|Reviews for Out of Control|
| amyh52 chapter 10 . 3/11
love the story
| amyh52 chapter 5 . 3/11
this is crazy ahhh
| eagermeager chapter 4 . 9/21/2012
Derek snorted. "I wish. Truth is… it's the only thing I think about."
See, you can't have Derek just spill the beans. He's not overtly honest like that, which is why the character is falling flat. Derek teases, retaliates, pranks but he's not emotional. Not like that.
Also; try and add banter between the two of them. They aren't saccharin sweet around the other.
| eagermeager chapter 3 . 9/21/2012
The stories are gradually getting better, as is your character depth. I rather like the way you have your plot going.
| Dark-Supernatural-Angel chapter 10 . 3/18/2011
Considering what they've gone through, I'm glad for Dasey being together!
I guess George and Nora aren't stopping them.
Nicely done for this sequel!
| Dark-Supernatural-Angel chapter 9 . 3/18/2011
It's just not Casey's month (
| Dark-Supernatural-Angel chapter 8 . 3/18/2011
Oh I had a feeling Casey might be! Derek REALLY needs to wake up now!
| Dark-Supernatural-Angel chapter 6 . 3/18/2011
I hope Casey doesn't get caught and that Derek isn't severely injured.
Glad for Marti!
| Dark-Supernatural-Angel chapter 5 . 3/18/2011
NO! I wasn't expecting this to happen in the story!
| Dark-Supernatural-Angel chapter 4 . 3/18/2011
Everything was going perfectly until Derek made that comment and the shot inside. *sigh* Doesn't seem like Dasey is getting a break.
| Dark-Supernatural-Angel chapter 3 . 3/18/2011
Damn it! Why did she have to break away again? *sigh*
Derek looks jealous ;D
| Dark-Supernatural-Angel chapter 2 . 3/18/2011
Loving Derek's reaction to Casey D
Aww, at least Casey didn't forget about the younger kids even though it takes her away from Derek.
| Dark-Supernatural-Angel chapter 1 . 3/18/2011
Glad to see that their one night together hasn't left either of their minds.
| ImOnlyYourKitten chapter 10 . 9/17/2009
aww i loved it :)
you should write a sequel to this one lolz :)
but no seriously i loved it :)
u have potantial (if thats how you spell it lolz but i think you get the idea right?lolz)
| midnightjen chapter 10 . 2/28/2009
man, i was like how many things can go wrong? you should never ask that. the answer is always something you wont like. but this was brilliant. loved ot.