING WITH ALMOST THE EXACT WORDS on a picture! Did you make that pic or did you get the idea from it?
ShesMyCHerryPI chapter 1 . 7/30/2006
HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA! and THAT is why I don't have sleep over at my friends house!(they molest each other even in public so I realy don't wanna know what they do indoors)
yaoinessdotcom chapter 1 . 6/26/2006
*grins* i like it!
AkizukiSakura chapter 1 . 5/4/2006

Okay, compliments where compliments are due, I suppose.

It was cute, I'll give it that, and an interesting, if not particularly unique setting.



Ed and Roy, even Al and Winry... None of them acted like they truly should have acted. Specific examples include:

Edward would never, ever call Alphonse a bastard. Ever. Alphonse is his only remaining blood family. Al is the reason he keeps going to find the Philosopher's Stone. He's the one who keeps him frmo beating everyone up, come to think of it. They have their moments, sometimes, but Ed would never say that about Al.

Al would also never tell Winry that Ed liked the Taisa and vice-versa without Ed's permission. Again, they're all each other has in terms of family, and they take each other to heart with each other's secrets.

Ed would never be so forward as to wrap himself up as a present.

The dialogue was completely OOC in general, I'm afraid. Winry is much too childish, Al too... insensitive to his brother's feelings.

Roy is so unlike his normal self it isn't even funny. And Ed would never cry, at least not for such a reason. While on the OOC subject, as Ed is not a forward kind of person, Roy would have no reason to suspect that Ed was in the present.

And neither Roy nor Ed believe in a deity, therefore neither would believe in Christmas, unless this was AU and I missed the notice. If so, ignore that last. And if it wasn't, the same holds true for the televisions. I don't think I've ever seen a television in FMA.

Winry wouldn't push Ed to 'make a move' either, or if she did, she'd matchmake much more subtley.

And their reactions to having hangovers, and then Winry's comment on them knowing they'd get a hangover was crude at best.

Like I said.

Cute fic. Bad FMA fic.


Sheena-X-Zelos chapter 1 . 5/3/2006
_ I've heard so much about this couple after becoming an FMA fan and so I finally decided to read a fic about me and I have to say that this was really sweet, it was great for a first fic for me, just the right amount of sweetness and the right amount of lime, it didn't ruin the couple for me which has happened in the past and it was all around just one of the cutest things I've ever read, so thank you for being my first EdXRoy fic, you made me want to read even more, I loved it! _
otaku22 chapter 1 . 5/2/2006
AW! That was adorable! I'm a new FMA fan, just seen the first dvd, but I needed some fanfiction...and that was absolutely adorable! -giggle- I'm just sad cause its only a one-shot and there's no more! :D Well, that's just me...hee hee...