Reviews for California Love
emalovelyy chapter 11 . 3/27/2011
omg u really had me crying so hard poor cammy great job i love it
CarvedKid chapter 11 . 5/26/2010
What what an amazing touching story. I honestly loved it, one of the best Four Brothers Jackie Mercer fanfictions I have ever read! :) Truly touching, tahnk you so much for sharing your talent!
Ghostwriter chapter 11 . 12/4/2007
Great job. Catch ya on the flip side.
Aspiring Empath chapter 11 . 2/18/2007
If Bobby was MY brother in law...I'd hug 'im and kiss 'im All ove...Okay...well, I'd hug and kiss my HUSBAND all over...but since Jack is...dead...*looks up to sky, shakes fist* WHY DAMN IT? He was too good looking! I was too young for him to die!...I'll settle for Bobby.

Again with the sobbage and the boo hooage. Camryn is absolutely amazing as a little girl...And when she sat down at his grave I literally sobbed...

Bobby is so good. He's a hot piece of man candy if you ask me...but hey, I'm just Shining Star of Valinor. I ain't been teached none...

Trizzy you are absolutely amazinger than my life. You are the best writer/person ever. Truly. You make me all happy when I read your PMS (haha it looks like PMS but in reality it's PM's) woo...anywho...and you are just too cool for school. Rock on Skizzy Trizzy...Rock on.

Mucho Mucho MUCHO love

Shining Star of Valinor
Aspiring Empath chapter 10 . 2/18/2007
...still traumatized...


its not you...its me...

Trizzy, you still be my moxie rockin skizzy foo...

But Four Brothers really is a depressing plotline...

I'm going to go eat chocolate...
Aspiring Empath chapter 9 . 2/18/2007
...*sob*...*wail*...*tear*...*openly weep*...

No...seriously...I on you Trizzy. ish on you...

Love you...hate the damn Fo Bros writers.

Shining Star of Valinor (now a dark swirling vortex of doom that swallows hope and joy...)
Aspiring Empath chapter 8 . 2/18/2007
Ish...big fuckin ish. I HATE this part of the story I like the way you wrote it...but i hate this part. Makes me all sad and such and thats not cool. I'm on a sugar high...way to bring me down FOUR BROTHERS PLOTLINE! WAY TO BE!...ish.

Tis all I can funny haha review now...not for poor poor shining star is fading right now...fading into a black hole of nothingness from within...Emo...right on.

Off to read the next chapter...twill be sadder fo sho.

Look on, Shittykitty...*whispers* look on...

Your Love Boat (what the?)

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Aspiring Empath chapter 7 . 2/18/2007
Geesh woman...a little too much dramatic irony for the life of my life. Lol. I kept on saying...ooh born...die here..oh yep, that'll happen...oh yep, she said it...tis true tis true...

Love the chapter if I hate any of your be my boo, foo. lol.

Love the name for her...CAMMY! Wow, I said that in a high pitched squeal...I think I woke my dad up...crap. haha. She'll be a heartbreaker...for reals. She'll just be boy crazy and have crazy boys after her too. Tis for reals.

Thanksgiving is coming up...and that kinda sucks...cuz that means Evelyn is going up to the big Pudding bowl in the sky...hey, If I ran heaven...there'd be pudding...okay? And SAVVY? good. Well, she's going up to see the big guns upstairs. And that brings us closer to the end of Jack's existence...which totally blows...cuz you know, he's Jack...

Well, you skizzy Trizzy foo boo. I'm off to read the next chappie poo.


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Aspiring Empath chapter 6 . 2/18/2007
So adorable...loved it, really...I did...ya know?

She was all...hmm Babes...Yeah, I'm carrying your offspring in my womb...TA DA! Well, I like Jack Jr. for a boy...and Jakie Juniorette for a girl...but that's just me...HEY, your story and all, I'm juss sayin. lol

Okay okay, If I had to pick...I like Liam for a boy...and Emily for a girl...but hey..I'm just an innocent reviewer...hehehe.

Loved the line with the jerking of the Jack. Jack's jerking...haha. WOo. So wonderful. Weird...a little perverted...but wondeful...lovely, really.

