|Reviews for The Origin of the Fedora|
| jd burns chapter 1 . 8/15/2006
lol...cute and fluffy. Liked it a lot.
| fear-ciuil chapter 1 . 6/12/2006
Very cute! I like it.
Suggestion: Please, please, please end statements in dialogue with a period, not a comma. For example:
"Jack, I've got those witness statements you needed."
The exception, of course, is when it isn't the end of a sentence, as in:
"Hi, Jack," Borgia greeted.
| Arabian Princess chapter 1 . 6/12/2006
| cmaddict chapter 1 . 6/12/2006
I like it! Very cute, light-hearted, and very typical of Jack.
| Lynn46 chapter 1 . 6/11/2006
Cute and I can 'see" Abbie as being the one who gave him the hat. Good job on the story!