|Reviews for Like a Twisted Fairytale|
| ShikaTachidoriKitsuneHebiTaka chapter 3 . 8/19/2012
Oops! one last thing for my OC subimtted in chapter 3: She hates anything girly and tends to like bands like Young The Giant, Linkin Park, Smashing Pumpkins, and M83.
| ShikaTachidoriKitsuneHebiTaka chapter 4 . 8/19/2012
Hello!if i may, i wanna enter my own OC, even though it may not even show up. heehee!
Race: Dark. (Like the Dark Smashers from Subspace Emissary.)
Appearance: Raven is a manifestation of the remaining Dark, and as such her actual form is a small sphere about a foot in diameter, though she can change her body to gain a more humanoid stature. her perfered form is a tall, slim girl that looks to be in her late teens, with loose black shorts ending right above her knees. she also wears a dark colored shirt of an undifinable color that fits around her shoulders but hide her semi-flat chest and stomach completely before ending slightly past below the waistband of her shorts. her skin and hair, as any Dark(ian?), are black, and her hair is very short and spiky with a bang reaching her left eyebrow that randomly curls slightly. her eyes are also the norm for her race as deep red eyes with slim cats pupils. occasionaly she has a long, slim tail.
Personality: Raven is a creature with a personality much unlike those whose essences created her. she is a kind person who values any friends that she can make as family, and those that made one kind action as friends. she has a secret insercurity complex, but is sometimes straight to the point. she often points out what others did to help as well when praised. she hopes that the Smashers would except her and after seeing the add instanly applied. she loves reading and drawing, is very stubborn if she doesn't she a reason to not be, and she believes that pride will just get you killed and replaces hers with stuborness. she is both extremly stealthy and peceptive, and often cannot join in an arguement because she can see the pro's and con's of each side. she doesn't care what people think about her expect deep down, where she desprately wants to be excepted despite her backround. she sometimes gets small memories from an essence of a former Dark. she has small ripples of shadow always coming off her that tint red when in the presence of something with a trace of Dark. it is very hard to make her angry and even harder to make her stay so.
2(Melee): Raven attacks with a scimitar or kopesh of shadows. when combined with the Up button large wings sprout out of her back as she makes a shield above her with a long spike in the middle and smaller ones around it. when Down is added she crouches and causes a small shockwave that only effects those directly around her.
1(Ranged): Raven either attacks with a whip that grows in length the longs its held before use or a waves of darkness when combined with the down button. her special jump makes her grow large black wings that push her up in the air slightly before shooting upward. using this will allow her to actually pass though objects, but she will fall out of them if she cant pass through it before the boost wears off.
Friends: Raven hopes to honestly see everyone as a friend, except those who helped Taboo. (if this follows that story line and it already happened.)
Enemies: Ganondorf, Bowser, Crazy Hand.
| Rhiannan365 chapter 4 . 4/23/2010
I have a OC that I want in a Fan fiction but sadly I can't write stories at all. I drew a picture of her so you don't have to think so hard about visualizing it. I'm bad at describing. sorry. If there is anything more you want to know, just message me.
Personality: Cold hearted to her enemies, and to some Smashers, not all. she has trust issues, she doesn’t mind little kids but loves scaring them (the little kids find her strange). She absolutely hates pink and girly things. She believes that any evil should be slain, slowly and painfully. Besides that, she is a definite show off and won’t pass up a chance to fight.
Flaws: Fairly medium weight, so easier to fling off stage. She can sometimes gets caught up in flashbacks and nightmares, She has no long-ranged attacks to will take more damage because of it. She also
Build: Around 5'9", agile and fast (making up for her lack of long ranged attacks)
Abilities: To change from human to a dark purple 'Kirby like' creature
Attack from Smash Ball: Her sword glows to an almost blinding light and she drives it into the ground creating a shockwave that covers most of the stag (depending on the stag) Any opponent not on the ground would be unaffected.
Weapon of choice (melee): Her sword (in picture) and sometimes her fists and feet.
Weapon of choice (long-range): none, mainly close combat fighting.
Background: Her entire family was murdered on her birthday during the raid of her village. She was 11 at the time. Her sword was originally her father, whom tried to protect her mother, siblings and her. After her father fell, she was filled with a blood rage of sorts and killed the raider, but not in time to save her family. She entered the tournament for reasons she doesn‘t even know.
Appearance: Black hair that is tied into a high ponytail at the top of her head with side bangs. She has dark blue eyes. Has many tattoos covering her body Wears a dark purple skirt-like garment with designs that look like her tattoos, with more chain mail underneath, waist only covered by tattoos and some broken chain mail, has one pauldron on her right shoulder, chest covered by more dark purple fabric. I wanted to have her with some bat-like wings but I’m not too sure. If you want, you can give her some…
| Shaw Fujikawa chapter 4 . 6/5/2009
Well, so long as you're accepting OCs still, I'll send you my one in a PM. Just as well, really. I plan to make it VERY detailed.
Anyway, as a mean and cruel beta-reader (not) I'll just help myself...
1. Proper nouns aren't exclusive to character names. It can also be stuff such as 'Gerudo','Pokemon' and 'Smasher'.
2. 'Dining' room, not 'dinning' room.
3. When you put a factual sentence in, followed by a speech line, you put a full stop in, not a comma. Also, when you have a broken speech line like:
"Not really," John muttered."I had no idea."
