Reviews for Legacy of the Rasengan I: Naruto
Dragon Man 180 chapter 2 . 5/16/2006
Very nice start. Chapters are a bit short, but nicely done out. I don't think Iruka warmed up to Naruto so quickly, you might want to have a few more confrontations between them that aren't so happy. I hope Naruto will become good friends with Hinata soon, he needs friends very badly.
the DragonBard chapter 2 . 5/16/2006
Only problem I can see is the chapter is too short.

Naruto making his own jutsu? Cool!

Hope to see more soon.
saiyan prince1 chapter 2 . 5/16/2006
S'TarKan chapter 1 . 5/16/2006
It's a very cute beginning.

Are Naruto's clothes too large because they were cast-offs or because he plans to grow into them?

Is the AU part the fact that Naruto ran into Hinata on the way to his first day? (It says he already considered her a friend, which is in advance of canon.)

Also, would he neccesarily call her Hinata-chan right after first meeting her? And I don't think anyone has ever called him Uzumaki-san. )
Saotome Kyuubi chapter 1 . 5/16/2006
Nicely written chap, with an interesting setting but could be longer though. Anyways keep it up...
Ethan Darkcrow chapter 1 . 5/15/2006
I have read your first chapter and have to say that I very much like you style of writing...its easy on the eyes and seems to flow very well. The discriptions of the characters and surroundings as well as their action are all well done. I can find nothing wrong with your writing, not to say that I was going to find something. The only complaint that I have is...


Have a great time writing the rest of your story! Bye!
Omegaguardian chapter 1 . 5/15/2006
Nice beginning for a potentially great story. Keep it up! Update soon!
LoveDetermination chapter 1 . 5/14/2006
A great start. If a story was the hook on the fishing line then I, as the fish, am caught. I look foward to see how you develope this plot.
Hanyou Rakuen chapter 1 . 5/14/2006
great start! hope you update soon
nikasont chapter 1 . 5/14/2006
well this looks like its going to be a great story someday. good luck .
the DragonBard chapter 1 . 5/14/2006
Interesting idea.

Why is Kurenai in charge of Hinata so early?
Moshulel chapter 1 . 5/14/2006
The story shows promise ... although i would change the pairing ( not another NaruHina please )
Elemental Balance chapter 1 . 5/14/2006
Interesting start. I like the idea of having Naruto and Hinata meet at the begining, it paves the way for more interaction later on. Keep going, I'm adding this to my alert list!
vavoysh chapter 1 . 5/14/2006
this is a good start to a story

however, for a moment, i thought that naruto was the chuunin

why would he need to get up at 6:30 am though? that seems early for school

please update soon!
Mealstorm chapter 1 . 5/14/2006
Good one ... little short ( you already pointed why ) ... I'm expecting more ... update soon
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