|Reviews for The Horse and the Swan|
| Pen52 chapter 11 . 5/24/2006
Is it my overactive imagination, or was this an entirely happy chapter? :)
Don't worry about things seeming dull; because I assure you, they are not. Take the time to build up your story, don't rush it.
It will be worth it.
For me, it already is. I'm enjoying reading about Guthwyn's true return to Rohan (in spirit, as well as in body) immensely.
Keep up the good work.
| Eriala chapter 9 . 5/21/2006
wow - i started your trilogy sometime last night... i think i might have just spent almost 24 hours this weekend reading, and it was completely worth it. I *always* find something to nitpick when i review a story, but there is abselutely nothing i could find wrong. i think i had forgotten what good fanfiction actually sounds like until now, with the crap i've been finding on this site lately.
i think i've told you this before, but i would like to say again that you are an abselutely amazing writer, and i have no idea how someone could ever prefer a crappy mary-sue over this. (you make all my writing feel pathetic, badly written - and incredibly short.)
*please* update, for the sake of my sanity.
| Pen52 chapter 9 . 5/20/2006
This conclusion of the conflict between Faramir and Guthwyn was done just right. The emotions of both involved rang true and Guthwyn managed to grant as much forgiveness to Faramir as she could, while honoring Borogor's memory.
The feast was done with just enough detail to make it come alive in the reader's eyes and you managed to capture the joyous spirit of the occasion. Well, except for Guthwyn.
Just one more thing. What in blazes does Lothíriel have against Guthwyn?
| Andi-Scribbles chapter 9 . 5/20/2006
OH GOD! *tearing up* Try not to make me cry again! Just gimme a minute... Ok, undercontrol now. That chapter was swell! Write more very soon!
| neFaerieous chapter 8 . 5/20/2006
Slow...want something good to happen to Gúthwyn...where did Legolas go? Good that Tun isn't stone-headed. Wonder if Cobryn will find out about Haldor...he could help Lady G, too...
And Éomer's right...when I was 17, I shlepped my nephew and nieces around, the oldest was 8...got more than one "oh your children are so nice" comment. Gah!
| Andi-Scribbles chapter 8 . 5/17/2006
Uh-oh. Looks like Tun's heading for a swift beating by Eomer. Poor kid. We knew him well. Anyway, keep on posting! I'm eager to see what happens next!
| Pen52 chapter 7 . 5/17/2006
I don't know who to feel sorry for more: Guthwyn or Faramir. They are both in the right and both in the wrong; depends from whose perspective you view it.
Just like in life.
By the way, when will Guthwyn realize Tun's feelings for her?
Great chapter, but then again, all your chapters are. :)
| Pen52 chapter 6 . 5/16/2006
So, Guthwyn and Legolas finaly patched things up (as much as can be expected under the circumstances). That's good to see.
Great chapter. Update soon.
| Andi-Scribbles chapter 6 . 5/14/2006
Ohh... drama drama drama! Next chapter, please!
| Andi-Scribbles chapter 5 . 5/12/2006
Yes! Finally some happier moments! More chapters, please!
| Pen52 chapter 4 . 5/11/2006
A wonderful chapter. The moment when Eomer first saw Lothíriel of Dol Amroth was dead on, just like I imagined it would be.
One question; will the children point out the striking resemblance between Legolas and Haldor?
| Andi-Scribbles chapter 3 . 5/8/2006
:( *Makes sad frowny face* Aww... C'mon, man! Guthwyn needs a little bit of happy! Romance! Adventure! No more nightmares (yeah, right- not likely..poor thing...) Well, at least the next day isn't her birthday again. Good chapter, but I noticed something that kind of bothered me (not about your writing) but something that Hammel said. He said Eowyn and Eomer were invited to the Rohan/Gondor meeting thingy because they should be present, because they "had every right to witness" it. But wouldn't that include Guthwyn? She's also the sister to the king of Rohan, so wouldn't she merit an invitation. Or was that just because she was healing that she didn't go... because she wasn't invited (I'm guessing) even if she wasn't healing at the time. Anyway, once again, great Legolas/Guthwyn stuff. I love him, he'd better help her overcome her fear of Haldor. And maybe her loneliness... *grs in sexy purr* Gotta love the elf! Keep them coming!
| Callie chapter 1 . 5/8/2006
So, the saga continues.
Once again, I can't find even the slightest detail to nit pick over. Your writing is rich and evocative, with just enough attention to detail to make the story ring true; without being repetitive or slowing the narrative flow to any noticeable degree.
Of course, there are some who would probably disagree with me, but I would always prefer a story that has the kind of detail and gradual development that brings the characters truly to life in the eyes of a reader, to a tale that rushes towards completion in a blind frenzy, sacrificing its integrity in the process.
I'm happy to see the reviews have picked up. Some people would not recognize a good piece of fiction if you printed up the script and beat them over the head with it. Err; come to think of it, that would not be advisable in your case, considering the length of your tale. The printed version would pack quite a wallop, pun definitely intended. Sorry for the rant but honestly, when I see all the junk that gets lauded on this site, I almost get physically ill.
I'm tempted to write a story of such questionable quality myself, with all the over used clichés; just to see how many reviews it would get.
Keep up the good work.
Now, back to the mountain of paperwork that awaits me. Sigh.
| Pen52 chapter 2 . 5/8/2006
I love chapters with Cobryn in them. You have a talent for writing believable original characters.
It was to be expected that Guthwyn's hatred and anger directed at Faramir would not go away any time soon. But still, all things considered, I can find no fault in Faramir's conduct. He only did what was right at the time. Both Guthwyn and Borogor were a part of the Enemy's forces and still, he showed her mercy. Which is completely in character for him, by the way.
But I guess it's understandable why Guthwyn wouldn't see it that way.
| GwenevieveGreenleaf chapter 2 . 5/6/2006
This is getting so good! And I feel so bad for poor Guthwyn. She's already been through so much and now she has to deal with this. I hope she somehow finds it in her heart to forgive Faramir...even though that would probably be the hardest thing to ever do. Please update soon or I'll cry!