|Reviews for The Secret Diary|
| G Fawkes chapter 9 . 9/2/2013
Yeah, I'd be watching out for that "gentle breeze" of legilmancy, if I were them. One minute you're being offered a lemon drop, the next your in the private quarters' shower, getting your 'twig and berries' soaped up as if it was Penn State, and not Hogwarts!
| G Fawkes chapter 6 . 9/2/2013
I mean it, Harry! Start distancing yourself now, from the little red-head gold-digger (red niffler?) She's gonna' amortentia your ass, and one day you'll wake up and find you're forty, you're in bed with a Molly look alike (shudder), and eight screaming kids are running around your house, and you can't remember 20 years!
(which in the case of a naked Molly, is a very good thing)
Get out now!
p.s. Best thing to do is 'knock-up' Hermione, and then you'll "have" to marry her, and everyone will understand, while no one suspects you would EVER have done it on purpose.
(I'm no seer, but I'm tellin' ya', she's gonna' be HOTTTTTT!)
| MSgt SilverDollar chapter 1 . 8/4/2013
Thousands of students at Hogwarts in any year? Highly doubtful since Harry's class had fifty or so, perhaps you meant hundreds.
| Lahel chapter 13 . 6/20/2013
Correction: It IS me and my friends in this situation. Object, not subject.
Also, when Tom said: "Now how about we begin your lessons in the Dark Arts" was that intentional? I wouldn't expect him to make a rookie mistake such as calling DADA the Dark Arts.
| bearblue chapter 29 . 6/5/2013
Amazing re-visioning of year two. I enjoyed it very much. Nicely done.
| ImmortalWar chapter 29 . 4/20/2013
| Helene chapter 7 . 3/27/2013
Thank you for giving a reason Padfoot or Moony couldn't make him a new map. That was bugging me! But I'm having fun reading this story.
| Gracfully chapter 29 . 3/1/2013
| Guest chapter 13 . 2/19/2013
Good story so far, despite a few spelling, word usage, and grammar errors.
Got a chuckle out of this, however:
"I owled my godfather asking him for some reading material for me and my friends ..."
"My friends and I Harry." interrupted Hermione.
Please, if one of your characters corrects the grammar of another, be sure they KNOW the correct grammar. "My friends and me" is the grammatically correct phrasing. (To prove it, drop "my friends and" from the sentence. "... owled my godfather asking him for some reading materials for I." No. It's for ME!
| nya mayaha nya chapter 29 . 1/17/2013
Again this is a great story! Please bring back the baby girl that Harry and co saved. And maybe let him adopt her later? Please!
| Guest chapter 29 . 10/29/2012
Please finish this series
| Guest chapter 29 . 10/24/2012
i really like this story
| mjw chapter 29 . 10/5/2012
Two excellent stories! A nice blending of the usual Harry Potter characters and plot elements with your own creative story line. Very well done. I look forward to the next story.
| puiwaihin chapter 21 . 8/25/2012
I was thinking of mentioning that you hadn't had Harry tell Luna he was looking to talk to Cho, but the last line confirmed it was intentional. Totally Luna.
| puiwaihin chapter 13 . 8/25/2012
Very interesting that you are having Harry deal with the diary as the main plot line for this story. It's not done much (except in mentor-Voldemort stories).