|Reviews for Black Eyes|
| Lady Anck-su-namun chapter 2 . 5/28/2006
Great chapter - poor Eomer, he's trying so hard...she'll regret it!
| lady scribe of avandell chapter 2 . 5/28/2006
And poor Eomer! How cruel of Lothiriel, to not even tell him he's in the middle of a war! The dear doesn't even know what he's gotten himself into!
As for Aunt Ivriniel, I certainly hope we see more of her. I quite liked her little bit in this chapter. She's very...opinionated. I rather imagine her as being very similar to one of the evil witches/ladies in the old Disney animations. Like Maleficent from Sleeping Beauty, only sharper.
I do believe you've caught Eomer's personality very well. I love how icy and cold he was all of a sudden when Lothiriel mentioned that they could have "arrangements on the side." I do wonder what he's going to do now though. I'd probably go to Imrahil and tell him it's just not going to work out. But then again, Eomer's a bit more stubborn than I am.
Sere mi Eru...LSoA
| eyes of sky chapter 2 . 5/28/2006
for want of a coherent metaphor, that was like...tennis with spears! a crash course of "how to not be wooed" slash "how to play the completely ungracious hostess". i must say i am deeply impressed by lothiriel's wide range of defence, she's obviously quick-witted. i forsee some anger after that affair swipe though... i loved the description of aunt Ivriniel, like a golden battering ram! with about as much subtlety and danger. the chapter had me bursting out in laughter all the way through, at the most inopportune moments of course :)
and seriously, don't be apologetic for the sea creature, we readers love a mystery, it is the author's duty to throw up a couple, and that was exceptionally masterful! i definitely appreciated something a little less shallow than usual from fanfiction, if that makes sense
| Willow-41z chapter 2 . 5/28/2006
Oh, this is great!
| Nemea chapter 2 . 5/28/2006
This was incredible!
I had so much fun reading this chapter. First aunt Ivriniel, who is ... you know ... could say best weapon to cast away any suitor *g*. I love her!
And then this scene in the garden... Dear, give me that man! Wow, I want him. He so cute.
Poor Lothiriel - it would have been easier to keep her plan up with him being ugly and unfriendly, won't it?
I'm so looking forward to the next chapter and really hope they can find together. (Even if this thing with the ponies ... it was hard.)
Viele liebe Grüße,
| Lady Bluejay chapter 2 . 5/28/2006
Lia, you have surpassed yourself:this was indeed masterly. The conversation between our wonderful Horselord and the dreaded Aunt had me reeling. I love his character. I can't wait to see how you are going to change things around!LBJ
| Frigg chapter 2 . 5/28/2006
Hm, interesting indeed ... Ivriniel is some lady, but of course Éomer is not one to back down from a challenge ... and by the way, Lothíriel is likely to become one, too.
| Tuima chapter 1 . 5/27/2006
Hah! Brilliant. A wonderfully conniving version of our beloved princess... I loved it!
| ccjj chapter 1 . 5/27/2006
Oh I love this fanfic plz update
| Maddy051280 chapter 1 . 5/26/2006
I'm wondering about the title. Does it have anything to do with this widely announced, ominous sea creature?
Or do we have to expect some sort of boxing match and Lothíriel and/or Éomer ending up with one/both eyes blackened? That would be definitely a brand new take of their relationship.
So, don't let us wait too long for the continuation.
Best wishes from the beautiful Mediterranean Island of Mallorca,
| ArwenEvenstar83 chapter 1 . 5/25/2006
Lady Idril looked close to fainting and sat down heavily on the bed, startling Lothiriel’s dog that had been dozing there. The great deerhound stretched and gave a huge yawn, regarding its mistress sleepily. Lothiriel thought wryly that the dog with its long slender legs, dainty ears and gracefully curved tail was now the most elegant being in the room. Was she just imagining the surprise in Anca’s eyes?
uhh...ew! very unmatching, but then, who cares? especially if she's trying to drive him away..*grins*
The transformation was remarkable, warming his eyes and making him seem years younger. He clapped Imrahil in an embrace, obviously pleased to see him, and Lothiriel wondered if she had imagined things, being so much on edge herself. Her father returned the embrace warmly and then turned to her.
Maybe he was reminded about it when talking to her brothers..
Easy to do, she thought, when it wasn’t his future at stake.
to true, but it's still funny anyway..
She was a warrior’s daughter, she would at least go down fighting.
Yea, atleast she would do that. and I don't think I can find the sponge/dead sea creature, anyway, awesome start, keep on writing!
| eyes of sky chapter 1 . 5/25/2006
of course she definitely should have worn green, this way she is only making herself stand out! how ironic. typical lothi. but i don't know about the sea creature, unless it's anca... or it could be a vague reference to the women who looked like a sea of green? you're very sneaky, and that question is going to haunt me forever now! i am on tenterhooks to see her next strategy..attack or retreat?
| wondereye chapter 1 . 5/24/2006
great start. I can almost see the hate and loathing
in her stance to him. I hope Eomer gets the plot quick.
| Willow-41z chapter 1 . 5/24/2006
This looks interesting. Poor Lothiriel only has twenty-four hours?
I like your characterizations of Eomer and Lothiriel; they're subtly different enough from those in "Falcons and Mumakil" that they stand out as memorable. This ought to be interesting... waiting for the next update!
| Tehd00d chapter 1 . 5/24/2006
Here we go again! Another immensely promising story!
I'm liking it so far, in case you couldn't tell. Eomer's not tripping over himself like a little schoolboy (yet), and that fact alone comforts me greatly. I really can't stand the stories where he's a bumbling idiot. I picture him to be cool, controlled, very smart, but likeable at the same time. I picture him to be opinionated, but hesitant to express these opinions. Not particularly emotional, but still loving and compassionate for the most part. Above all, though, I picture him to be always on top of things and ever observant.
I also like how this seems to be sticking to Lothiriel's perspective. In your last story about these two, you did an good job portraying the male mind, but I still prefer it when an author of the opposite sex doesn't risk it that much (I certainly wouldn't be disappointed or anything if a chapter or two is told from his perspective, though). About 7/10 authors on this site miss the male mind by a mile or two (you're not one of them, though). I think one of the primary things they miss is in thinking that men think of women the same way women think of men.
I really picture Eomer's view of Lothiriel as this: "I liked her. I liked her a lot. Then one day, it just dawned on me that I loved her." (Words of Jimmy Stewart in the movie Shennandoah). There's no passionate love affair, no unhealthy obsession, just respect and affection that eventually turns into real love.
Anyway, I have virtually no critique regarding this first chapter! EXCELLENT stuff! Keep it up...