|Reviews for Harry Potter and the Orb of Slytherin|
| peggy77 chapter 11 . 8/10/2021
I think her biggest mistake was putting Ron and Hermione together. I honestly like Harry and Hermione but I like Harry and Ginny, too.
And I like Ron, unlike many who seem to hate him. But Ron and Hermione? Nope. No way would that have ever worked. Lavender was definitely closer to his type.
| TriesHardToWrite chapter 1 . 8/13/2019
Haven’t started reading this, but you should mark this as “completed” that way others will find it easier as they browse. Since I came here from portkey
| Unknown chapter 8 . 6/24/2019
This is a really good story so far and frankly I don't mind the flashback/flashforward thing. It's not so hard to keep track of it if you try hard enough. Good job
| marvinkitfox1 chapter 5 . 6/5/2018
Your flackback(flashforward) flash(backforward)
sidewaysflash, and bloody Immelmann-loop flashes are FUCKING RIDICULOUS
You, and your story, can PISS OFF AND DIE!
| marvinkitfox1 chapter 2 . 6/5/2018
ok, so the summary of the story so far is:
harry is outside grimmauld in december,
then he gets caught in a timewarp and appears in a bed, location undisclosed.
He reminisces about 3 weeks ago.
Which causes him to timewarp to *4* weeks ago, near a burned-out house.
The timewarp briefly destabilizes, dropping him outside Grimmauld back (forward) to december.
but then stabilizes again, dropping him in a fight with ron in some sort of black house.
| Nemo Blank chapter 5 . 10/10/2017
The only thing that you could do to make this worse would be to make up your own language and throw big blocks of it into the middle of every paragraph, followed by a translation in parentheses. This is just too big a hassle to try and read. It's a pity because it has potential, but I'm not going to be filling out the supplementary timeline sheet to try and keep track of what is happening. Fortunately there are a billion other stories in the naked city, so ta.
| Locothehood chapter 26 . 8/17/2017
Nice open ended wrap up there at the end it was an enjoyable ride.
Makes me wonder were you will go from here
Personally i think you may want to try your hand at a crossover showing what world the dim lord has landed in. He still has his wand his magic just no way out of his cage all on his own.
| HAEVs Sha chapter 2 . 7/16/2017
I hate it when you make the story jump forward and suddenly jump backward, then forward again.
| BillBrink chapter 26 . 7/14/2015
Once again, thank you for sharing this terrific story. I enjoyed it as much the second time as I did the first. Wish you would share another.
| Blyth chapter 14 . 3/11/2015
What a piece of crap. You jump around like a frog on a griddle.
| Man of Constant Sorrow chapter 26 . 3/4/2015
I'm always the champion of the ideal that a writer should write what they want, that being said, your stance on your style of presenting this fic, is frankly ridiculous. There is such a thing as making things user friendly, if things aren't user friendly they aren't used, your story is difficult to read, and your story isn't being read. Its a simple as that.
Feel free to stick to your guns, but your overcomplicating things unnecessarily.
I and other readers don't want to adapt to your writing style, tha t's too much like work, I read for fun and leisure, I shouldn't have to write down a timeline and notes to know what the hell is going on.
Add in the gap between updates and its a recipe for a story that won't get read.
Look I love Harmony stories and try to never critique them but I see the potential in this story if only you'd let it shine through.
Despite my criticism
I thank you for sharing and wish you all the best in your writing.
| anyone chapter 26 . 2/8/2015
It's quiet good. I'm a harry/hermione shipper and i totally felt that this story is a 26 chapter of justice. I like the back and forth twist but the ending to me is a bit rush. The golden trio characters in here are almost similiar to the original and that's a good thing. the cliff hanger makes me wonder what will happen next? Is there a new story? I say you have a talent for writing, ever cross your mind to make it professional? Sorry for my bad english i'm not a native english speaker.
| fraewyn chapter 26 . 2/4/2015
Look forward to it!
| anotherboarduser chapter 26 . 2/4/2015
| teachergirl chapter 2 . 2/4/2015
I give up. I can't follow anything with you jumping around in time all the time.