|Reviews for Taking Control|
| Guest chapter 28 . 10/22/2014
"I've allowed you absolute free reign." Rein.
"large fine you'll be levelled with" levied, no with.
A...strange place to end. But I enjoyed reading the lot, for all that Ron and Hermione were being pigheadedly themselves.
| Guest chapter 25 . 10/22/2014
"Alohamora" is not how it's spelled.
| Guest chapter 24 . 10/22/2014
"during the throws of a vision. " throes
Ron being in the right? Happens sometimes!
| Guest chapter 23 . 10/22/2014
Took long enough for mind speech to resurface.
| Guest chapter 22 . 10/22/2014
| Guest chapter 21 . 10/22/2014
"Loathe as he was" loath.
| Lycanthromancer chapter 10 . 10/21/2014
Perhaps you should go back to not having a beta, if this is the first one that's been edited. It's actually worse than your previous chapters. Unless I'm mistaken and the previous 9 have been gone over by now?
Either way, this chapter needs some looking at.
| Guest chapter 19 . 10/21/2014
"Harry could care less." Couldn't.
"Voldemort to have free reign" rein
He does love ruining Harry's holidays.
| Guest chapter 17 . 10/21/2014
"just let me have free reign. " rein. After your gotten all the other times right too.
"repeatedly baring the scrutiny " bearing
"You snogged Ginny, didn't you? Prongs wore that same stupid grin the first time he kissed Lils" doesn't snogged have a rather stronger rand in British English?
I know it's wrong but Hermione will be thrilled that Harry finally has grief.
"Blasthing Hex, "
"The one casualty" I suppose fatalities are a subset of casualties.
"one in the same" one and the same
| Guest chapter 15 . 10/21/2014
He could compromise and teach Aurors.
"Nine Inch Wands" Brilliant. Just brilliant. And brazen.
"He could care less about this band" couldn't
"And then it happened." Bait and switch, well done. Of course Harry can't have good things. He is Harry Potter. Effective.
| Guest chapter 13 . 10/21/2014
"that kind of small affections" affection
Not sure why I didn't compliment it earlier but it is a good catch how Harry never needs a haircut and thus has some skill there.
| Guest chapter 12 . 10/21/2014
The utter lack of ANYONE but friends in Harry's "office" is getting a bit silly.
"cast a reparo charm to fix the crack in it" I'll be surprised if this suffices. Also surprised it cracked, given the safety enchantments, but it's a plot thing.
Pranks as unpredictable as the staircases? Brilliant.
"It couldn't hurt to try, right?" MOR!McGonagall would have your HEAD for this.
"he was obviously weary of making Harry any angrier" wary
"He managed to make her feel his magic" I suppose given the title that it makes sense that he is not consulting other professors and experts on his new groundbreaking magical discoveries, but it still feels odd. Maybe not so much for Harry.
"Harry would have to learn how to dance. " The RoR can provide dueling dummies to sling spells. Dance partners would be orders of magnitude easier.
" the spirit of the Marauder's" Marauders.
"Harry watched Ron Professor McGonagall continued to talk. " Ron as. Ron Professor McGonagall sounds...horrifying.
| Guest chapter 11 . 10/21/2014
"The site can be found at ." Unsurprisingly, ff censors ate the URL.
"I see one, besides Ginny," ah good, not pure het.
For that I point out the mistakes you make, you consistently get free rein right, which many do not.
"Before you wonder off Neville" wander
Uh oh, do we need an accidental magic reversal squad?
"No one seemed to mind the chance to take a break from studying" oh? Where's Hermione?
"Madame Malkins" Malkin's
"Parvarti" Parvati. Many times.
"another thing coming" think, is how the idiom goes.
I can't really blame Ron for wanting to win without the-man-the-myth-the-legend The-Boy-Who-Lived, but he has been a prat.
| Guest chapter 10 . 10/21/2014
"have to keepto keep"
"keeping teaching " keep
Am wondering when Harry speaks to Em, Fawkes, et cetera. Probably Ginny too since she's got a cat form. It seems "bloody obvious" as thickhesd Ron would put it.
"Now are you gonnagoing "
"glad he leant her his Firebolt " lent
| Guest chapter 9 . 10/21/2014
"Barnabus the Barmy" Barnabas
"He was weary about showing off" wary
"It appears that Mrs. Weasley" appeared
"but he was beginning to grow weary." Correct!
"led him to a cough" couch
You left it unclear for a bit that it's actually not Hermione. And she would.