Reviews for Colosseum
Stardawn chapter 2 . 4/27/2008
hmm. the way it ended implied that Barty already ate him, or was about to. Still, i really like it.
XxBlackChaosxX chapter 2 . 6/19/2006
Just a reminder. Bartimaeus Preferrs NOT to eat humans. He said it was like eating rotten seafood. 'Too much accumulated grime in each mouthful' If memory serves. Good story though. By the way, VERY muddled plotline. Can't find it at all. Oh well, I'll have to wait.
666XxXDarkheartXxX666 chapter 1 . 6/10/2006
Very good, though your right, your spelling is impecable. Great story, though, quite graphic, and slightly sickening, but it takes a true writer to add that kind of insight and detail, sickening or not.
XxBlackChaosxX chapter 1 . 5/17/2006
I like this. It seems like its Bartimaeus' past life. Probably is. Anyway, I can't wait to haer more.
mistressmarionette chapter 1 . 5/9/2006
First, I want to thank you for your review on Forget Me Not, it really made my day. And second, I have to say: AMAZING. BRILLIANT concept, and really inspiring; now I want to go back and read all the footnotes to see what else is there. This is SO original, and I think you really nailed your character's fears. It's really cool, also, how you told it from the human's point of view, not the spirits. Tho, having said that...have you thought of maybe doing a parallel chapter of the spirit's point of view on this? I think it would be really neat if you would...Excellent job! I hope you write more for the Bartimaeus Trilogy!
Bismillah chapter 1 . 5/6/2006
Interesting concept, quite an original idea, I believe. The bitterness was very clear and so was the eventual acceptance of fate, but I have a few things to note.

First off, grammar and spelling. There were a few mistakes here and there, such as:

"...the opened the barred doors opposite us."

I believe it should be "they" instead of "the." Sorry if this sounds too harsh, but I literally stumbled over that word when I read it, and I had to read the entire sentence again to make sure.

But more importantly, you mispelled a key word a few times in your story: Coliseum. You spelled it correctly in some parts (the title, the beginning note), but its incorrect throughout the actual story. It can be spelled as either "Coliseum" or "Colosseum."

Secondly, the historical accuracy of the story.

I got a bit bothered by the fact that you mentioned women and children being there in the Coliseum. I don't think that it was encouraged for women and children to be in attendance for these gladitorial combats. And it seems to me that only lower class women attended, and they were way up there, so I doubt that they could be seen. The Coliseum's really big after all.

Still, interesting concept. And forgive me if I have my facts wrong, I'm justn repeating all that I remember from the Coliseum. Still, it's an intriguing read.
Perennial Rhinitis chapter 1 . 5/6/2006
Well, I hope that this fic is not a one-shot because I would really like to know what will happen to the two 'gladiators'.
Coruscate Corruption chapter 1 . 5/5/2006
M, it was nice. Although, I don't know why the demon would have to be given rags, it could put any clothes on the body it pleases.