|Reviews for Black Eyes|
| Verity Kindle chapter 8 . 7/8/2006
This chapter needs some editing. All-dialogue chapters are tricky and this one drags in the middle. I love the story overall. All meant in the spirit of respect and constructive criticism. Thanks. I look forward to the next chapter!
| ArwenEvenstar83 chapter 8 . 7/8/2006
He groaned and hid his head in his hands. “Father should never have let you read all those books on warfare. Let me tell you, little sister, one of these days they are going to lead you into serious trouble.”
Eh..yup, because it's dangerous for a woman to know the Art of War, because we can get pretty angry and do some irrational things..
“Indeed he does,” Lothiriel nodded, “he’s got that ridiculous idea that Éomer and I would be well suited. Absurd, isn’t it?”
Absurd, but he does have a point..they're very alike.
With a sniff Lady Idril went to do as she was told, her disapproval visible in every line of her stiff back. Her sense of propriety had been sorely tested by the events of the day.
A bit over-proctective..don't you think? or just really weird..or whatever, I'm hungry, and irriated from straightening my hair, so don't mind my non-making-sense-ness.
Lothiriel lifted one eyebrow. “I will be perfectly fine,” she replied evenly. After all she had just spent half a day marooned on an island with Éomer completely on her own. What did the woman think he would do to her here in her own rooms?
Yea..they were all by themselves on that island, don't you think he'd whatever she was thinking /on the island/ where they're alone and not in her own rooms where anyone can burst in and guards are all over the place? sheesh..anyway, very lovely (I've been using lovely alot lately, I just bring myself to say good, great, or awesome..) chapter, keep on writing!
| Verity Kindle chapter 7 . 7/6/2006
Great chapter. The dialogue has a lot of energy and the story moves along at a good pace. Eomer, you studmuffin! I'd rescue him any time. Rowr.
| Violin Ghost chapter 7 . 7/4/2006
Oh... I wonder what Eomer and Imrahil are planning. Most suspicious.
I liked this chapter very much, except for the fact that Eomer seemed very unlike himself when speaking to Ivriniel. He lost his temper too easily for my liking, but aside from that, this chapter was marvellous.
| Narnian Sprite chapter 7 . 7/3/2006
Very good, indeed! Please update again soon, and I am very happy that you are feeling somewhat better!
| LOCISVU chapter 7 . 7/3/2006
Good for Eomer standing up to Rohan's help,Gondor would have been lost to Sauron's forces.
| Tracey chapter 7 . 7/3/2006
Ha ha! The cloak certainly got the job done!
So, he's going to collect it later, is he?
I think Imrahil has a inkling what's going on, certainly more of one that Lothiriel herself!
The entire premise of the story and events thus far...I don't think you could pull me away from this story by force. ;)
| RedCinders chapter 7 . 7/3/2006
OH! this is getting very very very good! I can't wait for the next installment! yay ..please update ASAP!
| A Vermilion Memory chapter 7 . 7/3/2006
That was an excellent chapter!
I liked it alot.
I can't wait for the next installment!
| sister kitty chapter 7 . 7/3/2006
I go away for training and come back to two lovely chapters...
| wondereye chapter 7 . 7/3/2006
well it looks like a small retreat for Eomer and Lothriel
look forward to the next chapter to see what happens next
| Lady Anck-su-namun chapter 7 . 7/2/2006
Great job - Eomer is so great! I can't believe she's still holding out! This chapter was good - I smiled the whole time reading it!
| Willow-41z chapter 7 . 7/2/2006
I really liked the dialogue in this. It was very well written, and portrayed the characters very well.
This whole chapter was good, so I don't know what parts to comment on, but I liked the characterization of Aunt Ivriniel as a battering ram, and the whole scene with her and Eomer. This Eomer is a bit more short-tempered and a bit of a scoundrel, it seems, and it makes for very amusing exchanges!
The way Lothiriel ended up defending Eomer was cute, and the silent exchange between the two guys at the end was good. The part with the cloak was quite amusing, as was Lothiriel's remark about drowning.
| Elwen of Lorien chapter 7 . 7/2/2006
Like the ocean, the tides are turning in Lothiriel's life. When we think they are receding, we learn they are only just beginning. Elwen.
| Lady Bluejay chapter 7 . 7/2/2006
A way to go yet then? That's good - lovely dialogue. I like the titles - I am quite getting into titles!LBJ