|Reviews for Strange Angels|
| Fireman Phil chapter 3 . 11/11/2006
This chapter rates two A's: Action ad Adult Themes. You handle both very well. You really pulled me into the story. Beginning in the previous chapter and continuing here, I really want to get to know Charlotte Webb and I want to be Dean as I do it. That's some writing on your part.
Having guided us through the melee inside the bar, you now move the action to the parking lot. Isn't that always the case with bar fights? Alex is more of an opponent than he first appeared to be and having Charlotte escape with Sam and Dean is exciting.
Did I mention you make me want to know Charlotte just as Dean does? Yeah I think I did. GRIN
The point is, you handle this adult situation very well: often graphic and suggestive but never tawdry. You are showing us real people here. That's the key to great storytelling.
| Fireman Phil chapter 2 . 11/11/2006
Wonderful. You already painted the mystical backdrop for this story in the previous chapter. Now we get to meet the major characters and Alfies is a great place to do it. Is there anyplace quite as interesting as a good college bar? WE already are acquainted with Sam and Dean. You capture them quite well. It's Alex and Charlotte we nee to become familiar with and you handle that equally well. Alex is a bit of a stiff and Charlotte sounds wonderful. Who would suspect see's capable of taking on a succubus? You are just full of surprises and this is just chapter 2.
Your writing of dialogue is superb. Your descriptions of persons and actions flow almost effortlessly off the page. I am loving this story.
| rozzy07 chapter 9 . 11/11/2006
So where do I begin here? This chapter was slower paced offering up a view of the brothers through Charlies eyes. Her observations were projected with such clarity it felt, for me the reader, almost voyeurisitc - as if peeping through an open window watching something private being played out. Here in this chapters Charlie truly starts to think, feel and understand like a Winchester, her connection and reactions with the boys becoming so attuned it is hard now not to think her by their sides.
She 'sees' the boys, not just the physical but also the men inside. Loved this bit of about Dean, summing up that hidden part of him up perfectly:
“Don’t mention it,” he replied softly. Dean Winchester was completely unguarded, looking at her with a crooked smile. She could almost convince herself that this was the world without demons, that Dean didn’t carry a wounded little boy inside.
He truly is a wounded warrior, still carrying the burdens put apon his shoulders at a too young age.
Then girl, your use of dialogue - the way you spin a conversation leads me giddy, always so fresh it just pings off the page (Oh I'd sell a kidney just to be able to write those witty and so real conversations your characters have!)
I laughed so much at Sam's & Charlie's voiceover in the car at Arlene (makes my Candy look almost virtuous!)& Dean's reunion, the mocking dialogue again perfect for that moment.
Yet even amongst the humour, shaving foam and a tone-deaf singing Charlie you manage to drop in the whole reason for this story:
or maybe it was because he was just looking at her, with blue-green eyes. The boy with the demon inside, wanting to save them all.
Sums it all up perfectly for me. Sam remains true to himself - just adored his dreamscape reunion with Aaron and the wisdom he just seems wrapped up in in his too young frame, whilst at the end of this interlude you have him just swinging like a 6 year old contemplating his next prank with such an innocence about him that you want to hug him to you. He is being held together by a mixture of stubborness and a purity of soul that not even Shemhezai has been able to destroy - yet. So, again, you have my awe and thanks for posting another amazing chapter. Always worth the wait and then the time to review in kind. Loved it. More soon please.
| Fireman Phil chapter 1 . 11/10/2006
Without a doubt, this is one of the very best stories I've read. I am absolutley transfixed with your invention/use of Enochian lore. It gives your story the feeling of something between Old Testament Biblical prophecy and Lord of the Rings. Though I am leaving this feedback here at chapter 1, I have to admit I've read up through chapter 5. I just didn't want to take the time to stop to leave individual reviews, but I will. I promise. Shoot me if I don't.
I'm never one to twack a writer with a stick, but I will happily applaud what you've created. I hope that has the same effect and you will continue to advance the story.
| Angela62 chapter 9 . 11/7/2006
Another great chapter! I love the interaction between Charlie and Dean. And the easy way she fits into their life.
Keep up the good work!
| carocali chapter 3 . 11/7/2006
I've had your story bookmarked for a while, and i just got a chance to start it. I'm slow...sorry!
What a very interesting concept you have here. I also like that you are not afraid of the sex talk/action. Yours is the first story I've really read that isn't afraid of boundaries! Good for you!
Cool concept that they come from angels and not demons. Poor Sam is always associated with the bad guys - it's nice to know that he's got a higher purpose. And Dean too! Some really classic lines in this chapter!
