Reviews for Probationary Member
Guest chapter 1 . 1/7
I liked the story. Not sure on the ending of her career, but I couldn't do better.
Corrections offered without malice.
"mensware" menswear
"cross-reference laughing still continued" Some more words were here before, I think.
«Booster." Stated Batman.» Booster," stated Batman.
Pata Hikari chapter 1 . 10/18/2017
Oh wow.

An amazing example of how to ruin a good story with a absolutely TERRIBLE ending.

I had to actually go back and re-read the last quarter of the story because I was so sure I had missed something and surely there hadn't been something that stupid done.

But nope. You spend a story introducing and fun and interesting character, have her start to develop and grow. The story is light hearted and funny.

But then the ending happens, where she's brutally murdered for... no reason? Her death effectively caused by some random punk? It's incredibly tonally dissonant to the entire rest of the story, and completely ruins it. I was waiting for the point in the story, still amusing this was a story that still made sense, where she manages to break loose or some other hero bursts in in time or *something* happens because that's what happens in Superhero stories. You might as well have just scribbled in "and then she was hit by a meteor and died, THE END" for all the last bit fit in.

I mean, come on, this was fun superhero antics. Fun superhero antics don't end with the protagonist getting murdered.

It's like she was randomly killed off because an editor decided you can't have a porn star superhero in the comic books longer than her special issue except wait a minute this is a fanfic so there's no need to adhere to status quo or series continuity. So it's even more bizzare!
N8iV chapter 1 . 7/26/2017
Very heavy, loved it!
Guest chapter 1 . 5/28/2017
On one hand it seems like you are trying to portray Kelly as being a hero despite having an unusual day job, on the other hand, having her killed plays right up to Tropes where women get punished for being sexual creatures.
The death also really sucker punch a reader, I didn't really like that plot direction.
Ibskib chapter 1 . 5/28/2017
The abrupt tonal shift when Kelly was caught and killed, meshed poorly with most of what came before.

With that kind of ending, it's under the wrong genre, Tragedy would be more fitting.

I enjoyed most of it, but that mood whiplash kinda ruined whatever humor the fic might've had, there was some satisfaction in seeing the heroes end things aggressively, and did I misunderstand something or did Superman kill a person?

Overall it still left me a bit depressed, not exactly what I want in my escapism
Shimmer Stream chapter 1 . 4/28/2017
You know that feeling you get when you see a recommendation because you're bored and don't expect much? I got that feeling when I first started reading this. I mean come on. Probationary Member? Sounds boring. Then the power description came and that got me interested. Interested enough to keep on reading. And it was worth it.


That was basically what went through my mind when I read that she was a porn star. A honest to goddess porn star. It was so surreal that I had to applaud. As I continued to read, I had thought this was going to be a humor fic based around her being a porn star. It was for the most part. But at the same time, it was also deeper. It was a story of a woman who was a super hero and a pron star. A woman who did what she liked and didnt let anyone tell her otherwise, even if that someone was Wonder Woman herself. It showed a woman who stayed true to what a hero really is. And all that made this a great read.

Thanks for writing this.

I only regret that it's short.
Preier chapter 1 . 4/27/2017
great job with the human interactions, really. they were funny and sad and uplifting... Kelly and Wonder Woman really talking for the first time and bonding? yeah, that was splendid.

that much sadder to see that you went with the cheap shot at the easy emotions for the ending.
Helixical chapter 1 . 4/22/2017
I teared up. This was some heavy shit. Good job.
HyperdermicHypnotist chapter 1 . 2/22/2017
Holy hell that took a turn.
NA chapter 1 . 2/17/2017
I can't say it it isn't effective as a tragedy, but I feel like, for what this story set out to do, it would've been better if Kelly had lived to the end.
Shadowpawzzz chapter 1 . 8/9/2016
Such a good story a few places I got lost but overall very well done
Nerfhearder69 chapter 1 . 7/30/2016
There was a comic out of Dark Horse that had a prostitute turn hero. You did a better job of it. I laughed until I cried, then just cried. A very good fic. Thank you.
Mandabar chapter 1 . 7/28/2016
Wow... This was a moving story. I'm sad she died, but she died a hero. Didn't give the fuckers anything.

Shareon chapter 1 . 6/1/2016
This was a very well written plot and story with an engaging main character and numerous supporting characters well-suited to their canon portrayals.

It can be a bit politically opinionated at times, but seeing how that is one of the main plot points of the story, it's hard to see how the same premise would work without the forceful opinions.

If I were to be brutally honest the main character is a Mary Sue, and the ending is a bit cliche. However the execution, with in-universe characters actually disliking her and her facing genuine hardship, does a great deal to mitigate that.

There was obvious tension between the puritanical Justice League (which in general was true to life with how they are portrayed in canon) and the professional of the new character. There were several points of unexpected and well executed comedy, and the drama was equally powerful. The inner thinking of Superman at the end was especially poignent.
Fourtoes chapter 1 . 4/18/2016
That got pretty depressing for what I initially thought was a crack fic.
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