|Reviews for Strange Angels|
| The Cat's Whiskers chapter 10 . 11/27/2006
I still like this story, though I am not entirely sure I understand all of it I am of course waiting for the happy ending when Sam, Dean and Charlie kick Shemhez-dude's ass along with the other evilies and Charlie gets to sing (oh and by the way, give Alex Masters a serious pasting too). Your sleep deprivation bit is spot on - prolongued lack of sleep does lead to depression, hallucinations and psychosis. I suffered from a muscle disease, fibromyalgia and one of the issues with that is insomnia and fibromyalgics can't achieve proper REM sleep - we tend not to dream and when we do, we tend to have nightmares. Not fun. You've also clearly done a lot of research and developed a story with a strong underpinning mythology.
| rozzy07 chapter 10 . 11/27/2006
Well girl, its hard to read a chapter like this without a major pang of jealousy running through my gut! Too much talent pours off the page with each new chapter you post! Truly you must have been whacked over the back of the head with the 'wooden spoon of imagination' to yet again offer up such a brilliant read. That very libidious but emphatic Dean may be an angel (or sorts!) but he leaves our Charlie vulnerable and in his own way just as exposed! But your Arlene is surely a flirtatious little minx isn't she? And her brother the densest mid-american boy ever! The whole Simon Lebon monicker for Sam and Charlotte's own choice (god I almost wet my knickers laughing here..!) were just brilliant. Of course Dean had to be Nick Rhodes (shorter member of the band!). Me thinks you have led a very bad youth which has helped morphed your writing skills to what they are now...
So Dean and Charlie are sparking wounds off each other here, a repression of emotions that at some point they will have to release or Shemhezai may well find his way to slip past their chinks in their too fragile armour and get an escape. And yet there still is our Sam, still holding back the evil within, remaining as much a smart alecky younger brother and pure soul as he has ever been. Too much, way too much to ponder on without going into reams of rambling thoughts, but I am so glad to be reading this great novella in the making, so please post more soon. Roz
| Fireman Phil chapter 10 . 11/27/2006
I knew it. I just knew it. Dean can behave like such an ass sometimes. It's one of his least endearing qualities and you captured it just right. (My affinity for the character as well as personal history as a part-time ass, sadly, back me up.) Let's hope he will someday learn a thing or two from younger brother, Sam, before it is too late.
I have the feeling this chapter has been liberally sprinkled with clues, and can hardly wait to see where they all may lead. Bringing the two priests into the story is good and the home for children is an unexpected twist. Gosh, I wish I could peek into your head and see where you are taking us. Better not though, I might get dizzy.
I simply can't keep my eyes off of Charlotte, but I'm definitely not thinking like that creep, Tony. She deserves a chance to find herself. She has so much to offer and yet she's been dealt a pretty poor hand in a lot of respects. I hope she will have the opportunity to really shine before ths story ends. Disgarding the crutches and standing again on her own is a good, logical first step. (No puns intended.)
Since musical inspiration seems to play an important role in your writing process, let me share a bit of mine. When I think about Dean and Charlotte, the music of Gerry Rafferty "Baker Street" and "Right Down the Line" comes to mind. I know that in the universe of Supernatural, having Dean find somebody to love is an impossibility, but Charlotte seems so right. I hope you'll provide a good, compassionate reason for why it just can't be.
Getting me to care like this about original characters is no small undertaking and a real credit to your writing and story telling talent.
Now I did spot one tiny error. At the diner, you have Sam wanting to hit Dean with a "clue by four." Did you mean two by four?
| Fireman Phil chapter 9 . 11/27/2006
The calm before the storm, eh? This has been another marvelous chapter. There's no doubt about it, I'm falling in love with Charlotte. If you let anything serious happen to her now, I am going to be very upset. (I just know I'm being set up for a fall.)
Watching these young characters interact is such a treat. The attraction between Dean and Charlotte, knowing of her urge to flee, his determination to hunt and protect, Sam's sensitive observations, and the attempts to relieve some of the tension with their pranks, all of it is working so well here.
