|Reviews for mercenaries:death dealer|
| Christank91 chapter 1 . 12/22/2007
I guess it's a good story, but it is super hard to follow so just change that up and you should have a great story.
| AtticusLegend chapter 3 . 11/11/2006
yeah this story is good but try to explain why theres man eating grass and more details r good other then that its a good story
| AtticusLegend chapter 2 . 8/6/2006
Hey man the story on mercenaries is really good, but its a little hard to follow sometimes because of how its written.
But its really good with the action. Just keep trying and checkaout some of my fics too.
| littledude702 chapter 3 . 7/29/2006
Im sorry to say but this is just not good after three chapters no plot has developed. If this Cody guy was surrounded by 5 gurrila units there would be know way he would have escaped he would have been shot on the spot. I have no idea where the setting is a small swamp in North America dosent tell me anything. Cody would know where he was going. Also try to make the dilogue better. So if you could try to make it belivable it would be appriciated.