Nice story, very intriguing.

Please do continue!

You have no idea how great it feels to read a GOOD M/E fic. I liked how you worked Cosette out of the story, Marius would NEVER be the cheating type. I'm very curious to know what happens next, and who's the man beside Ponine?

Wow! I like this fic very much. It's well controlled and doesn't follow the usual pattern. Etienne is adorable too! I am intirgued as to how Eponine survives, and look forward to more chapters! Update soon!

You, my dear, have just dethroned me from the best Marius/Eponine writer on this site. Just, whoa, it's about time that someone actually put some effort into the pairing besides the standard "I'm totally Eponine, that guy I like from school is Marius, and that girl that's dating my crush is Cosette" crap that I see. Great work, I hope to see more from you.

So far, I'm intriuged, and I would definitely like to see you continue this. However, there are a couple of technical things that bugged me. Some of the sentences-especially in the first half of the fic-just don't flow very well. Ex. "A young boy a little over the age of five darted into Marius’ study jubilantly." This one needs a little paring down, and jubilantly? I've never heard that word before, and I think there's a reason. Yick. "A sense of warm fell over him." Perhaps "warmth" would fit better there. "Scribbled on the parchment was a picture of him and his son hand in hand, and up in sky was an image of an angel. Marius instantly knew that this angel was Cosette.

“See, that’s mama in heaven watching over us,” Etienne explained." This whole passage is a little redundant. However, it gives us an important fact early on, and perhaps you wanted to emphasize that fact? And one more thing-please tell me that Marius has a housekeeper who's looking after his son!

Anyhow, a lot of the technical problems could be easily solved by reading your writing out loud to yourself, or having someone else read it. I suggest this a lot. Sometimes readind it and re-reading it to yourself can be decieving, but your ears won't lie, and chances are you'll immediately pick up any awkward spots.

Keep up the good plot work, though!

This is awesome! I am totally at the edge of my seat to see what happens next. Who's this middle-aged man? How was Eponine 'dishonest'? Don't tell me, just write the next chapter soon!

Woah, woah, woah. Please hold while I try to compose myself, as that is all I can say! Hah, okay. Well first of all, let me say that I LOVE the idea, the whole plot and where it's going. It's very original, and it's not often you find a romance between Marius and Eponine in Marius's point of view. It's a great change! Also, from what I can tell, you are a wonderful writer. It's as simple as that! I also love how you didn't make Cosette "evil", kill her off in a rude way, or anything silly like that. And Etienne is so cute! This whole story has a great start. So basically. I love this story. I want more. Update soon, please! )

~Pencil