Reviews for Legacy of the Rasengan I: Naruto |
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![]() ![]() ![]() so cringe ewwww |
![]() ![]() ![]() oh you said that it was going to tk be different well it wa snot much different than canon. so there is another reason that there is much more originality to be desired. |
![]() ![]() ![]() the memories that were played all sucked as well there were no happy memories in bis mind at all, but he would still be angry at haku for killing his teammates not friends and act like a shinobi does and avenge his teammates. in canon at least he had the memory of sasuke and him sitting on top of the tree at night after they completed the tree walking. i am just saying that he should put on another act for only caring for his teammates when they are training and on misisons and not at any other time as he creates another wall betwen them to not act like his actual personality. sorry man but this is so stupid of you write like that and stay away from canon characterisation when you change naruto so much. his need for attention is there but he gets that fulfilled from his pranks not from bothering other children. his need for love is different here as well as he wouldn't get it here as he saw their actual selves interactions with his acting self so as you have mde him more thoughtful here unlike canon naruto he should have just given up on it but still held out hope for something. i am going to repeat that one more time that those memories suck af, so fucking stupid to even put the word "good" in there. this naruto should just accept that they don't accept him through their actions as sakura always hits him for such pathetic purposes and sasuke always cares for himself and just straight up uses naruto as an ego booster. naruto does have that stupid connection with sasukue because of loneliness so he should have an olive branch for him if sasuke actually tried to further but he doesn't so your thoughtful naruto should understand that and not just be like canon naruto here. his determination to never give up should be tested here as he still wants to be friends with them but he doesn't try anymore as why should he always be rhe one to put his feet first. for a third time the memories are so fucking stupid hahahahaha |
![]() ![]() ![]() sorry man this is just so stupid here. they both treated him like a pest and don't care whatever happened to him at all and the shole sct he i putting is bullshit as well cause ahy would he pine for sakura when it doesn't matter for haiding his power. you are trying to follow canon here and that's fuking stupid. if you really wanted to potray that he is hiding his power,he should have just stayed silent and kept to himself in the back of the classroom and still be a dead last. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I loved the story! I was worried you were only going to follow the main plot line with your own twist, but I am glad you finally altered the story and made it your own (ex: having sasuke and Naruto have a draw at the VoTE). Great job! 9/10 |
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![]() ![]() ![]() I don't know. This is kinda ass. |
![]() ![]() Update? |
![]() ![]() ![]() first time I've read an asshole shino kind of cool |
![]() ![]() So this is a same cannon story |
![]() ![]() ![]() Well this fic just went straight into my trash bun it was a good story until you started giving narutos jutsu out like candy. Your cant even stick to your own writing style. |
![]() ![]() The fact that you set up and then skip scenes is infuriating. I am well aware of the usual smooth brained comments you must get but come on my man. You're doing good work but the skipping of scenes is very disorienting. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I still don't understand why did you had Naruto rage up like that and why did he kill haku And the fact that this is too much like the original despite just Naruto training takes away from the thought that this is a fanfic. I mean what is the point of making it just so you can add some jutsu and still the same results occur and anything you have doesn't have any semblance or hinting creativity or motive of why should he create those jutsu And the other problem is sasuke and sakura. In a right situation sasuke might or might not begrudgingly agree to work with Naruto, not atleast when he had to prove that he is better than everyone And Naruto raging over them in the bridge is also impractical because the first time that Naruto had given control to the kyubi was because when he realised that he might have been able to make friends with sasuke when he had taken a hit for him. Not because he was sasuke but because it could have killed Naruto and the first time that he realised that he could have a friend he instanly had lost him, that had put him over the edge. He barely had a month of them and training and we know that there are many more others in the academy for Naruto to care like someone precious is lost when he saw sasuke or sakura. And he killed haku the one who he called first hi nee San and did not berate him for it and acted kindly to him, that's why he stopped when he did with haku on wave. And after that here too you didn't explain why is he putting up with them he is just doing it nothing else. No questioning his skils no berating no hatred from the village this almost seems pitiful and now give him a cursed mark of all things and not go over the fight or why should orochimaru use more chakra to put him down. Are you fucking kidding me all this is high bullshit even the ones who writes smut in the name of fanfiction uses some creativity over how would the interaction go here it is just recalling the past and going forward he is 12 for fuck's sake he is learning the ways he shouldn't have flashbacks this early this just feels wrong so I'm not going to continue reading this. And this is my personal opinion I'm not against anyone who enjoys this shit just a little agitated over the waste of time |
![]() ![]() ![]() This story is well written; IMO better even than cannon. The only issue is that I’m six chapters in and it’s 98% cannon. Combine that with a slow pace, and I’m having trouble convincing myself reading this is worthwhile, even if it is well written. |
![]() ![]() This story is way too much like the original rehash... |