...then you put a full stop only if the first section is a sentence in and of itself. Do you see what I mean?
4. When you put a slang shorthand, such as 'gonna', put an apostrophe after or before it, depending on where it was shortened. "Get 'em," and "What're we gonna' do?" are examples.
Okay. I'm done. I'll be waiting for the next chapter.
| Kamakazikid8 chapter 4 . 2/12/2009
Personality: Slightly sadistic (just enough to enjoy the sadness of others and feel good when he ruins someones day.) with a great sense of right and wrong, tempermental, head-strong, hates to lose, vengful, kind, violent, stone-cold unless you really stand by him.
Flaws: His temper can get the best of him and he goes into rage when he loses. Also a bit arrogant.
Build: Athetic. Muscular but not body builder type, more like strong teenager.
Abilities: Control of the elements including sound and lightning.
Weapon of choice (melee): Twin Daggers.
Weapon of choice (long-range): Elements.
Background: An orphan who killed his parents and burned down his house at the age of 14. He is now a drifter who travels from place to place doing whatever he needs for food.
Appearence: Black hair that is tied into a low ponytail at the top of his neck. A black face-mask and long headband, leaving only his eyes visible. Two eye colors: one green, the other amber. Wears a black long-sleeved shirt and pants.
| T0M Serv0 chapter 4 . 7/8/2008
If you are still writing this, I would like to enter. I would also like to warn ya on potential OCs and if they're viable or not, so I would like to refer to you to the OC list!
One, you should've just said 'Accept OC's from those signed in' to prevent others from 'cheating' and submitting more characters under pseudonyms. But seeing as this isn't as important, I guess that advice was rather useless...
Two, you could've said to make these characters as detailed as possible. That is the most important thing. I mean, I get annoyed when I get these characters with 3-word personalities, barely any history, and believe it or not, they either all sound the same in emo-ness, or they're too perfect. That's why when I make characters, I only make one. See, what's better, 5 submitted cats with nothing to work with, or one that's very detailed? Not trying to make myself sound good, but being a veteran of OC fics, I know that to make a good story, you have to have good characters.
And three, if the authors who submitted these characters NEVER REVIEW OR EVEN READ YOUR FIC ANYMORE, then that's a cue to just kill off their character. Why waste your time trying to perfect their characters when they don't hardly drop it to comment on the fic's progress? These death threats usually work, and the most dedicated ones are the ones who bothered to flesh out their characters. It really narrows down the bulk of the OC's, from 25 odd ones to only 5.
Hope I lowered that bulk for ya!
| ClarinetWrathArineko chapter 4 . 8/16/2007
I understand the slow update thing, I go through it all the time!
Anyway, I still will let you use Reisa if you want.
| Lime-chan chapter 4 . 5/1/2007
Ne! Din-san! Where are yas? What happened to your storie worrie? *starts crying*
| Lime-chanKYU chapter 4 . 2/2/2007
NE! Din-san! You're torturning mes-su! *pulls her cat ears* Please update! *hugs your legs and starts crying* I'll draw you some more piccies!
| Destinysway114 chapter 4 . 9/29/2006
Nice chapter there. Keep up the good work. I reall like the idea, I could never remember all the OC's P. keep up the nice work, and update when you can, I understand about not using the comp...I have two brothers...I know how you feel.
| Ari Phoenix chapter 4 . 9/14/2006
I think you allready got it, but if you don't, look into your email for a couple of messages from me, and contact me if there is anymore info you need
as for the chapter, you answered my previous question, and also DDR rocks!
thats all for now, see you next chapter
PS. the saying with the taunt is either good bye then, or Bye bye Then.
| Ari Phoenix chapter 3 . 9/14/2006
One moer to go, and I'm caught up.
this was interesting, but why gannon and link, are you htinking of taking pity, or did you also pull names out of a hat?
| Ari Phoenix chapter 2 . 9/14/2006
Ok, that was interesting, but because you asked, the taunt for the character is her excape saying in the game with a wave.
| Ari Phoenix chapter 1 . 9/14/2006
ok, I think I will try to add to this.
| Tater Tot Ninja chapter 4 . 8/29/2006
ya, Am I allowed to add another character? I like to create characters and stuff...
Race: Moogle (from the FF series
Personality: very knowledgable for his age, he is full of common sense, but also has quite a sense of humour.
Flaws: Poog's curiosity often gets the better of him, and he has a fear of turnips...
Friends: Poog gets along very well with Mewtwo, Samus, Kirby, and both Ice Climbers. And DK too.
Enemies: Peach (she loves turnips...), and all the swordsman, and Mario, whom Poog considers to be his rival.
Appearance: A regular moogle, with cream-coloured wings, nose, and bobble thingy. Poog wears a farmer-style straw hat (with a hole for the bobble to go through), and a yellow samurai-style robe.
Weapon: Poog wears a crossbow hanging from his belt, and a naginata strapped across his back.
B- Crossbow (Poog fires his crossbow, much like Fox's blaster)
B- Orb (Poog launches a thunderball from his crossbow, and he controls it, like Zelda's B attack)
B- Flap (Poog's wings turn into large feathered wings and boost him upward)
vB- Gravity (Poog creates a black hole beneath himself, and all near opponents will be suck to the middle, and airborne opponents will be sucked down. All people will then be stunned for several seconds)
A- various slashes with his naginata