|Reviews for Beneath the Stars|
| Tachyglossus chapter 2 . 11/28/2007
Although only two chapters, it is refreshing to see a fanfiction that actually resembles some of the characters, and a good use of diction.
I think Maria is well captured here, and I'm not saying that just to be nice. I don't like Maria. She got on my nerves. However, so far, things seem true to her nature. I am also glad to see a use of Niklas, as I was quite fond of the lad, even if he acted foolishly inspite of himself. My only complaint is that I do not think Meena would roll her eyes at herbrother - she seems to worship him. Nonetheless, wonderful portrayals. Of course, it will take a while for the story to indicate where it is going, but nice job setting it up, and jumping right into a certain train of thought.
I usually do not read fanfiction, but since i decided to try writing a Star Ocean Till The End of Time fanfiction (unfortunately spurred on by a mary-sue-esque dream I had after playing it for a stupidly long time)
| intrasonic chapter 1 . 10/28/2007
This is a surprise. Honestly, it's hard to give a thumbs up or down based on this little blurb alone. This really is more of a prologue than an actual chapter, IMO.
As before, the writing quality is looking great. I have some vague memories of the original, refreshed by the still-existing reviews, which tells me that even if you weren't happy with the original plot, you're obviously capable of some kick-ass writing. So based on that, I'm going to say "Go for it". Heck, if you're in the market for a beta, feel free to give me a shout.
No mention of Fayt, I notice. Big change from the original? I maintain that it's nice to see Vanguard used for the story backdrop instead of Elicoor.
| Cloner4000 chapter 1 . 10/27/2007
The link that was sent to me automatedly wasn't working..took me a while to figure out the real one...I've totaly forgot the storyline...hm interesting. Hope this time it'll get somewhere..
| Maxmagnus20019 chapter 1 . 10/27/2007
Hm, interesting. :P
| Gestahl chapter 9 . 2/13/2007
I just found that story, but I have to say, it is really wonderful, certainly a ray of light among all those Albel-centric Star Ocean stories out there ;)
The playful bantering (and the interaction in general) between the characters (and especially between Maria and Fayt) is quite cute and well done, and I love the way you give more depth to the character's past.
I think it would be a shame if you stopped here, so please try to update this if you can spare the time :)
| Ryden and Xephfyre chapter 9 . 11/29/2006
Cliffhanger! That was so dramatic! Cliff just said 'We found your father.' and you cut it off just like that! Brilliant!
I was wondering where you'd gone off to because you stopped reviewing but I can see that you're still up and running from this update.
Well I know next to nothing about politics but I can recognise the rebellion plot device quite easily. Nice reintroduction of Cliff and Mirage as well. Those three really are close as family.
All in all your writing is as good as ever, and I hope you'll continue reviewing our story as well!
| Kyphrin chapter 9 . 11/28/2006
I'm enjoying this story quite a bit, keep up the good work. I'm actually replaying the game to get the Maria/Fayt ending cause she's cooler that Sophia.
| Cloner4000 chapter 9 . 11/27/2006
I like how you not make everyone accoding to their sterotype or making anyone just plain stupid. Hey who say Cliff has to be stupid. I can see a turn in the story. AH...updates...yippe
| LaniZion chapter 9 . 11/27/2006
Glad to see you updated!
Wow...the Federation on the brink of a civil war. That means that there would be no dominant military, and the galaxy would break into a mass conflict in that scenario. Hm...that can't be good. And...Maria's biological father? This'll be good...I'll bet she has a lot of questions for him.
| Hououza chapter 9 . 11/27/2006
That was most definately unexpected, I can't help but wonder how she will handle this latest development...more importantly what will Fayt do, will she even tell him. Despite her denials the fact they live in the proximity and are most certainly not acting like siblings means there is something there...but as yet neither one seems ready to embrace it.
Good luck & best wishes,
| Maxmagnus20019 chapter 9 . 11/27/2006
Very nice chapter, very nice, gotta love Cliff!
Keep it up!
| Owaranai Destiny chapter 9 . 11/27/2006
Hmm...Pretty short chapter, I gather, but good. It smells to me like a more obvious departure from the normal interaction between Maria and her friends/acquaintances (namely Fayt, Cliff and Mirage) to a more serious involvement with the civil war, and yet another shock as well a cliffhanger at the end...It seemed somewhat rushed, but I understand everyone has their own lives to take care of too. Do keep it up if you can, though. I'm loving every chapter of the story.
| Drakus chapter 9 . 11/27/2006
I havnt beaten the game quite yet, but, soon enough i spose.
love the constat sniping between characters
| Owaranai Destiny chapter 8 . 9/2/2006
Pathetic? I think not.
Sorry for not reviewing the past few chapters, so I'll just summarise my thoughts on one review. Your attempts at development of the relationship are pretty good so far. I like the pace-neither too fast nor slow-, granted that your story would continue further.
I like your change in pace, too, though it would be slightly more interesting to put in a few more characters and perhaps change a little bit of it to Fayt's P.O.V. Of course, do your best with your academic issues and do stay alive. I love your story and thanks for your review on mine. It woke me up somehow. )
| LaniZion chapter 8 . 8/13/2006
Nice. Though Maria is much more cruel than she lets on, lol.
Well, I'll be on the lookout for ya during winter break then. good luck with your academics.