|Reviews for Naruto: An Alternative Story|
| Guest chapter 3 . 12/23/2014
I love your story and all but you really need to shorten most of your paragraphs. It makes it a bit bothersome to look at this really big paragraph. But you know what? You're story's great !
| Guest chapter 17 . 3/30/2014
Actually it's training ground 44
| Ninjazzz chapter 27 . 6/8/2013
Well I loved the story and still do.
1) who cares about how strong the characters are it's your damn story
2) the plot is fine it's hilarious and still full of action and mystery
3) you can edit a page or chapter a little at a time but PLEASE DON'T COMPLETELY LEAVE US! COME BACK TO THE STORY
4) you can always add drama to it
5) you can make stronger appoints
6) you can add more faults as you add to it
7) you are human no human is fing perfect look at gaara he wants to kill people at the beginning and in the anime sasuke is such an asshole see no ones gonna be perfect
8) it's been a few years maybe now you'll have some ideas on how to keep writing and fix what you didn't like as you write in later chapters
9) I forgot what I was gonna put for 9
Oh well anyways message me back
| Taking It Easy chapter 4 . 3/30/2013
Now I can't help but imagine Sasuke as a pretzel.
| Matsu chapter 21 . 12/6/2012
That last part was...SO MESSED UP! *shutters* ..gah make the bad imaged go away!
| PartyRocker987 chapter 4 . 9/15/2012
best story ever
| Haku1013 chapter 1 . 3/16/2010
this chapter went kind of fast, dont you think? But pretty good, I was able to understand it.
| Hotstreak's crossover stories chapter 1 . 1/2/2009
| Facsiga chapter 27 . 1/1/2009
Well I was a little stunned that you "finished" this story but thinking it through...your were right. Naruto was overpowered and there was a little too much comedy. But considering that this was your first story ( first Naruto story ? ), it was good. The thing that I liked most was that while I was reading your story I always got the feeling that I want to write one too. I enjoyed reading your story, thank you !
| karyuu25 chapter 21 . 4/22/2008
hey, this fanfic is really cool, please don't stop doing this.. anyway, on the sense that naruto is uber-powered, i think you can remedy it by making akatsuki a lot stronger, thus as time comes, naruto will met his match, with madara or pein. then, i think, hinata and naruto's relationship is kinda okay just write some mushy stuff to complement with it. i admit your gai-sensei,naruto,lee,hokage conversation is really hilarious..
please. consider my request.
karyuu25 (avid reader of naruto fanfics)
| diimmortal chapter 4 . 12/24/2007
i think it would be freat to have special guests but your surgetion for michale jackson cant happen really because orochimaru dosent appear till the chunnin exams ;) lol sorry i know its your story and all but i couldnt miss that joke
| bobbetter chapter 27 . 12/3/2007
poo.. and u never even got to get in the naruhina [ i was looking forward to that
| The Blundering Writer chapter 27 . 9/19/2007
Touching end...I agree about overpowering. Tis the bane on Naruto Fanfics.
| Look at the email adress chapter 27 . 9/2/2007
...well that sucks...
Time for me to attempt to disprove you and make you start the story again
1)So what if he is overpowered, if you continue writing you can slowly drain him inconspicously(i butchered that word)until he is not as uber.I personaly have no problem with an overly uber main character.
2)you did not rush it, its been what? 25 chapters and she still hasnt said more that a paragraph worth of shit to him, i would have no problem if you made her confess in the next chapter
3)comedy is good, and most of it made me laugh(which books rarley do) so i dont see how this is a the hell reads books for mushy gooey shit anyway now-a-days, i take "happy gilmore" over any romantic shit you throw at again i dont think uber naruto is a are the characters perfect? naruto is to dense to tell hinata he likes her, hinata would faint and suffer a heart attack and stroke at the same time if he did. Aourn(damn you know who im trying to spell)is kickass and you know it he cant have character flaws!
4)your feelings! what about my feelings! this is one of the beter fics out there and i dont want to see it die!
(email me with the subject "your review" and tell me if you liked this review)
| Duran the Warrior chapter 27 . 8/27/2007
You shouldn't fret about it... since that's the fate of many first stories... time passes, people grow, and styles evolve.