|Reviews for Sceptre of YuYevon|
| Calvin Sloan chapter 1 . 9/1/2013
You need to update. Don't leave us hanging?
| Kist chapter 1 . 9/28/2007
um... your story is nice so far, but you need to be a bit more discrete in your statements. For example, instead of bluntly stating: He found a sword, try: Glancing swiftly to the side, a soft gleam admist to sea of forest green caught his eye. He curiously approached, wary of ambush, and was surprised to find a large sword, winking at him gently in the morning sun. His fingers slid over the hilt as though they belonged, as though they were waiting all this time to hold this... masterpeice.
You get it.