|Reviews for Cursed?|
| Hairul The Nightrage Beast chapter 5 . 11/14/2008
Damn that was a good story, but I feel Beast Boy's more suited as a Melodic Death metal head especially Children Of Bodom. He looks cool with the COBHC Hate Crew Deathroll Hoodie, Suomi Finland Perkele Shirt, Lion Of Finland tattoo, Guyliner and Black nail polish like Laiho and serpent tattoo on his ring finger the same as Raven (It's like the one Alexi Laiho and Kimberly Goss sports).
| beautifulpurpleflame chapter 5 . 9/1/2006
Very cool story. I really enjoyed it. In the future, though, and this is just my opinion, leave the author's notes out only because it takes me out of the story and I hate that. If you want to tell the reader something say it before or after the chapter. Anyway, this was a very good story and I hope you write some more!
p.s. Thanks for dedicating the story to me! :)
| futuremarine1000 chapter 5 . 8/18/2006
nice story im glad you didnt throw marylin manson whatever his name is 1 he aint goth music he is heavy metak 2 i just dont support anyone who has a super mega babe for wife and then has there lower 2 ribs remove so they can blow themselves
| benignfacade chapter 5 . 6/8/2006
Nice story. I've checked your profile and it seems we like a lot of similar bands (Pantera and Slayer are the shit!). I'm hoping you'll check out my story when I publish it (hopefully by tomorrow). If you want to know what it's about, then check out my profile. Again, nice story. And that is an encouragement to keep writing!
Seed-O-Meter Rating: 4 out of 5 stars!
| Agent of the Divine One chapter 5 . 6/6/2006
Cool. The confession however was a little rushed. Also, I think it would have added something if you had Cyborg delegate the responsibility of explaining what porn is to Robin. That would most certainly be an entertaining scene to narrate. :)
| Sworn in the Metal Wind chapter 5 . 6/5/2006
I liked the idea, but youve warped the Titans so much out-of-character its not even funny. The writing itself wasnt bad but those damn in-text A/Ns saying: Like this-and-that from that movie is just lazy and unimaginative. Just because youve seen the movie doesnt mean the rest of us goes for music, just blabbing groups is a bad idea. Pick a few songs and try to describe them instead.
Pet Peeve #346, Raven isnt goth.
"“AHH!” he screamed and clutched his neck. “It scratched me!”
Raven quickly flew over to the prankster and protected him with her shield. “Where? Let me see.” She asked concerned."
Shed not be that concerned over a small scratch. At most shed tell him to ignore it until the mission was finished. If anyone should act like that, Id be Beast Boy.
"“Jesus! That was weird!” Beast boy yelled. “At least they didn’t get the jugular!”"
Beast Boy wouldnt know a jugular if it smacked him in the face.
And here the real OOC begins. Raven wouldnt smile just like that, nor use the phrase 'Cant a girl'. Beast Boy wouldnt snap like that at Raven to her face, nor would Raven argue back. Shes more likley to just stare him down. Ravens tantrum in chapter five should lead to half the tower blowing up, at least. Shes the stoic one, remember?
I dont have the strength to point out more, but you should take it down, find a good beta and rewrite it.
And why is it, that every BBXRae fic I find has that horrid and vile OOC-ridden declaration of love? Raven would just come out and say it without any ridiculous speeches. Beast Boy might do something like that, but it would be goofy rather than silly, over-the-top, disgustingly pretentious and filled with so much urple Im choking on it. To tell the truth Ive never seen a romance fic involving Raven that didnt went OOC. Shes not going to turn sugary sweet, nor would she enjoy cutsey nick-names.
| Good or Bad chapter 1 . 6/4/2006
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