|Reviews for Harry Potter and the Lost Demon|
| yaa chapter 1 . 11/2
/ i like no gey porn pls
| Temporal Knight chapter 53 . 10/6
And we reach the end. Some final comments:
-At least Tonks seems in good spirits about her new status. Still sucks but hey, she's not dead so I can't complain too strenuously.
-Dammit why did you kill Bones? And offscreen! You build up this cool, likeable guy and then kill him offscreen! Not cool. That's a JKR move. Not cool.
-I feel like there was an enemy missing from the final battle since Voldemort had mentioned something about a pet project separate from the giants and werewolves that never showed up at the battle or the aftermath. It just seems like it was forgotten about.
-I honestly didn't feel quite satisfied with Vernon's end. It was fun sure but he was too assured and angry. Yes, that is probably what Vernon would act like but that is just not...enough? I wanted to see him blubbering as he realized just how utterly screwed he was not being defiant until the end.
-Concerning Ron's vision: What. The. Hell. I don't care how bigoted your society is there is no excuse at all for that. If she wasn't under an actual curse to make people hate her and be repulsed by her (for which there was no real evidence beyond a single line of disgust by Harry several chapters ago concerning her stoning) then I truly believe Harry should've just let Voldemort have the entire country. If children can cut off someone's tail as a souvenir then the society is not worth saving. I stand by my belief last chapter about the real villain of this story being the Wizarding Society. It's wonderful to see that Harry destroyed the Ministry with the stroke of pen.
-The ending: Totally fucking sweat as hell. I did call it but I am very happy to be right and not at all annoyed at blatant forecasting. That was pretty much necessary here. (Where did Angela come from though? Any special significance?)
Final thoughts: This is one of my favorite HP stories. I really enjoyed it and it was very well done! The OCs fit with the setting and the magics followed most of the canon directions. It was a fun ride!
| Temporal Knight chapter 52 . 10/6
Yeah, Tonks would totally be the one to stand there and watch then tease afterward. Such a hilariously awesome character had no business dying in canon. Her fate here while not perfect is at least better.
I fully stand by my belief that while Ron is a generally okay guy he would be an utterly atrocious Secret Keeper. Exhibit A, Luna's flexibility.
This was a sad chapter true. It sucks about how that ended with Kotone though it'd been foreshadowed and pretty much stated for a while now so at least it wasn't a surprise to the reader. I don't particularly like Kyuushuu being the Grim Reaper though. That honestly seems more like a cop out than any sort of deeper thing. There was nothing wrong with him being an Oni and that race simply being mystical, mysterious and powerful. The GR thing adds "well is he really an Oni? are all Oni Grim Reapers? what does that mean?" questions that aren't needed at this point. Harry's transformation was cool though. I have visions of him basically being Kurosaki Ichigo in his third Getsuga form at that moment which is a fun visual.
The battle as a whole was also well done for the most part. Good planning and a more or less fun execution. It's weird but I feel like Tom himself was barely in the story. Yes his Horcruxes were front and center and he had a few viewpoint sections but overall he had such an incredibly small role. It feels more like the actual enemy in this story was the wizarding world's culture rather than Voldemort. And that's not really a battle that can be won onscreen in a timely fashion as Ragnok showed earlier.
| Temporal Knight chapter 51 . 10/6
Did Vernon punch anyone important? It sounds a bit like Tonks but I find it hard to believe that she would a) be able to be taken by surprise by Vernon, b) be capable of being slightly polite to the man. Vernon...was seeing...Petra...!? Almost all sympathy for the poor woman gone. Her judgment was apparently as horrible as her brother's.
I feel bad for Carol. She's got to be somewhat higher up if she's including in the division heads' meetings and she still mostly ends up living paycheck to paycheck and has to put up with sexual harassment from people. At least she got to have some fun at Vernon's expense though so there is that!
| Temporal Knight chapter 50 . 10/6
Okay so the thing with Daphne was just mean. You have her survive her family's desolation, utterly beaten up and broken, give her just long enough to contribute to moving the story along and then kill her offscreen when it's no longer necessary. That's almost meaner than what JKR did to Remus and Tonks...
