|Reviews for Shall We Dance|
| DarkVoid116 chapter 10 . 2/13
Great story. Truly one of best fluff GhVis out there. This fic actually might've just rejuvenated my interest in DBZ. After finishing this chapter, I just rewatched all of my favorite DB/Z moments, from Goku turning Super Saiyan for the first time to killing Kid Buu, to Gohan killing Cell, to some GhVi AMVs. I kinda wanna rewatch it all now.
This fanfic was brilliant and the ending made me really appreciate Hercule. He's brilliant, and you represented his character faithfully in the end, and even in between.
You obviously portrayed Gohan and Videl exactly as I imagine them, to a tee. Their romance, their love, is what originally hooked me to DBZ. Yeah, I was always a fan of DBZ battles and I can go on and on about everything, from Namekians to Goku to Vegeta to Emperor Pilaf to Mercenary Tao, but GhVi really sealed the deal, and this was quite possibly the best "pure fluff" GhVi get together out there. I liked it that much.
You only created three OCs but each of them as so good. Jessica only briefly appeared, but she might've been my favorite of them all. Ms. Corwin was excellent, and is the other contender. I didn't like Sharpner's father, but you at least gave the man a personality and a large role.
Chi Chi was really good, that much I've probably made clear. I dislike the overprotective, overbearing Chi Chi as Gohan hits adulthood, even if its true to her canon characterization. She was realistic, she sympathized with Gohan, and she was supportive. Overall, great.
Erasa as a matchmaker of sorts worked really well. I really liked Erasa in this story.
| DarkVoid116 chapter 9 . 2/13
A wonderful chapter! Everything is working out for them, and I'm super happy about it.
Hercule excellently redeemed himself, making sure not to lose sight of who his daughter is and how important her happiness should be to him. His overprotectiveness and unreasonableness is overblown in fanon. Sure he's arrogant, but he's hardly a bad person. A bad person wouldn't have tried to take on Cell in the first place. Despite his claims about tricks and such, he had to know there was a chance he may die. Especially being there, he still threw Gohan the head.
Gohan still needs to explain his past to Videl- I hope he actually /does/ do that in this story... I think she'll listen.
Sharpner gained sympathy points here, and Ms. Corwin is an excellent character. You really only created three original characters- Sharpner's father, Ms. Corwin, and Jessica. All three were excellent, even if I despised Sharpner's father.
Great chapter. Can't believe I only have one more to go!
| DarkVoid116 chapter 8 . 2/13
I'm liking this Jessica person. I really liked how she was the one who gets to break the story, but moreso that she respected their boundaries and will work with them to make sure the story is tip-top.
Hercule trying to bribe Gohan is disgusting, but hopefully his words got through.
I think once the article is run, Sharpner's (and his father's) reputation will take a nosedive. Hercule might read is and be furious as well.
Awesome update. I liked everything about it.
| DarkVoid116 chapter 7 . 2/13
Chi Chi probably won't be too mad. She'll overreact at first but she trusts Gohan unconditionally in this story, so I doubt that lasts too long. She'll understand.
I'm /slightly/ surprised Hercule reacted this harshly. I knew he wouldn't be happy, but a transfer seems nonsensical. We'll see how much of an influence Sharpner's father had on that decision. Hercule might rely on the other man for advice, but he's still independent.
I really like how you're having them rehash their story to others, its wonderful.
| DarkVoid116 chapter 6 . 2/13
Excellent chapter. They're *finally* together, even though it actually only took six chapters. It seems like it's been forever. Probably only around 30k words or so.
Regardless, this obviously is going to have repercussions. Sharpner's father won't bow down lightly, and Hercule needs to find out about this at some point.
In the meantime, Bulma, Chi Chi, Erasa, and Goten are all going to be ecstatic. It's gonna be fun.
| DarkVoid116 chapter 5 . 2/13
I like this chapter. Sharpner's father *further* cements himself as a royal asshat (is this even possible? I hadn't thought so) while Sharpner himself gains some sympathy points. His dad just is a douchebag.