Just very AMAZINGERFULLY AMAZING. tis the skiz for reals yo. Trizzy the skizzy on the low down. She be my foo! haha.

Mucho LOVE!

Shining Star of Valinor
Aspiring Empath chapter 5 . 2/17/2007
SO SO SO! Cute at the beginning. Jack's all like SMILE for the camera and she's all like Hmm, how's bout no, bitch? But then its all cute when he tells her why he wants to marry her...I think a little tear just escaped...just a little one though... the one part reminded me..well, of

-“True story,” she sighed, resting her chin on his shoulder.-

I always start things with True in school, I'd raise my hand and be like "True story, okay so this morning...I ate CHEERIOS instead of FRUIT LOOPS!" I mean, who DOES that...well, except for me?

Just so you know, I KNEW I KNEW I KNEW she was pregnant the minute you said she got dizzy. I was like YUSS! WOO Go me. I'm so smart. And then it sank in and I was like "Oh em gee, She is FREAKING PREGNANT with Jack's offspring! Such exciting news, I almost peed myself...thank god I didn't...leather chair and all.

She TOLD JERRY! *sings and dances* She told Jerry, She told lala lala LA! WOOT!...Off to read the next chappy poo, Trizzy you sexy foo! (Where'd THAT come from? Ah well, you know how I am

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Aspiring Empath chapter 4 . 2/17/2007
WILL YOU EVER FORGIVE ME TRIZZY DARLING! I'm so SO SO sorry for not reviewing sooner. You probably know my computer Blewed itself up...I was just sitting there, minding my own business and I was like "Sniff that smoke? Why is the computer throwing off sparks...oh my damn." *runs away to daddy to tell him to fix the computer because I was reading fanfiction* *pout face*

The months pass...winter soul becomes a dark void without my precious computer...

Okay, lighten up the anst, add some boredom. When I finally got my new computer, I didn't even attempt going onto fanfiction. I was attempting to fix my problem of having no floppy disk drive. I don't know if I told you, but I was starting a new Jack fic and it was saved on my old computer AND my floppy disk...And as stupid as that sounds (why dear Shining Star, go find a computer that has a floppy disk drive), it wasn't so easy to solve. My school doesn't allow us to bring in floppy disks from home, and I really didn't want to be like "Hey, FRIEND! Can I come over for the sole pupose of printing and/or saving to a disk all my life's work? Thanks, you're a real pal"...awkward much. So alas, I was in the dark for a while until I was able to go to my dad's work and save everything to a disk.

Then, I was focusing on my next chap...which you so kindly read and reviewed...YAY ME! YAY YOU! So, I'm happy now...I still have Moxy...woot.

Well, to the review, now that it's taken me five years to get to this point...

I'm SO glad she made it. Whew...I was really afraid at first, but then I was like...where would the Jack/Lauren story be without the Lauren? But when Jack was all WHAT WHAT WHAT? Spaz attacko majig, I was like right there with him. And THEN! She had an aneurysm? WOAH! WOAH WOAH WAOH! I was NOT NOT NOT (I'm into repetition right now, deal lol) Expecting THAT at AWL (said with a New York accent) AT AWL!

And I was like AWW *long dramatic pause...sigh with content* She woke up...and she's got spunk...and moxy. She's gotta be bald and pround. Bald and Bold...Bald and BEAUTIFUL! That's all she wrote folks..haha.

Next chapter...Me go read it now...kay?

Later, Tater...


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Tara chapter 11 . 10/28/2006

You already know how much I L-O-V-E this story, but I just wanted to say that this epilogue was amazing! This is one of the best stories I've ever read. I don't know if any other story will compare. You know how I feel about all of your writing,so keep up the great work!
RogueArrow chapter 11 . 10/27/2006
That was a great chapter! I loved it. I'm sad it was the end, but it was a great end, to a great, and sad story. I have to say, good job!
xxAlyssa chapter 11 . 10/27/2006
omg that was amazing! i loved every second of it! i will definitely be reading that new story of yours when it comes out

Mart7 chapter 11 . 10/27/2006
Very nice '] oh god, i feel like shit, crying like this.. xD

Congrats ]


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