|Reviews for A Glass of Wine|
| Ranma-sensei chapter 22 . 1/19
I like your story. While it becomes OOC like hell the farther you read, and seriously lacks in research on the series itself, it is still an enjoyable story in the Evangelion universe. Consider it favorited.
That said, you have a fair amount of recurring mistakes (bowls/bowels, presence/presents) that you should probably correct at least in your master file.
Anxious to see how this works out,
| UNCF Yamato chapter 1 . 11/12/2016
though I have only recently become an Evangelion fan, I quite enjoyed it, until the death of Rei II, at which point the series dissolved into death and destruction, with all traces of a happy ending denied. I was pleasantly surprised to discover that there was another fan who thought that the shows ending was overly tragic, and that tragedy isn't always a good way to end a story. it was an understandably nasty shock for me to discover that 94saturn had passed away, leaving his works incomplete.
I will not criticize or compliment this work here, and I ask that others refrain from doing so, as I feel that it would be disrespectful to leave remarks on a work here when the author is deceased, and thus incapable of acting on them, and I ask that others do the same. the purpose of the review is to give the author our thoughts on the work, allowing them to improve on what is wanting whilst encouraging them to continue with what they have done well.
Instead, I suggest that you use your opinions and observations to improve your own work, as that is the purpose of fanfiction: to improve, build, express, create, and experiment, each creating something uniquely theirs. This is what 94saturn did, and now it is our turn. no one and nothing is perfect, we are all flawed, and we all find flaws in each other. because of this, it is in the nature of humanity to grow, so when our observations are worthless others we must use them to improve ourselves.
there are none who have less use for our observations than those who are dead, as they can no longer perfect their works, whilst that chance is still available to us.
may your words pierce hearts and your pen draw tears.
| Jakeros chapter 5 . 9/4/2016
And I thought RV writers were horny...
| Jakeros chapter 4 . 9/4/2016
CHOMPY SHIELD YOUR EYES!
| Jakeros chapter 3 . 9/4/2016
Holy kami! Mein gott! Where have you taken our Shin-chan?
Lol just kidding. Interesting. Will be nice to see how this angle plays out.
| jreedEVAfan chapter 22 . 7/20/2016
I had planned on doing this a week or so on his anniversary but decided to do it right now. I came across "A Glass of Wine" when I first came to Fanfiction. It was one of the few stories that caught my sight. I enjoyed his story and couldn't wait until the next chapter. Then I got caught up with work, school and life decisions that kept me away from the Fanfiction for awhile. I came back a few years ago to check out new stories. Again, I found 94saturn's story and read all the way up to 22. I was excited about the next chapter. It never came but I was always on the look out. Then a year from now, I looked around the site one day and found a story called "A Glass of Wine Rebuilt." My first thought was "Thief" and to get to the bottom of this.
I found out that 94saturn had passed away. I didn't take the news well. The fact that so many people like myself didn't know broke my heart. We had lost a great writer in our community. So I write this today because every now and then we should always go back to his works. We should remember 94saturn as someone who took his time with his work and his audience and gave that audience wonderful stories. We should look back on all the stories of those who are not here with us today. For now, all I want say is this:
Thank you, 94saturn
| carbonfox chapter 1 . 6/3/2016
I loved this story when I read it the first time and I still love it now I was saddened to hear that the author had died I would ask that someone adopt this story so that his what I view as one of the best stories here will have an ending and to show that we as a community will continue to be creative and supportive even if the author passed away
| Jiggly Joe chapter 1 . 4/8/2016
It's been many years sincr I read this fic. I'm twenty, now, just to give you an idea.
Recently, I decided to check out Evangelion fanfiction again. There's not much in the way of new stuff that grabs my interest, so I figured I would check out some of the stories I read as a kid.
I saw a review saying you had passed away... So I put a little bit of effort into researching it.
I know I'm far, far too late on this one... But thanks for fueling my interest in NGE, and I'm sorry to see that you were never able to complete this story.
