Reviews for Promises
TrunkZy chapter 1 . 8/24/2006
Throughout the poem you used the word 'that' too much. It kills the mood when stressing a word.

"The sun it does down, to leave us alone" You mean goes down. Atone

"To cry on inside and die on the surface." it's either: to cry on the inside or cry inside.

The last stanza was definitely the best.

In whole, you need to edit your poetry.
Repeating October chapter 1 . 7/19/2006
That was really good, I think you did really well with the poem structure and everything :)
marzilandx chapter 1 . 7/19/2006
this is a way wicked poem!. keep it up, it was really touching though, honestly