I did absolutely love the entire conversation with the goblins. It was fun, informative and moved things along while also contributing to the backstory quite a lot. It also gave a lot of insight into all the respective characters which is always a great thing. The only thing I take some issue with is the implication that the orphanage was used as slave labor. Okay I grant you that I hate the canon wizarding society with its blatant racism, prejudice and favoritism plus the rampant corruption at all levels. Even so, I have a hard time believing that even that society could be so abhorrent as to utilize orphans as slave labor.
Also I guess that pretty end part pretty much assures that everything will be over before the start of the term. Which is mildly entertaining actually. With as much as happened in this story it doesn't feel like it's taken barely two months tops. And one month doesn't even really count since Harry was knocked out for three weeks of it! The following week should be freaking hilarious as Vernon meets his company's boss. I really look forward to that part. Finding out about the zombies was funny but he just wasn't tortured enough during it to be satisfying.
| Temporal Knight chapter 48 . 10/6
Well. Peter was...helpful. And mildly sympathetic. How the freaking hell did that happen?
Luna has some...unusual tastes it seems. As does Ron. Um, yeah. I'm not going to go there.
| Temporal Knight chapter 45 . 10/6
Awww poor Vernon is eventually going to go meet the head of his company and see Harry sitting there smiling evilly at him! That's going to a hilarious scene I imagine. I'm also super happy with Ron blowing up at Petunia. So maybe she wasn't the one who intentionally stole everything from Harry but she certainly was part and parcel to stealing his childhood and happiness so the woman deserves all the verbal abuse and more. I am rather surprised that at some of the surrounding crowd didn't start cursing her by the end of his tirade.
Hermione's transformation does indeed sound rather hot. Sorta like a Death's Avatar thing going on which is sweet. The official adoption was a beautiful addition too. It's a shame she's not going to survive for long now though...after that conversation with her father I really don't see there being any twist coming there. This isn't mystic Trelaway here, that was almost as blatant an "you're going to die but be reborn kid, get over it" as you can get. Not that that is a bad thing, the hints have been enough that it works fine and it's better to know it's coming so that it's not quite such a gut punch later on. Plus it's nice to know when she's born again she'll likely be full human so she won't have to be hurt as much.
I enjoyed having Tonks be there for some of the birthday conversation. It made the bonding between the main three feel sweeter and more real. Also the "fight" in the Ministry was so hilariously one sided it was awesome.
Seriously dude, give poor Pig a break. The little owl is going to give himself a heart attack! He may be hyperactive but he's cute!
| Temporal Knight chapter 39 . 10/4
Oh damn. They really should've just killed Umbridge since that would've broken the curse instead of letting everyone go kill crazy...
Oh Bones shows up again, cool! I like him. I also got several good laughs at his incredulousness of Harry ignoring basic magic principles. That's always fun to watch in these stories and why I never mind making him too powerful because it's just so entertaining listening to people say "that is completely impossible!" and then having him do it and not realize there was supposedly an ironclad law of nature/magic against it. And I like the way of getting back to Grimmauld. Thank god you didn't leave that as never being able to again! I hate that house but the important items needed to be retrieved!
Oh poor Pig! That poor abused little owl. When he finally catches up with Harry that little guy is not going to be a happy camper at all.
| Temporal Knight chapter 38 . 10/4
God that girl has a lifetime of karmic payment built up. You really do like the pain and suffering eh?
The bath was hilarious though beyond the utter depression. And Hermione's antics afterwards were also suitably funny as hell. Though performing a ritual that would knowingly take you a step from death without letting your boyfriend/charge know about it was...rather idiotic. Two years of suppressed hormones apparently do not make for a smart Hermione lol.
I like the idea of the afterlife existing in overlapping frequency layers though. That was interesting. I wonder who the voice was?
| Collectore chapter 22 . 10/3
The first half of this chapter lacks any kind of logic IMO.
Ginny uses a dark ritual against Harry and the dumbass girl gets the appropriate retaliation and now Harry is supposed to (or even considers to) pay for her treatment? Why the fuck would he do that?
"[...] but i understand why she thought she HAD to do it."
Apparently Harry has some kind of superhuman empathetic abilities, because I fail to see ANY reason, why she HAD to something like that, besides her being a self-absorbed, jealous bitch.
| Temporal Knight chapter 36 . 10/2
So yeah I am now exceedingly worried that Kotone isn't going to survive however the bit about inheriting the interest does have a nice little ring to it.