Most fics would've had Chi Chi make up something preposterous or otherwise hide Bulma's friendship. I'm glad you didn't do this and just had it the case that it wasn't a big deal... because it's not.
| DarkVoid116 chapter 4 . 2/13
Sharpner's father really cemented his dickishness in my book, and Sharpner isn't very far behind. I really am not thrilled with Hercule too, if he had anything to do with this.. damn.
I feel bad for Ms. Corwin, Gohan and Videl were such a fantastic duo.
I wonder how Erasa can fix this. Chi Chi might be needed as well since she can help Gohan.
This story is extremely emotional, but tremendous! I like it a lot!
| DarkVoid116 chapter 3 . 2/13
Videl's mother is a very unexplored character in canon, a little less so in fanon. I like the idea of her needing advice from her mother.
I don't like Sharpner's father. I don't like Sharpner, but I dislike his father much more as of right now. We'll see how that goes, but meh.
| DarkVoid116 chapter 2 . 2/13
Hercule seems confusing. He seems to care about Videl but he's a little misguided. I think his character has potential from what we've seen and he won't be an evil Hercule. He just needs a wake-up call.
I like Videl's stand to her father's rules. I think it went well.
I really like Erasa and, of course, your OC, Ms. Corwin. She's a brilliant creation, and, I suspect, a staunch supporter of Gohan and Videl being together.
Great chapter, albeit it had a distinct lack of Sharpner.
| DarkVoid116 chapter 1 . 2/13
This is a very light, fluffy romance. I'm certainly intrigued by it.
Videl having an obvious, even if unheralded and unrealized, crush on Gohan at the start of a story is welcoming and refreshing. I like.
The dance class idea is cool, and I'm sure that the Sharpner/Videl hatred thingy will be explored further.
One thing I'm unsure of is how close Gohan and Videl were previously. Might we get background on pre-summer stuff? She knows of Goten it seems, so does she know of his abilities? Does she know he's a Saiyan and all? What does she know?
| DeeKayFTW chapter 10 . 2/12
I was kinda skeptical after I read the first chapter, but I kept on reading it and I'm happy I did. The story was getting better and better. I've seen many times this sad thing, where good fanfics got screwed up in the middle, but I was pleasantly surprised when this one didn't. The epilogue was a little disappointing (at least for me!), but the overall image of the whole story made this disappointment go away. Keep up the good work!
| Rebmul chapter 10 . 8/12/2013
very nice loved it would defiantly read more by you
| PrincessDenise06 chapter 10 . 5/3/2013
Wow... just wow... I cannot find words to describe this story from heaven.
Every word was spoken eloquently. It was so poetic, elegant, and breathtaking. It made me smile, the first true smile I've had in days, weeks even. It made me wonder, how does it feel to have that kind of love? But that depends on God.
At first, I was hesitant about reading this, because I am usually very picky about my share of reads. I thought it was another AU, but after reading the first chapter, I was hooked. I love how the story revolved on the usual love story of the two lovebirds and the usual rivalry of Sharpner and Gohan, but it still retained that epic glow I only notice when I read something that is oozing in juicy awesomeness. Another thing, is that I rarely review. For some strange reason, I only review on those stories that struck my heart.
I love the way you described their relationships with each other. Gohan and Videl's relationship developed in the way strong and lasting relationships do. Their love was hard as when when challenged, soft as feather when felt. Then, their friendship with Erasa. I've never seen Erasa portrayed that way. I loved it. They always portray her as ditzy, blonde girl with nothing inside that pretty head of hers. Next, is Sharpner. Like Erasa, he was always that cocky jock who like showing off and all that. But, even though you portrayed him as an arrogant man, the different thing was that he actually has something to show off. And you also showed that no one is always what seem to be. He was arrogant, self-absorbed, and rich, but at the end, he was like Videl, fathered most of his life by a man who tried to control him for his own benefit. I felt sympathy to him in that part.
I guess I have made this review long enough. I hope to read more stories with a certain depth like this, though I doubt they would live up to this masterpiece. Your story was wonderful and I hope to find more stories from you. Right now it's 4:20 in the morning and I stayed up just to read this. More power to you! )
| Son Goshen chapter 10 . 11/19/2012
That .. was just amazing. I loved it!
| Gabby chapter 10 . 4/3/2012
That was a great story.I really mean it, keep up the good work!