Reviews for Burnt Rice
We'rekindacrazylikethat chapter 2 . 11/24/2014
I, like, O-Ni-Gi-Ri! I, Miss, O-Ni-Gi-Ri! Leeks are tasty too! I, like, O-Ni-Gi-Ri!

But I feel like this story is a bit... Mature for me.. Please don't be offended if I decide not to read your story..
the hawk chapter 1 . 5/20/2013
wow to sad stop with this and make a akito as a boy. and make it akito loves tohru but a guy as akito like in the anima
CatalinaCatacylsmic chapter 8 . 7/8/2010
Your story is so beautiful. Besides Rosette-Cullen, you are my favorite, absolutely favorite fanfiction writer. You have such talent.

I read your prequel to this one straight through...and then finished this one in a couple hours. It's amazing.

I'd love to see Akito be such a bastard that he orders Tohru and Yuki to do stuff together just sos they can procreate another little kitty.

I'd also love to see Hatori get fed up with Akito, but I doubt that would happen.
MysticSorceror chapter 8 . 6/3/2008
Things I liked:

Nice use of description and setting

It's so sad how she wasn't able to complete her promise

I love how flustered Yuki seems

Wow, Tohru seems such a selfish bitch when she feels it's wrong for Taeko to smile

Good character interactions

I like seeing Aya's pride over Yuki's accomplishment

Poor Yuki, I love the description of him doing the speech

Nice end

Ways to improve:

Spelling error: You dare to ay such

MysticSorceror chapter 7 . 6/2/2008
Things I liked:

I really like how Tohru interacted with Takeo, it was sweet

Again nice writing style

Good explanation about the swing it's evident that you really think about your writing


Things that I didn't like:

I really dislike Tohru in this fic but I guess that's the point, god I feel Yuki's emotions. I actually want to kill her after what she tried to do to Kagura. I hate her, but that's probably because I'm becoming invested in this fic.
MysticSorceror chapter 6 . 6/1/2008
Things I liked:

Akito shutting them up is something he would do

As much as I dislike Tohru is this fic she is in character

Poor Yuki-kun *hugs him*

This conversation with Yuki actually saves Tohru a little in my opinion

Good descriptions

I feel sorry for Ha'ri at the end because of just how badly he's been beat

Ways to improve:

You've skipped over some words: "so I don't why he's"


Things that I didn't like:

Hatori seems too cold to me
MysticSorceror chapter 5 . 6/1/2008
Things I liked:

It's pretty sad how Kyo was treated after his death

I like how Hatori can have Akito listen to him

I like Hatori more in this chapter

Good character interactions

I like how scared Akito is of breaking any tradition

Nice mention of Akito's level of trust

I like Kagura's attitude about the funeral

I really did enjoy the interaction between Kagura and Akito

Ways to improve:

Some grammar/spelling issues: I not - I'm not


Things that I didn't like:

Not fond of the phrase: bruisy eyes / Why are you yelling for
MysticSorceror chapter 4 . 5/30/2008
Things I liked:

Aww the orange cat thing was cute

I love Shigure in this chapter

The dynamics between the three have become better but I still dislike Tohru in this fic

Poor Yuki, it's pretty sad but in character for Kagura to blame him

Great characterization

Aww Kazuma's fatherly thing makes me so sad, I love the father-son relationship

Nice comparison to the tea to the vomit - it's really sickening but I think it reflects the feel of the fic

Liked it better than last chapter


Things that I didn't like:

I really really dislike Tohru in this fic
MysticSorceror chapter 3 . 5/28/2008
Things I liked:

Nice opening, poor Yuki

You really were able to capture his thoughts

Wow he found Kyo's body that must be tormenting

Good characterization

I like how you mentioned that the news would kill Kazuma and Kagura

The mass grave was just so spooky

Wow the last line was just like Akito

Ways to improve:

Spelling issue: "On more puff"

Nice work


Things that I didn't like:

Some parts of this chapter really really confused me
MysticSorceror chapter 2 . 5/27/2008
Things I liked:

Yay Shigure sounds so happy in this part

Nice character interactions

I love the image of Shigure and Ayame playing horrible music together

Poor Yuki, how 'Gure remembers the past is a little upsetting

Wants to huggle Yuki, his pain is so saddening

Nice metaphors

Wow, nonsense about needing cats

I love what Yuki said about Akito and Tohru and Tohru's reaction makes me want to hate her

I do feel sorry about Akito in this part, it really is a medical problem that I had until I went on medication at seventeen so I identify with this. I handing you ammunition ;;


Things that I didn't like:

Neighbours? I thought they were in the middle of nowhere

I can't picture Shigure saying kick-ass

Hatori seems so cold and evil in this fic - it's a tad heartbreaking
MysticSorceror chapter 1 . 5/22/2008
Things I liked:

Nice opening I love the emotion and internal thought

Good interactions

Nice transition from the first story

Wow, has it stopped being stupid - I don't know whether that's funny or sad

I like Akito's insults they seem to fit his character "you little prostitute"

Poor Taeko - I feel so sorry for her

Excellent diction

Suck on his hand? o.O

No complaints

lindajrjt chapter 8 . 1/5/2008
I wonder if now is not the time to start making this story a bit happier? Maybe Akito can get better and love Tohru and Tohru can get her act together and finish school and love Akito in return. Just a thought so maybe you can end the story lol. You are a very good writer and I find the story quite interesting; but it would actually be nice to get some lighter moments in as well. Keep up the good work and good luck with writing more for this story.
liquid buzz chapter 8 . 12/4/2007
I read the entire fic you wrote before this one a while ago and really loved it.

I really want the rest of this fic, its one of the few i've ever found that genuinely interest me.
Raikune chapter 8 . 8/27/2007
Awesome! Sorry I took so long in reviewing! Akito trying to kill the Yuki fangirls was probably the funniest thing I've read in awhile. And how he has to have it so much worse then everyone else. Hahaha. I forgot what evil brat he could be _ And Hari being so protective! Fandoms may come and go but your first OTP is forever
the bird and the bee chapter 6 . 8/21/2007

this is beautiful.
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