wow I love it please update

That was sad. :(

I love it plesse updste

Great story, but very sad. can't wait till you write more. Please do soon!

Some parts are questionable but very good start. You have definitely hooked me to seeing the next chapter!

Considering it's so short right now, this is actually rather impressive. ) I hope to see more of this story soon! _

I like the start. Dr. Whoever huh; nice touch. You reeled me in here, so I hope you're going to continue this. It's a good story so far, and it has potential. I just wonder what are you going to do next in the next chapter?

' "You know, his skin was the exact same color as the pavement." Arnold choked out a laugh.' - why Arnold laughs here? That sounds kinda creepy. And it's difficult to believe that Gerald would act in such stupid way in that situation. And how is happened that Arnold narrated his story to Helga and Phoebe? The questions, questions... Well, I hope I'll know more later.

Pretty good start! Actually, Arnold would be the one trying to get the police's attention, since Gerald, even if not a coward, thinks a lot more about helping people than Arnold.

Keep the good writing.

Good storyline... I hope you update soon!