|Reviews for Voyeur Fifty|
| Anise Nalci chapter 1 . 11/26/2012
This was awesome! I actually really like this pairing in AF, quite unusual but oh so awesome! :)
| mollycoddle chapter 1 . 8/28/2010
I adore #46
| teapotpot chapter 1 . 7/14/2009
This is really beautiful. You've captured a lot of different facets of their potential relationship, and your writing style is so smooth - I love it! I especially liked Beginnings, Doors, Honor, Light, Regret, Summer, and War, but they were all lovely. Great work!
| Red Room Flare chapter 1 . 1/11/2007
The days for scheeming are marked in blue? Priceless!
Great work-there's a couple of ideas in there that I would just love to see played out into full-blown fics. You were really creative.
| kelsey chapter 1 . 1/3/2007
wow, that was amazing. less like FF and more like- i don't know the right word.
| The White Lily chapter 1 . 12/7/2006
Wow. That was *beautiful*.
My favourite line - or at least my first favourite line, because I continued to have them all the way through but don't want to quote the whole story back to you - is this one:
"She gives him a minute and he steals an hour; he asks for a day and she hands him a week; she draws the line at a month but he multiples until he’s got himself a year; he offers her his name and she declines but marries him anyway."
Okay, now I'm melted into a gooey puddle of Lily-ness, and it's all your fault. *points accusingly*
Some typos I saw:
"he let’s her" - lets
"They cocoons themselves in hotels sheets of butter cream" - cocoon, hotel/"the hotel's"
"it means nothing to him and less to her." meant - the tense changed halfway through the sentence
"its a disguised command" - it's, the contraction of "it is"
"and attracts all the men who earn for a woman dress in the color money" - I think it should be "yearn" and "dressed"
"heads or tales Arty" - I'm not sure whether this is intentional or not - maybe I'm missing the pun - but it should technically be "tails"
"a fulfilled dreams" - plural confusion
"it’s foil the color gold" - its, the posessive pronoun
"he hides it away incase" - in case is two words
"blind bastards" - should be preceeded by an opening quote
"its brutal and undeserving" - it's, the contraction of "it is"
"a young man bewitch" - bewitched
"The Nutcrackers" - The Nutcracker
I quite liked the non-chronological order, but it definitely made it more confusing. I don't think it was a problem, though, because I was definitely able to follow it, and it was fun in a way to get to the end of the sentence and have it suddenly click "Oh! That's when it was!".
I loved the Juliet reveal - I'd had no idea who she was until the first time you said her name, and that was fantastic, becuase it slotted into place and I thought of *course* it was Juliet. :)
Overall, a wonderfully magnificently beautiful story. Thanks for writing!
| the black knight chapter 1 . 8/10/2006
Very interesting. The wording was elegantly done.
| Haley Carr chapter 1 . 6/21/2006
that's amazing...really poetic
| shimmyshimmy93 chapter 1 . 6/17/2006
I... am... obsessed. Holy shnikees. Great story.
| Dim Aldebaran chapter 1 . 5/16/2006
Wonderful work! You make it all so plausible and elegant; my applause. I could go through and compliment each one individually, but I'm too lazy.
There was a few typos, but nothing major. Also, it would be nice if they were in chronological order, since they seemed mostly but not entirely so.
| altairity chapter 1 . 5/9/2006
ooh. so beautiful. i loved it, and i can't think of anything else to say but that.
| the Lunchbox chapter 1 . 5/5/2006
I REALLY liked that! SOmething about it made me sad. I really liked it though. That was probobaly my favorite fanfiction that I've ever read.
| bundlesojoy chapter 1 . 5/4/2006
way cool. very very nice work here.