|Reviews for The love of an Apprentice|
| kabutoshizune1 chapter 4 . 1/21/2010
I'm sorry I already used a reveiw for chapter 5 but please if youre still on write more for this i love ita nd have added your storys to my favs 3 you fics if your stuck I'd love to help... if thats okay with you my e-mail is
| Aimi Willows chapter 5 . 3/5/2009
I hope you finish this story, I'm interested in it now. You're writing has definitely gotten better with the last couple chapters, and I'm looking forward to see what comes next, if you do decide to finish it.
| kabutoshizune1 chapter 5 . 2/26/2009
I love 'The love of an Apprentice'. Please write more.
| Ikaru Sentinal chapter 5 . 9/15/2008
This was a very good chapter until the end when things got confusing. You are saying that when Shizne was 21, roughly 6 years before this storyline, that was when the Kyuubi attacked? Um...no. Because then Naruto would only be 5-6 years old, not 13...way off there. And also, what does the second to last line mean?
'She remember that Tsunade had to give her and Kiba and Naruto a fake ninja so they didn’t have to go back to the academy.'
WTF? A fake ninja? What? That makes no sense at all...but aside from that, a great chapter and I hope you update soon. PLEASE!
| Ikaru Sentinal chapter 4 . 9/15/2008
OH. Very good transition chapter. I loved it. Also, your writing continues to get better.
| Ikaru Sentinal chapter 3 . 9/15/2008
You were seriously only 13? Wow. In that case, you wrote very, very well considering. And I am sorry if I offended you. But anyways. This chapter was MUCH better. Better writen, better laid out, more descriptive. I liked it very much. I feel so bad for poor Shizune. She must have been locked there for months. And it won't take long to start loosing your grip on reality, especially with how she was treated. But I did love how she fought back. Very nice. And Orochimaru probaly wanted her hair to give Tsunade proof Shizune was still alive for some trade or somesuch. Probaly in return for Sasuke or Naruto or someone. Except...I suppose Sasuke is already with Orochimaru by this time...*shrugs* But why did Kabuto cut his hair too? Very interesting. That seriously makes me HAVE to read to find out, even though I was already planning to continue. But now I NEED to know why Kabuto cut his hair too...XD
| Ikaru Sentinal chapter 2 . 9/15/2008
um...wow. I...like the story for the most part, and am obsessed with the pairing...but you have serious problems with your POV...you keep changing from fist to third person...choose one and stick to it please. And also your grammar is horrible too...I mean, the first two sentances alone...'I looked over the man. I found some broken bones she quickly healed them with her charka.' That should be either 'I looked over the man, I found some broken bones and quickly healed them with my chakra.' or, 'She looked over the man, finding some broken bones that she quickly healed with her chakra.' I mean, wht a difference...and it is just sort of...weird. But I do plan to continue reading as I do like the pairing and find so little of it on FF...bu I do hope you can see where I am coming from and I hope it helps you become a better writer.
| Cosmos Jenise chapter 5 . 3/16/2008
OMG! I love this story! Please update soon, I'm begging you! _
| Kuwabara99 chapter 5 . 1/19/2008
wow...this chapter was beyond words. so emotional
Im surprised you referenced back to the filler arcs. I enjoyed the Star Village one myself. Poor Hinata. I wonder what schemes Orochimaru has in store for her
| cHi-1000-SpRiNgS chapter 5 . 1/19/2008
yayy! hinata's in the story! i love her
| Death need not be the end of hope chapter 4 . 1/19/2008
So far I'm loving this fic, please continue!
I could definitely see a huge difference in your writing in chapter 3 (I think it was), good to see you didn't just abandon this fic.
.:subliminalmessage-WE NEED MORE KABUTO X SHIZUNE!-subliminalmessage:.
| emma frost chapter 4 . 1/14/2008
it's so good
i like it
please continue !
| cHi-1000-SpRiNgS chapter 4 . 1/13/2008
yayy for shizune kabuto moments!
| Kuwabara99 chapter 4 . 1/13/2008
oh. very interesting chapter.
good thing Shizune bandaged herself up.
I loved the flashback part. Younger Kabuto and Shizune
cant wait for more moments
| cHi-1000-SpRiNgS chapter 3 . 1/12/2008
poor shizune! i have to wonder why kabuto cut his hair though... hm...
can't wait for an update!