Reviews for Nobody Knows
TurtleFeathers chapter 1 . 6/21/2006
Oh, that was awesome! I can't really think of anything to fix, but if i do I'll tell you. I can't wait to see what will happen next!
Gorseclaw chapter 1 . 6/21/2006
Very cool. I can't tell you what to do, but if you just let events play out, a story will eventually form. Perhaps just have Kione waiting for the man, see who interrupts her, or suddenly deciding to visit her family again. Just suggestions.
ChocoTaco chapter 1 . 6/20/2006
Wow.

This was really good, really intriguing!

And kudos for the non-Mary Sue female OC.

More? Please?