Reviews for Harry Potter and the Lost Demon
jdboss1 chapter 9 . 3/6/2016
I right hateing this harry

HOW DUM CAN HE BE evre if we is ill
natsuchan808 chapter 53 . 2/25/2016
I loved reading this! Everything you created...the depth of the characters, the introduction of sweet Kotone, the amazing plot with that crazy twist at the end (which completely surprised me!), the sweet HH moments, and especially the Pigwidgeon scenes...all combined into a fantastic story. You did an amazing job creating something so original and captivating. This definitely deserves to be reread again and again.
Wildheart21 chapter 28 . 1/22/2016
Hermione a necromancer that is a scary thought with as smart as she is
Centurion Juggernaut chapter 53 . 1/21/2016
Very good, keep up the good work.
Svenion chapter 5 . 1/18/2016
And why didn't they kill Bellatrix when they had the chance?
Guest chapter 53 . 1/12/2016
Very beautiful ending to this story. Thank you.
Guest chapter 44 . 1/11/2016
Another 'Zulu' reference? :)
Zulus...thousands of them.
yaa chapter 1 . 11/2/2015
/ i like no gey porn pls
Temporal Knight chapter 53 . 10/6/2015
And we reach the end. Some final comments:

-At least Tonks seems in good spirits about her new status. Still sucks but hey, she's not dead so I can't complain too strenuously.
-Dammit why did you kill Bones? And offscreen! You build up this cool, likeable guy and then kill him offscreen! Not cool. That's a JKR move. Not cool.
-I feel like there was an enemy missing from the final battle since Voldemort had mentioned something about a pet project separate from the giants and werewolves that never showed up at the battle or the aftermath. It just seems like it was forgotten about.
-I honestly didn't feel quite satisfied with Vernon's end. It was fun sure but he was too assured and angry. Yes, that is probably what Vernon would act like but that is just not...enough? I wanted to see him blubbering as he realized just how utterly screwed he was not being defiant until the end.
-Concerning Ron's vision: What. The. Hell. I don't care how bigoted your society is there is no excuse at all for that. If she wasn't under an actual curse to make people hate her and be repulsed by her (for which there was no real evidence beyond a single line of disgust by Harry several chapters ago concerning her stoning) then I truly believe Harry should've just let Voldemort have the entire country. If children can cut off someone's tail as a souvenir then the society is not worth saving. I stand by my belief last chapter about the real villain of this story being the Wizarding Society. It's wonderful to see that Harry destroyed the Ministry with the stroke of pen.
-The ending: Totally fucking sweat as hell. I did call it but I am very happy to be right and not at all annoyed at blatant forecasting. That was pretty much necessary here. (Where did Angela come from though? Any special significance?)

Final thoughts: This is one of my favorite HP stories. I really enjoyed it and it was very well done! The OCs fit with the setting and the magics followed most of the canon directions. It was a fun ride!
Temporal Knight chapter 52 . 10/6/2015
Yeah, Tonks would totally be the one to stand there and watch then tease afterward. Such a hilariously awesome character had no business dying in canon. Her fate here while not perfect is at least better.

I fully stand by my belief that while Ron is a generally okay guy he would be an utterly atrocious Secret Keeper. Exhibit A, Luna's flexibility.

This was a sad chapter true. It sucks about how that ended with Kotone though it'd been foreshadowed and pretty much stated for a while now so at least it wasn't a surprise to the reader. I don't particularly like Kyuushuu being the Grim Reaper though. That honestly seems more like a cop out than any sort of deeper thing. There was nothing wrong with him being an Oni and that race simply being mystical, mysterious and powerful. The GR thing adds "well is he really an Oni? are all Oni Grim Reapers? what does that mean?" questions that aren't needed at this point. Harry's transformation was cool though. I have visions of him basically being Kurosaki Ichigo in his third Getsuga form at that moment which is a fun visual.