If it weren't for your occasional reminders, including Aaron's appearances, it would be easy to forget the fate of the world hangs in the balance.
Your sense of pace is wonderful. After the encounter with demons at the church, you've given us time to collect our thoughts and prepare (I hope) for what lies ahead.
| Fireman Phil chapter 8 . 11/12/2006
Wow...another splendid chapter! A *labor of love* you say? It must truly be becuase the result is so fantastic. I loved the repartee at the spaghetti place, Sam's lame practical joke and Charlie accidentally spilling olive oil on his pants. Served him right.
Gosh, how I wish I were part of their team. It really seems like a team now, not just the brothers plus Charlotte. ou make it all seem so exciting - so inviting. Saving the world would be nice, too. Warriors of God!
Loved the selection by Blue Oyster Cult, and Godzilla. You show marvelous taste in matters of music, film, and pop literature! GRIN
To close, against the backdrop of the ever looming confrontation that lies ahead, you bring us safely back together and provide another glimpse of the *team in the making* with Charlie's revenge for Sam. Great stuff, indeed.
We're ready to face anything now. Did I just say we?
| Fireman Phil chapter 7 . 11/11/2006
This chapter is another absolute delight. Eveyone can identify with a hearty breakfast - Winchester style. You put us right there in the diner with them. The converstaion is so natural and so much what we have come to expect from Sam and Dean. Charlotte is so much less threatening. Wanting to know her means much more than what took place just in the back seat of the car.
Charlotte could easily become a member of the Winchester team if it weren't for Deans's suspicions about her use of her particular gift/curse. Damn. Although we are still in the midst of the larger story of the impending doom, it is so heart-breaking to see that barrier stand beteen Dean and Charlotte.
These feelings don't just happen. Your writing is responsible for creating them. Keep at it. This is so enjoyable.
| Fireman Phil chapter 6 . 11/11/2006
Hm...for some reason, not entirely understood by me, I had problems with this chapter. I wish I could point to something specific as an example, but I can't. Things just didn't flow as easily as they have in earlier chapters. I don't think is was the Enochian lore as much as the way it was presented. I'm still intersted in what these demons mean to do and what must be done to stop them
| Fireman Phil chapter 5 . 11/11/2006
As a relative newcomer to the world of the Winchesters, I have been according each brother equal attention and respect - until recently. Beginning with *carikube's* story Entity, I have found myself slowly but surely favoring Dean. That's continued with your story and thus chapter simple reinforces my judgment.
Myabe it's his choice of music or the Impala, but mostly its undersatnd how he approaches situations and life itself. We get to see a good sample of that in this chapter. Great writing.
| Fireman Phil chapter 4 . 11/11/2006
Burning Inside...what a terrific title for this chapter! On so many levels: the carnal desires felt by Dean and Charlotte, the mystical, demonic legacy she carries, the voice urging her to HELP HIM repeatedly, the beast inside Sam. How many things burn inside each of us? You find a way of touching so many of them with your descriptions of what is going on in each character.
Whether we are enjoying the moment or feeling revulsion, you never let us forget these are real people and in the end teh fate of the world is at stake.
| Fireman Phil chapter 3 . 11/11/2006
This chapter rates two A's: Action ad Adult Themes. You handle both very well. You really pulled me into the story. Beginning in the previous chapter and continuing here, I really want to get to know Charlotte Webb and I want to be Dean as I do it. That's some writing on your part.
Having guided us through the melee inside the bar, you now move the action to the parking lot. Isn't that always the case with bar fights? Alex is more of an opponent than he first appeared to be and having Charlotte escape with Sam and Dean is exciting.
