Reviews for Truths and Changes
Boochan82 chapter 18 . 6/27/2007
oh dear lord, you have a way with the written/typed word. This story was amazing, and at the end there, just a touch of smut, nothing too descriptive.. it all gave me a warm fuzzy feeling inside. one question though: The kryptonite Lex injected into Jason or whatever it was, Will it kill him slowly or just cause him pain? When he reaches a certian age, will it kill him?

I need to know these things. Anyway, as said, amazing story _
PhantomFan13 chapter 18 . 1/28/2007
wow. love the story. i can't wait to read more:)
lilly chapter 1 . 1/9/2007
i would love for you to write more chapters please! i want to know what that liquid stuff is that Lex is making...more more...by the wayyou are a GREAT WRITER!
His songbird chapter 2 . 1/5/2007
I figured I would go ahead and submit this. Even though I know you are finished with it... I wanted to let you know that I think you did a pretty fair job on this Fan fic for Superman Returns'...sequel?

I did want to maybe sugjest, for future reference, that a lot of the narration you've written, would certainly help your story flow a lot better, if written in the form a actual dialogue. As opposed to "explaining away" what was said. It would help the readers to get closer to the characters and it would DEFINITELY make you chapters longer and force you to slow the story down...

Most authors have a problem writing a decent enough amount of narration. YOU'VE already got that down, so all you need to do is work on adding more dialogue and your stories will be rich with substance and character.

Good job.
Freedom Tide chapter 18 . 12/6/2006
oh, wow! i loved it & am about to start reading the sequal :-)
Ringhuiniele chapter 18 . 9/19/2006
Hi Eviefan,

I enjoyed reading your fic. This is first fic I've read about SR :) I was grinning how the kids (Rebecca and Jason) concluded that Clark and Superman were brothers. That was a cute interaction. Everyone's in character. I liked how you handled the break-up and Jason's melt-down when everyone's was shouting in Lois' house (after Richard's passing). I was starting for feel anxious what Lex has in his sleeve this time around after abducting Jason. I'm glad you wrote about the next story because I almost clamored in my seat for more. Keep it up! :D
maaike-fluffy chapter 18 . 9/13/2006
I like this story. It's flowing at neck-breaking speed, and I don't think anyone will ever grow bored of it.

Do try to pay attention to the POV's, I find it confusing when the POV changes within a pragraph... I lose track of who's thinking what...

Keep writing, and I'll read...

::adds to alret::
BellaCordelia chapter 18 . 9/7/2006
I liked it and can't wait to have more chapters to the story. I thought that it was completely finished when I first started because the completed word was posted. Now I'm sad at having to wait for more chapters. Keep up the good work. As for the whole more sensual, I know they watch it some and I guess you could always write the chapter that way and then email it to people who wanted a more sensual chapter in addition to posting a more toned down one on here. Just random thoughts here.
AgiVega chapter 18 . 9/3/2006
I have a few things to nitpick, I hope you don't mind – it's constructive criticism, and by far not a flame.

First: the rating. You wrote at the end of this chapter that you didn't know how sensual you were allowed to make it. Well, the story as it is now, is T-rated, and definitely NOT M. M-rated fics have more sex descriptions than yours does. If you intend to keep writing stories with this level of sensuality, then change their rating to T (that way more people would read the fics, as most people just don't browse fics among the M-rated ones). However, if you want to keep your fics M- rated, then write a little bit more sex, because this way it's seriously under-rated.

Second: the genre. I don't see why you gave your fic the action/adventure genre, as nothing of the sort happened. I'd say this is a drama/angst fic.

Third (and this is about chapter 17, I just didn't feel like going back to review there): I suggest next time you look at a map before you write funny things. ANY island off the coast of Italy would be in the Mediteraanean Sea, and NOT in an ocean. Had the island been off the western coast of Spain, then it could be the Atlantic ocean, but as it's near Italy, it cannot. Just a little suggestion.
mariasantara chapter 18 . 8/24/2006
hE; now the last review for the last chapter.

Again, i have to tell you how much i like your story.

And that he finally took the -more sensual- step, my dear supi, is great.

i would love to read a more detailed version of it, but none the less great stuff.

I will read on now, or towmorrow.

Well then

seeya

MariaSantara
mariasantara chapter 17 . 8/23/2006
he, took me another 16 chapters to write you a second review. i am a bad person, i know.

ko, first. i really like it. it feels real and not fluffy and that is good.

clark7supi are great charakterized and lois is cool aswell.

that richard had to die was a little shock, i wished to see him happy und his dead was so fast... i am a little bit sad.

that you bring my favourite bat in to the story is great. i always liked the idea of him an supi beeing friends not just two guys in the justice leagege.

and then there is jason.

he is just too cute.

i am not sure if i said that before, but i needed to say it.

you are good in descriping little childeren and their strange emotional swings.

and the whole story with lex and the genetic changethingy.

i do not like him at all,and i hope clark and bruce are able to find a solution.

anyway i need to stop now, at least i have to sleep 4 hours before work again.

have a nice night

mariasantara
mariasantara chapter 1 . 8/21/2006
This is absulutly lovely.

I will, when i have a free time, read on.

Have a nice day

Yours sincerly MariaSantara
mistressbabette51 chapter 18 . 8/21/2006
That was so nice. I really enjoy your writing; it's so visual and flows smoothly. I didn't realize they were at the Fortress, but that was a really nice touch to the story. I'm also impressed with your incorporating their son into so much of your story. I think you've found the right balance for all of them. I love this story. Please continue.
cdog21 chapter 18 . 8/19/2006
This was a really good chapter. I can't wait to see what's coming up.
skinnyrita chapter 18 . 8/19/2006
i think you can get away with some more raunchy scenes, in response to ur Q, as i've written slash raunchier or with more *implied* goings-on than this. Just don't get porny -remember, no NC-17 or R-rated fics on here, but nothing bad has happened with mine yet!

keep up the good work -poor jason aw

xx
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