The battle as a whole was also well done for the most part. Good planning and a more or less fun execution. It's weird but I feel like Tom himself was barely in the story. Yes his Horcruxes were front and center and he had a few viewpoint sections but overall he had such an incredibly small role. It feels more like the actual enemy in this story was the wizarding world's culture rather than Voldemort. And that's not really a battle that can be won onscreen in a timely fashion as Ragnok showed earlier.
Temporal Knight chapter 51 . 10/6/2015
Did Vernon punch anyone important? It sounds a bit like Tonks but I find it hard to believe that she would a) be able to be taken by surprise by Vernon, b) be capable of being slightly polite to the man. Vernon...was seeing...Petra...!? Almost all sympathy for the poor woman gone. Her judgment was apparently as horrible as her brother's.

I feel bad for Carol. She's got to be somewhat higher up if she's including in the division heads' meetings and she still mostly ends up living paycheck to paycheck and has to put up with sexual harassment from people. At least she got to have some fun at Vernon's expense though so there is that!
Temporal Knight chapter 50 . 10/6/2015
Okay so the thing with Daphne was just mean. You have her survive her family's desolation, utterly beaten up and broken, give her just long enough to contribute to moving the story along and then kill her offscreen when it's no longer necessary. That's almost meaner than what JKR did to Remus and Tonks...

I did absolutely love the entire conversation with the goblins. It was fun, informative and moved things along while also contributing to the backstory quite a lot. It also gave a lot of insight into all the respective characters which is always a great thing. The only thing I take some issue with is the implication that the orphanage was used as slave labor. Okay I grant you that I hate the canon wizarding society with its blatant racism, prejudice and favoritism plus the rampant corruption at all levels. Even so, I have a hard time believing that even that society could be so abhorrent as to utilize orphans as slave labor.

Also I guess that pretty end part pretty much assures that everything will be over before the start of the term. Which is mildly entertaining actually. With as much as happened in this story it doesn't feel like it's taken barely two months tops. And one month doesn't even really count since Harry was knocked out for three weeks of it! The following week should be freaking hilarious as Vernon meets his company's boss. I really look forward to that part. Finding out about the zombies was funny but he just wasn't tortured enough during it to be satisfying.
Temporal Knight chapter 48 . 10/6/2015
Well. Peter was...helpful. And mildly sympathetic. How the freaking hell did that happen?

Luna has some...unusual tastes it seems. As does Ron. Um, yeah. I'm not going to go there.
Temporal Knight chapter 45 . 10/6/2015
Awww poor Vernon is eventually going to go meet the head of his company and see Harry sitting there smiling evilly at him! That's going to a hilarious scene I imagine. I'm also super happy with Ron blowing up at Petunia. So maybe she wasn't the one who intentionally stole everything from Harry but she certainly was part and parcel to stealing his childhood and happiness so the woman deserves all the verbal abuse and more. I am rather surprised that at some of the surrounding crowd didn't start cursing her by the end of his tirade.

Hermione's transformation does indeed sound rather hot. Sorta like a Death's Avatar thing going on which is sweet. The official adoption was a beautiful addition too. It's a shame she's not going to survive for long now though...after that conversation with her father I really don't see there being any twist coming there. This isn't mystic Trelaway here, that was almost as blatant an "you're going to die but be reborn kid, get over it" as you can get. Not that that is a bad thing, the hints have been enough that it works fine and it's better to know it's coming so that it's not quite such a gut punch later on. Plus it's nice to know when she's born again she'll likely be full human so she won't have to be hurt as much.

I enjoyed having Tonks be there for some of the birthday conversation. It made the bonding between the main three feel sweeter and more real. Also the "fight" in the Ministry was so hilariously one sided it was awesome.

Seriously dude, give poor Pig a break. The little owl is going to give himself a heart attack! He may be hyperactive but he's cute!
Temporal Knight chapter 39 . 10/4/2015
Oh damn. They really should've just killed Umbridge since that would've broken the curse instead of letting everyone go kill crazy...

Oh Bones shows up again, cool! I like him. I also got several good laughs at his incredulousness of Harry ignoring basic magic principles. That's always fun to watch in these stories and why I never mind making him too powerful because it's just so entertaining listening to people say "that is completely impossible!" and then having him do it and not realize there was supposedly an ironclad law of nature/magic against it. And I like the way of getting back to Grimmauld. Thank god you didn't leave that as never being able to again! I hate that house but the important items needed to be retrieved!

Oh poor Pig! That poor abused little owl. When he finally catches up with Harry that little guy is not going to be a happy camper at all.
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