first time I've read an asshole shino kind of cool

So this is a same cannon story

Well this fic just went straight into my trash bun it was a good story until you started giving narutos jutsu out like candy. Your cant even stick to your own writing style.

The fact that you set up and then skip scenes is infuriating. I am well aware of the usual smooth brained comments you must get but come on my man.

You're doing good work but the skipping of scenes is very disorienting.

I still don't understand why did you had Naruto rage up like that and why did he kill haku
And the fact that this is too much like the original despite just Naruto training takes away from the thought that this is a fanfic. I mean what is the point of making it just so you can add some jutsu and still the same results occur and anything you have doesn't have any semblance or hinting creativity or motive of why should he create those jutsu
And the other problem is sasuke and sakura. In a right situation sasuke might or might not begrudgingly agree to work with Naruto, not atleast when he had to prove that he is better than everyone
And Naruto raging over them in the bridge is also impractical because the first time that Naruto had given control to the kyubi was because when he realised that he might have been able to make friends with sasuke when he had taken a hit for him. Not because he was sasuke but because it could have killed Naruto and the first time that he realised that he could have a friend he instanly had lost him, that had put him over the edge. He barely had a month of them and training and we know that there are many more others in the academy for Naruto to care like someone precious is lost when he saw sasuke or sakura. And he killed haku the one who he called first hi nee San and did not berate him for it and acted kindly to him, that's why he stopped when he did with haku on wave.
And after that here too you didn't explain why is he putting up with them he is just doing it nothing else.
No questioning his skils no berating no hatred from the village this almost seems pitiful and now give him a cursed mark of all things and not go over the fight or why should orochimaru use more chakra to put him down. Are you fucking kidding me all this is high bullshit even the ones who writes smut in the name of fanfiction uses some creativity over how would the interaction go here it is just recalling the past and going forward he is 12 for fuck's sake he is learning the ways he shouldn't have flashbacks this early this just feels wrong so I'm not going to continue reading this. And this is my personal opinion I'm not against anyone who enjoys this shit just a little agitated over the waste of time

This story is well written; IMO better even than cannon. The only issue is that I’m six chapters in and it’s 98% cannon. Combine that with a slow pace, and I’m having trouble convincing myself reading this is worthwhile, even if it is well written.

This story is way too much like the original rehash...

Kakashi literally just gave away narutos element of surprise, his giving the enemy information they could use against his student, they could create counter measures and as naruto doest even know they know of his abilities hid be left to the fishes

I want them to die. They have no right to steal the hard work of naruto ! I wat sakura sasuke et kakashi to be severely punished !

i want kakashi for die.!

i don't like sasuke et sakura attitude. I want that they die.

Story makes no sense and seems ... I'm not sure inconsistent is the word I'm looking for but it's something along those lines. Half-hearted? Somethingish like that.

First chapter and I like you already

Orochi and Kabuto always survives in fanfics seemingly no matter how OP Naruto is. It's getting tiresome

Sakura shouldn't give away Naruto's secrets if she hopes to regain his trust