Did I mention you make me want to know Charlotte just as Dean does? Yeah I think I did. GRIN
The point is, you handle this adult situation very well: often graphic and suggestive but never tawdry. You are showing us real people here. That's the key to great storytelling.
| Fireman Phil chapter 2 . 11/11/2006
Wonderful. You already painted the mystical backdrop for this story in the previous chapter. Now we get to meet the major characters and Alfies is a great place to do it. Is there anyplace quite as interesting as a good college bar? WE already are acquainted with Sam and Dean. You capture them quite well. It's Alex and Charlotte we nee to become familiar with and you handle that equally well. Alex is a bit of a stiff and Charlotte sounds wonderful. Who would suspect see's capable of taking on a succubus? You are just full of surprises and this is just chapter 2.
Your writing of dialogue is superb. Your descriptions of persons and actions flow almost effortlessly off the page. I am loving this story.
| rozzy07 chapter 9 . 11/11/2006
So where do I begin here? This chapter was slower paced offering up a view of the brothers through Charlies eyes. Her observations were projected with such clarity it felt, for me the reader, almost voyeurisitc - as if peeping through an open window watching something private being played out. Here in this chapters Charlie truly starts to think, feel and understand like a Winchester, her connection and reactions with the boys becoming so attuned it is hard now not to think her by their sides.
She 'sees' the boys, not just the physical but also the men inside. Loved this bit of about Dean, summing up that hidden part of him up perfectly:
“Don’t mention it,” he replied softly. Dean Winchester was completely unguarded, looking at her with a crooked smile. She could almost convince herself that this was the world without demons, that Dean didn’t carry a wounded little boy inside.
He truly is a wounded warrior, still carrying the burdens put apon his shoulders at a too young age.
Then girl, your use of dialogue - the way you spin a conversation leads me giddy, always so fresh it just pings off the page (Oh I'd sell a kidney just to be able to write those witty and so real conversations your characters have!)
I laughed so much at Sam's & Charlie's voiceover in the car at Arlene (makes my Candy look almost virtuous!)& Dean's reunion, the mocking dialogue again perfect for that moment.
Yet even amongst the humour, shaving foam and a tone-deaf singing Charlie you manage to drop in the whole reason for this story:
or maybe it was because he was just looking at her, with blue-green eyes. The boy with the demon inside, wanting to save them all.
Sums it all up perfectly for me. Sam remains true to himself - just adored his dreamscape reunion with Aaron and the wisdom he just seems wrapped up in in his too young frame, whilst at the end of this interlude you have him just swinging like a 6 year old contemplating his next prank with such an innocence about him that you want to hug him to you. He is being held together by a mixture of stubborness and a purity of soul that not even Shemhezai has been able to destroy - yet. So, again, you have my awe and thanks for posting another amazing chapter. Always worth the wait and then the time to review in kind. Loved it. More soon please.
| Fireman Phil chapter 1 . 11/10/2006
Without a doubt, this is one of the very best stories I've read. I am absolutley transfixed with your invention/use of Enochian lore. It gives your story the feeling of something between Old Testament Biblical prophecy and Lord of the Rings. Though I am leaving this feedback here at chapter 1, I have to admit I've read up through chapter 5. I just didn't want to take the time to stop to leave individual reviews, but I will. I promise. Shoot me if I don't.
I'm never one to twack a writer with a stick, but I will happily applaud what you've created. I hope that has the same effect and you will continue to advance the story.
| Angela62 chapter 9 . 11/7/2006
Another great chapter! I love the interaction between Charlie and Dean. And the easy way she fits into their life.
Keep up the good work!
| carocali chapter 3 . 11/7/2006
I've had your story bookmarked for a while, and i just got a chance to start it. I'm slow...sorry!
What a very interesting concept you have here. I also like that you are not afraid of the sex talk/action. Yours is the first story I've really read that isn't afraid of boundaries! Good for you!
Cool concept that they come from angels and not demons. Poor Sam is always associated with the bad guys - it's nice to know that he's got a higher purpose. And Dean too! Some really classic lines in this chapter!
I'll be reading, but my time is limited. keep going!