Reviews for Beast of Prey
Kyashii chapter 1 . 11/16/2008

That was...




I mean that in a good way... Whoo that was


(you can take that as "hot" or "hoot", 'tsup to you -)

Great smexehnes...
Sacred Beast117 chapter 1 . 10/29/2008
Great sort my good friend great story

loved it alot

great lemon
Ishtar205 chapter 1 . 10/27/2008
I love this story !

But the petition is over now, isn't it ? Cause the link doesn't work...
JtheChosen1 chapter 1 . 9/28/2008
this...was so hot! luv werewolves!
Inumaru12 chapter 1 . 9/27/2008
Death-Muncher chapter 1 . 7/3/2008
oh wow.

theres nothing more to be said. :P

ChemicalAuthor chapter 1 . 6/25/2008
This was really good. Keep up the great work.]
Baroness Bones chapter 1 . 5/19/2008
I'm sorry if you'll view this as a flame, but honestly it is not. It's merely a helpful critique, and if you don't like it you don't have to read it. So there'd be no need to answer back with a bitter response.

While I do commend you for coming up with a completely original and definitely interesting pairing, I must say that the characters are rather out of character.

Draco for one thing. I don't think that any of us Potter fans, (or Draco fans for that matter), agree with the idea that Draco would just willingly follow someone as unstable, bloodthirsty and unpredictable as Fenrir Greyback to a location in which he wouldn't be able to seek help or refuge in case something went wrong.

I'm sorry to offend Draco fans out there but Draco is rather a bit of a chicken. The minute his senses kick in that his life is in jeopardy, he scarpers away in the blink of an eye. So it's a bit hard to believe that he would just stand there, stark naked and all, waiting for Fenrir to have his way with him.

Also, Draco wouldn't be foolish enough to toss his wand away. Not if he knows that there's a chance his life's in risk. I mean we've all seen this happen while reading the books.

Draco Malfoy only cares for one thing, and one thing alone: his own life. So, its a bit hard to believe the events of this story, and that he would willingly put his life at stake just for a violent shag with someone as monstrous as Fenrir.

Also, Fenrir doesn't exactly seem like the type who cares much for love or sex. While reading the books he's clearly just interested in cannibalism, killing, fighting and attacking almost everything. The way Rowling portrays Fenrir seems to impose that he's clearly just interested in those things alone.

Additionally, while the grammar is somewhat bearable there are still errors in spelling, tenses and punctuation. For example; there is no such word as seeked. I'm sure the word you meant to use was "sought". Also, perhaps its just my input, but sometimes the writing is a bit hard to follow. It's like we're swallowing too much at one time. In a sense, it feels fast paced, but that's just my honest opinion.

I'm sure if you try and stick to some of these guidelines you will come up with a definitely enjoyable ficlet that thousands will enjoy.

PS: I know others reading this will say something like "OMG1!1 WTF IS RONG WIT U!11 ITS Fo0o0o0kin FANFICTAATION! if u dont lyk it dont read it!1" Sure, it's a fanfiction but there should be some respects to canon. There are so many people getting fed up and nauseous from reading things either revolving around the following: sex, violence, rape, wangst, angst, pornography, etc. etc. because it gets dull after a while (And because it's hard to believe watching characters behave so out of character). I mean, a good example would be a writer called wimvincken. I don't suggest anyone go and flame that writer, and in no way am I trying to bait him out for harassment. I'm merely giving anyone reading this a mere example.

Thank you for taking the time to read this, and I hope it helps to some extent;

allihadisgone chapter 1 . 5/8/2008
I completely loved this story. First off, because it was well written and second because well who can blame a person for loving it! I completely loved Fenrir Greyback in all of this especially at the end when he tore into Draco's shoulder and claimed him as his own. -shudders-
WiseDraco chapter 1 . 3/26/2008
I would love to sign your petition! I checked it out on your page but it is not coming up...alas. I believe I could get a few other to sign it as well.

About our story...BLOODY BRILLIANT! That was just...amazing!

WizardsGirl chapter 1 . 3/9/2008
I liked it! Any More? lolz!
JessieJay13 chapter 1 . 3/1/2008
OMFG this is like the best story i have ever read! so fucking hot! it totally made me cum, and i love it to death just because its so fucking kinky and erotic! so totally faved!
Angel-o-Darkness chapter 1 . 2/6/2008
omigawd,i always imagined draco as a masochistic little bitch 3

good job
skinnyrita chapter 1 . 1/22/2008
was it a dream or not eh? hmm... good story!
Akkara chapter 1 . 11/24/2007
It's wierd to admit it but that was kinda hawt..*pushes glasses up higher on her nose*Please continue writeing stuff like this lol, and i could'nt sign the potition sorry tryed *blush*
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