Rest in peace, man.
| That Baka chapter 5 . 7/18/2015
Mo' chapters, mo' edits:
A fissure formed in one of her barriers.
Now using arrows. Like?
I also noticed I didn't review the last chapter, so now I'll do this one twice as long! (A whole two sentences! Wow!)
Great writing, I find your lemon/lime very enjoyable and the premise is very easy to believe too. I'd also have to commend you for writing a story that ships Shinji and Asuka I've always found them to be the otp.
Much love, That Baka
| That Baka chapter 4 . 7/18/2015
(Perhaps I am a grammar nazi? [super intense introspection go!])
More 'how I'd write/say this particular sentence'
S̲h̲e̲ ̲s̲a̲i̲d̲ ̲s̲t̲e̲r̲n̲l̲y̲.̲
S̲h̲i̲n̲j̲i̲ ̲s̲m̲i̲l̲e̲d̲ ̲i̲n̲w̲a̲r̲d̲l̲y̲,̲ ̲b̲u̲t̲ ̲d̲i̲d̲ ̲n̲o̲t̲ ̲v̲e̲n̲t̲u̲r̲e̲ ̲t̲h̲e̲ ̲g̲r̲i̲n̲ ̲o̲n̲ ̲t̲h̲e̲ ̲o̲u̲t̲s̲i̲d̲e̲.̲ ̲
S̲h̲i̲n̲j̲i̲'̲s̲ ̲s̲o̲f̲t̲ ̲t̲o̲u̲c̲h̲ ̲a̲n̲d̲ ̲g̲e̲n̲t̲l̲e̲ ̲k̲i̲s̲s̲e̲s̲ ̲w̲e̲r̲e̲ ̲b̲e̲g̲i̲n̲n̲i̲n̲g̲ ̲t̲o̲ ̲m̲a̲k̲e̲ ̲A̲s̲u̲k̲a̲ ̲m̲o̲r̲e̲ ̲a̲m̲o̲r̲o̲u̲s̲.̲ ̲
| That Baka chapter 3 . 7/18/2015
Another small edit: (I think the sentence in question makes more sense structured this way)
They set out plates, knives,̲ and forks, H̲i̲k̲a̲r̲i̲ ̲w̲a̲s̲ ̲l̲o̲o̲k̲i̲n̲g̲ ̲f̲o̲r̲e̲w̲o̲r̲d̲ ̲t̲o̲ ̲t̲r̲y̲i̲n̲g̲ ̲t̲h̲i̲s̲,̲ ̲s̲h̲e̲ ̲h̲a̲d̲n̲'̲t̲ ̲h̲a̲d̲ ̲m̲u̲c̲h̲ ̲e̲x̲p̲o̲s̲u̲r̲e̲ ̲t̲o̲ ̲w̲e̲s̲t̲e̲r̲n̲ ̲f̲o̲o̲d̲ ̲s̲o̲ ̲i̲t̲ ̲w̲a̲s̲ ̲a̲d̲v̲e̲n̲t̲u̲r̲o̲u̲s̲.̲
This story is very well written, I hope I don't come off as some sort of grammar nazi or elitist with my edit suggestions.
| That Baka chapter 1 . 7/18/2015
"It wasn't a big deal really, you were close to the surface, all I had to do was grab you before you sank too deep and you killed the a̲n̲g̲e̲l̲."
Minnor spelling/grammar mistake, but, it's a well-written chapter none-the-less.
| DarkFetherStorys chapter 22 . 6/24/2015
just read start to fin and it is a realy good story.
hope you get back to it soon.
| Critic 471 chapter 22 . 7/23/2014
I wonder how he died. People who write fanfic shouldn't be writing stuff if their physh
| Sixth Ranger BetaHalo chapter 1 . 2/3/2014
To everyone who might ever review this again.
I mean in all seriousness that the author of this fic is dead.
And no, is not the fic that is dead. But the author himself died years ago.
Atomic Squirrel, a friend of the author, posted about his passing some years ago.