|Reviews for Blurred Visions|
| kikioblack chapter 1 . 12/3/2006
I feel bad for him too. well, both of them. It's hard when you lose a parent.
That was a good story. ~sniffs~
| commun sa va chapter 1 . 5/18/2006
why is this in the mokuba section. it's a great story but it has nothing to do with him!
| Dark Qiviut chapter 1 . 5/17/2006
It was very sad, and I enjoyed it. I can see Seto doing something like this if he had a locket.
I enjoy reading this fanfic. Great job.
| melzart chapter 1 . 5/17/2006
That was sad! How else could it be anyway? You're right, must be awful to loose their parents. Well written too. But I was just wandering, while you were writing it, have you ever had an image or sort of portrait of what her mother looked like? I mean, her face, her eyes... you know? Did he remember? Does he? (smile) Well, thanks. That was nice and adorable. But short! lol
| Faith68 chapter 1 . 5/17/2006
Excellent idea for a story, I always enjoy a take on Seto's softer side, and I've never read a fic for Mother's Day. The only problems I had with story were tiny grammar things-missing words, awkward phrasing, etc. For example, "He was tied onto a bitter memory..." should be "He was tied TO a better memory." Also, the setting is not clearly stated in the opening paragraphs, nor is it clarified throughout the story, which confuses the reader, so you might want to make it a little more evident WHERE exactly Seto and Mokuba are. Also, there are a couple sentences here and there where you left out words by accident. Simple mistakes, but I think if you fixed them, your fic would be much more powerful.
In any case, I enjoyed this very much and hope to see more of your writing! Happy writing!
| Simply Alex chapter 1 . 5/16/2006
So Sweet! That was a great little fic, wonderful job!