|Reviews for Grey Maiden III: Servant of Darkness|
| Guest chapter 15 . 3/11/2014
The problem with Luna here is... her character isn't ethereal enough. True, she's still quirky, clever, and altogether a very Luna person, she's not very airy-fairy, if you take my meaning. She's just all quirk.
| Guest chapter 14 . 3/11/2014
"Confusing Signals" all right. I don't like Harry/Ginny and although this is more realistic than what it is in canon, it's... weird.
| Guest chapter 1 . 3/11/2014
I love the way you write out the backstory. And I can't wait to see Sirius on the playing field again! :)
| nightwing27 chapter 21 . 2/24/2014
good thing my story is almost ready and in it peter will never see the light by the end of the third year and the fourth year harry will make sure that death eater crouch be taken down before he could put harry's name on it the war in my story will end in 4th year
| darkanomoly chapter 13 . 2/10/2014
Ahh I'm stopping here for a mo ' because it is 1:45 AM. I'm a little... A lot behind in this series but I am thoroughly enjoying it. I especially love the references you make like the chopping down a tree with a herring from Monty Python.
| Noble Korhedron chapter 21 . 7/14/2013
ULP... So ol' Moldyshorts IS in Albania after all... :-(
| Noble Korhedron chapter 7 . 7/14/2013
W.T.F?! Vampires...?! I must've skipped over that part...
| Noble Korhedron chapter 2 . 7/13/2013
"You had just better hope that Remus or Harry never find out. I won't stop them," she whispered. "We all have our secrets, don't we, Severus." ULP...!
| Noble Korhedron chapter 1 . 7/13/2013
Hmmm, oh-oh! He might be innocent, but even if Daphne believed him, she'd never just hand Harry over like some freed hostage...
| DaisyKitten chapter 10 . 12/8/2012
Can't Create Food!
| DaisyKitten chapter 9 . 12/8/2012
You can't Conjure food.
| dreamy4mcdreamy chapter 7 . 11/6/2012
I haven't finished reading your series yet (what you've written of it), but it just occured to me that Luna might be able to make the Longbottoms sane again... it would be great if she did :D
| mariastella chapter 5 . 7/22/2012
His mood turned somber.
Sombre, actually... if you're subscribing to UK English writing conventions.
"There is no fouler odor
I'm not "someone," I'm youthe exasperated voice reminded him
"Careful, Potter, don't make generalizations."
The door was closed He wasn't sure...
Add a period after closed
It's dangerous if his reaction time in as slow as it has been.
IS as slow
Very good chapter! :)
| mariastella chapter 4 . 7/22/2012
We hadn't seen Bill is ages
And is your mind healing on it's own?
| mariastella chapter 3 . 7/22/2012
But I don't have much here, and if we're to compete, the place has to be clean enough to eat off of."
'Off of' is an Americanism. Remove the extra 'of'.
"I'm barely recovered from the last one."
- I've barely
"then downed in one motion."
"Harry would become the Boy-Who-Lived That had forced Remus to flee England."
Either 'That' is the start of a new sentence or it's a part of Harry's moniker - as in, 'Boy-Who-Lived-That'.
"is it that both women would eventually date a Marauder, and one of them marry one?"
I think that phrase needs to be clarified... and 'is' needs to be capitalized.