|Reviews for Fueled Anger|
| Mighty pen 20 chapter 1 . 2/22
The writing seems choppy and rushed. Also, there are a few mistakes, even though this has been beta' ed?
' Order of the chicken ' does not sound witty.. it sounds stupid. Dialogues are way too abrupt for a normal story, unless you meant this to be a crackfic. Some lines cause the reader to cringe instead of immersing himself.
Dumbledore is OOC squared. Ok, you want him to be manipulative, but you make him out as evil. And stupid. And incompetent. He might as well be an OC. ( It is very very hard to pull off an evil Dumb story successfully. Why? The answer is in my profile. )
All in all, i think it could use a bit more work. If this is your first story, it is an ok effort.
| herart chapter 4 . 2/5
Interesting story so far. Harry is starting to backfire.
But I must say... 'Lyan'? Really? I know that every story belong to its author, but come on! This is the first fanfic in which I found this name, but it sound too 'man'ly. Are we sure that it borne as a woman? Maybe her father wanted a boy...
| herart chapter 8 . 2/5
Interesting story so far. Harry's starting to backfire.
But 'Lyan'? Really? I know of course that every story belong to its author, but Lyan? Come on! It's the first fanfic in which I found this name, but it sounds too 'man'ly. Are you sure it was borne as woman?
| Anonymas chapter 28 . 12/27/2013
what happens on Christmas break?
| moosejuice5 chapter 17 . 12/28/2013
I'm getting a bit annoyed with harry in this. he's rebelling agents dumbles for controlling, manipulating and not sharing information with him but when the D.O.M do it he just takes it, not to mention they gave him the choice of join us or go to Azkaban.
| Mukuro234 chapter 28 . 11/11/2013
this is an awesome fic. I love it
| TiffBaby101 chapter 28 . 10/12/2013
| Dorian Maelus Black chapter 1 . 10/10/2013
This is a parody right?
| Lewanda chapter 10 . 10/3/2013
Why can Harry see inside Voldie's head when the horcrux was destroyed by Hedwig?
| HPSlash chapter 1 . 9/27/2013
Hey! You should really give more warning to a person! I read almost 8 chapters of your story, just to find out, that Blaize is a girl. So not cool!
| HP-DG-SB-HA-RR-KB-NT-TD-LL-AJ chapter 28 . 8/2/2013
Lmao, this was great :D. I'm glad I decided to read this story. You did a great job with it. I'll be checking to see if you have any other stories written that catch my eye. Thank you for taking the time to write this wonderful story.
| SlythrInHermione chapter 11 . 7/13/2013
I really enjoy this story for the most part and have read it before but i gotta say rationally it makes no sense that harry wouldn't have laid a beating on ron for killing hedwig, jot to mention hermione acting fucking weird being jealous and doing that blood oath not to mention harry should be acting more vicious towards her, she did betray him after all .. Also I know for the sake of the story dumbles has to remain headmaster but no one would allow him to be free of a prison sentence after what he did to harry and was found guilty of multiple charges
| Ratus chapter 25 . 7/7/2013
So, was it Gryffindor vs. Slytherin Quidditch match, or Ravenclaw vs. Slytherin? You said one then switched to the other in the next paragraph.
| Mutt Rivers chapter 7 . 6/26/2013
I think that you are using over ruled and sustained in place of e othe. When the objection is sustained, it means that the judge agrees with the objection.
. So, when Dumbledore objects to the question being asked to Ron, and the judge says that it is sustained, she agrees that Ron shouldn't answer the question. Here, the objection was over ruled, and then the judge orders Ron to answer the question.
Then, the judge says that the objection is overruled, and tellsmTonks to mind her questions. If the objection was over ruled, then she agreed with the question Tonks was asking. If the judge asks Tinks to mind her question, then the objction was sustained.m
| rowenasheir chapter 28 . 6/6/2013
Great well written story. A pleasure to read.