Lily...REALLY loved white apparently. Dear lord, that woman stuck to her theme for that house lol! That would hurt my eyes so much! It sounds beautiful though. I wonder if Dobby would still be able to get there without being too exhausted with how far away it is.
| Temporal Knight chapter 35 . 10/2
"Mr. Rabbit." I think I nearly died from laughing at that part.
Huh, okay that was certainly a nice way to resolve the wand issue. Makes me less frustrated about losing the holly one. Definitely an awesome birthday present. Plus a gauntlet "wand" is just awesome.
Yup still loving Tonks. She steals the scene whenever she shows up. I wish you had written a Tonks-centric fic too after this one cause that would've been awesome as well!
Oh crap. Well I guess my earlier worry about the ring Horcrux was well founded. That sucks. And once they go back to kill it Riddle is going to get even more worried and probably round up the other two besides Nagini. Damn. Oh so it also looks like my crazy notion was spot on as well. Sucks to be Harry. And a small little army of Inferi on the march eh? Yeah the Ministry is going to have some fun covering THAT one up!
I am not going to miss Lucius. There will be no tears shed. There will only be happy dancing.
It's interesting that Kotone has next to no stamina. I had also never thought that she actually needed the help to move around easily rather than simply the comfort it entailed. That poor girl's life gets more and more sucky. And if you seriously don't ever let them get back to Grimmauld well...that's just mean. I hate the house too but the Firebolt is there. The Invisibility Cloak is there! Kotone's parents' wands are there! Her family photo is there! That's just incredibly mean leaving those things lost to the ether until the girl dies! Which I sincerely hope won't be sooner rather than later considering the shady bit of foreshadowing there at the end which also calls back to the bit about her reminiscing about her destiny. Though granted all signs pointed in canon to Harry not likely making it through either so here's hoping I'm horribly wrong about the girl.
| Temporal Knight chapter 34 . 10/2
Yay it's finally destroyed! It's nice to see that Ginny isn't an evil harlot at heart. She's not completely off the hook but yeah that's nice.
I do worry a bit about the ring Horcrux but I'm willing to hope that it was destroyed before it got a chance to try and possess anyone so hopefully we're still at three down, three to go. I almost forgot to comment earlier on how the rather intriguing mumbling by Riddle. It makes me wonder just which part of him is actually latched onto Harry...I look forward to seeing how that turns out.
| Temporal Knight chapter 33 . 10/2
Well now that was a short efficient takedown of the Queen Bitch. There is something inherently satisfying about watching the teenagers physically beat down the tormentors instead of magically beat them down. Regarding the question about whether or not to simply leave her there to simply die of thirst/starvation...I just don't know if that's a...sufficient level of punishment for Umbridge. It's nice and all but I don't know if it's quite painful enough.
You seriously enjoy making psychopathic, sadistic characters don't you? Those poor kids. 200 years of that? For one scene characters they were very good. And I actually kind of wanted them to stick around and get a dues ex machina or something.
I highly dislike losing the wand though. I have an unnatural attachment to that wand I think since I always absolutely loath whenever it gets destroyed both in canon and in fanfics.
| Temporal Knight chapter 30 . 10/1
Call me crazy but I always kinda like the idea of Hermione as the Dark Lady of the country/continent/world. Harry Potter and the Witch Queen sorta explores that idea a bit and I have to say, it's grown on me. The girl would make a seriously badass, Evil Overlord. Riddle just kills people he doesn't like. Hermione would USE them. And manipulate them. And utterly curbstomp everything if she gave up her morals.
I really like pairing Luna with Ron. It is incredibly cute. Normally I would say they might be moving a little fast going from kissing once to sleeping naked within about a week but then again, this is Luna. And she was being rather incredibly forward earlier. And he nearly died. And they are teenagers. So yeah, I decidedly it's probably not too unrealistic.
Hermione being a Necromancer is intriguing. I definitely had Priestess pegged as well at first. Banishing the soul fragments is an interesting choice. I like it but I don't really get why she is so utterly torn up about it. Yes, it's a bit extreme but this is the same man who (as far as they know) had an orphanage full of nearly fifty kids slaughtered. Why do people still have moral issues with damnation as a punishment for someone like that?
So they've been at Grimmauld for about two...three?...days. And no one at Hogwarts or the Order are freaking out over the foursome disappearing again?