I think her biggest mistake was putting Ron and Hermione together. I honestly like Harry and Hermione but I like Harry and Ginny, too.

And I like Ron, unlike many who seem to hate him. But Ron and Hermione? Nope. No way would that have ever worked. Lavender was definitely closer to his type.

Haven’t started reading this, but you should mark this as “completed” that way others will find it easier as they browse. Since I came here from portkey

This is a really good story so far and frankly I don't mind the flashback/flashforward thing. It's not so hard to keep track of it if you try hard enough. Good job

Your flackback(flashforward) flash(backforward)
sidewaysflash, and bloody Immelmann-loop flashes are FUCKING RIDICULOUS
You, and your story, can PISS OFF AND DIE!

ok, so the summary of the story so far is:

harry is outside grimmauld in december,
then he gets caught in a timewarp and appears in a bed, location undisclosed.
He reminisces about 3 weeks ago.
Which causes him to timewarp to *4* weeks ago, near a burned-out house.
The timewarp briefly destabilizes, dropping him outside Grimmauld back (forward) to december.
but then stabilizes again, dropping him in a fight with ron in some sort of black house.

?

The only thing that you could do to make this worse would be to make up your own language and throw big blocks of it into the middle of every paragraph, followed by a translation in parentheses. This is just too big a hassle to try and read. It's a pity because it has potential, but I'm not going to be filling out the supplementary timeline sheet to try and keep track of what is happening. Fortunately there are a billion other stories in the naked city, so ta.

Nice open ended wrap up there at the end it was an enjoyable ride.
Makes me wonder were you will go from here

Personally i think you may want to try your hand at a crossover showing what world the dim lord has landed in. He still has his wand his magic just no way out of his cage all on his own.

I hate it when you make the story jump forward and suddenly jump backward, then forward again.

Once again, thank you for sharing this terrific story. I enjoyed it as much the second time as I did the first. Wish you would share another.

What a piece of crap. You jump around like a frog on a griddle.

I'm always the champion of the ideal that a writer should write what they want, that being said, your stance on your style of presenting this fic, is frankly ridiculous. There is such a thing as making things user friendly, if things aren't user friendly they aren't used, your story is difficult to read, and your story isn't being read. Its a simple as that.

Feel free to stick to your guns, but your overcomplicating things unnecessarily.

I and other readers don't want to adapt to your writing style, tha t's too much like work, I read for fun and leisure, I shouldn't have to write down a timeline and notes to know what the hell is going on.

Add in the gap between updates and its a recipe for a story that won't get read.

Look I love Harmony stories and try to never critique them but I see the potential in this story if only you'd let it shine through.

Despite my criticism

I thank you for sharing and wish you all the best in your writing.

It's quiet good. I'm a harry/hermione shipper and i totally felt that this story is a 26 chapter of justice. I like the back and forth twist but the ending to me is a bit rush. The golden trio characters in here are almost similiar to the original and that's a good thing. the cliff hanger makes me wonder what will happen next? Is there a new story? I say you have a talent for writing, ever cross your mind to make it professional? Sorry for my bad english i'm not a native english speaker.

Look forward to it!

Interesting story

I give up. I can't follow anything with you jumping around in time all the time.