I'll be reading, but my time is limited. keep going!
| Ali chapter 9 . 11/6/2006
I'm so totally in love with your story, it's one of the best I've read in months. More soon pleae!
| Angela62 chapter 8 . 10/19/2006
Your writing style is wonderful and it really seems like you've done your research with this one. I'm completely hooked. Keep up the great work!
| sinsandshadows chapter 8 . 10/17/2006
Truly superb, I love how you worked your own mythology into the canon. And as much as I normally dislike Mary Sue...I keep rooting for Dean/Charlie. I'm so glad he was interrupted by the vision.
| rozzy07 chapter 8 . 10/16/2006
Well as always you surprise me with each chapter you post and this one measures up just as well, if not more so. The humour, bantering and concern between the trio is played out on such a delicate scale that the balance is kept evemn - offering up a chance to expand the friendship and trust developing between them all. They need that security, that ability to laugh, to inflict the worst gaffs on each other, knowing that at the end of the day it is because they need the release from the terrors and fears that make up their everyday living. So from sugar on pasta to the Chosen having one hell of a blue rinsed vision this chapter was jammed packed with so much story telling that I am still staggering from the depth and structure of your writing, slowly absorbing and still trying to digest all the words across the page. A slow feast enjoyed is always the best repast, and yes I do intend to go back for seconds and even thirds in my rereading of this delicious chapter. Thank you for being so ridiculously talented and keeping me so well fed. Roz.
| jmm0001 chapter 7 . 9/30/2006
"Jacob used to tell her that love was the one power that could not be denied.
The only thing you can do, when faced with the strength of love’s purity, is stand with it.
She just never knew that rule applied to her.
Only one way to find out, Charlie."
Yup. Poor lonely Charlie is going to learn a lot about life and love from the Winchester brothers. She may know more about Latin and being descended from angels, but life and love... they can teach her a thing or two about that.
Lovely chapter. Go, Charlie, go.
| rozzy07 chapter 7 . 9/30/2006
Seriously I have no clue of where to begin in reviewing this chapter. Perfection can be so over-rated, but this chapter, sitting alone from anything else bears that mark. It's now 3am in London and I can find no peace until I can tell you girl, just what a fine piece of writing this was. You peppered with Charlie's backstory so movingly that I just wanted to grab her in my arms by the the end of the chapter. But at the beginning of this chapter, all I can say is, that breakfast has never ever been so disturbing as watching that girl eat! Egg yolks savagery at it's worse. Seriously Sam was right to ask about her Spaghetti eating skills... the imagery of her eating via a spoon or forkless just reminds me of my little girl 2 years old going commanodo style with fingers into the pasta! (Curly 'spaghettioed' haired 2 year old mananging to the get it everywhere!)
So as you add yet more to the mythology of this epic piece of writing I am left wondering just where you can take this further unless to further heartbreak. As Sam said fate cannot be sidestepped, though as you have managed to slip in throughtout this chapter the sheer innocence of the boy may nullify that little hiccup in the plan of things. Couldn't help but pick on these 3 little asides:
And if Alex found them, he would kill her. He would kill Dean. Shemhezai would rise out of Sam Winchester – a boy so innocent that he believed she needed his help.
The boy with the demon inside still wanted to help other people. Even someone like her. Jacob was right about him the whole time.
| Laine7727 chapter 1 . 9/30/2006
You've read The Fallen series, haven't you?
| rozzy07 chapter 6 . 9/19/2006
Where do I begin in reviewing this simply overwhelmimg powerhouse of a chapter? The big baddie inside of Sam wants out but the only thing stopping it is a certain stubborn son of a bitch aka Sam Winchester. (Megahug for the boy's tenacity and purity of spirit.) And the only thing stopping Sam from being dragged under by the evil is Dean, his love and connection to his brother managing to block, however momentarilly, the appocalypse from happening - however irritating that must be for our most evil one! As for your Aaron, loved him. Offering up a path for Sam to dare to follow and linger on, whilst learning what must be learnt before the final fight of good vs evil. Charlotte and Dean return towards the end of the chapter, as normal as normal can be in this strained and weirdly unsettling situation with McD's! All fragile, all very wary of each other, not wanting to voice their thoughts as if they might in the telling make it happen. And then Sam does what he does best. He rambles, his heart speaks, the words flow, allowing those once alienated from him to reconnect, still wary, still unsettled, but a little lighter in the knowledge that 'he' has not succumbed, still battling through to normal and needs their help to stay 'grounded'. And bugger me not even that rumble in oru Sammy's ribcage from 'you-know-who' will stop me from loving this chapter.
Your Aaron, Your Charlotte have perfectly meshed themselves into those boys lives and needs so perfectly that I am left begging for more... Lets just pray that will be of help to our Sam to stop the destruction so visualised and to keep both him and his brother whole and purely Winchester. Roz
| rozzy07 chapter 4 . 9/2/2006
Whatever you did with this revised chapter it just works so much better, flowed so lucidly whilst crammed with details, all important, none to be forgotten, because this is an intricate story populated with a back history and a future to come that is both mesmerising and terrifying. Awesome stuff. As for the humourours bantering between the trio - loved it! Now please can I have the next chapter...Please!