|Reviews for Probationary Member|
| 1WiththeButterfly chapter 1 . 6/28/2010
This is probably one of the best pieces of thought-provoking writing I've ever found on this sight. Not only is it incredibly well written, and very entertaining, it brings a focus onto the characters in such a way that has you sitting back from your computer staring up at the heavens and thinking.
The comedic segments really put a smile on my face as I read them, the ideas of batman being so stumped by something so simple, superman watching porn and wonder woman using would be contracts to get her to go show her boobs as a pick me up too good to believe.
And then there was kelly. poor kelly, who was a character unlike any other. I found her thought processes as she was being slowly tortued to death to be some of the most heart wrenching moments in my recent memory. It goes to show just how good your characters are when you can make your reader feel great sadness upon their deaths.
That she was able to not give anything, regardless of the tremendous pain she was under, said something about people. its not what someone does that defines them, but who they are.
I found the ending to be very bittersweet, and that was a perfect way of closing this. Superman works as the tragic figure who cant deal with the idea that he cant save everyone. its why he's written like that. Doug's comment that superheroes come back showed hope, and batman's comment that not all do just as much futility.
Wonder Woman and Batman going to watch kelly act as a stripper in whatever the film was about seems like a nice way of leaving it for me. simple. down to earth.
Because even superheroes cant stay that way all the time.
Thank you for writing such a terrific story
| inq101 chapter 1 . 5/8/2010
I didn't expect that ending. Good work.
| Paulthored chapter 1 . 4/13/2010
... ... ...
I sometime's get flack for enjoying reading these storie's so much.
...this is Why.
| umino-gaara chapter 1 . 4/1/2010
This was really good. Kelly was an interesting character. I was deeply saddened by her death. I'm also glad that you didn't go into detail about the torture she experienced.
| Dormant Account 24 chapter 1 . 3/24/2010
I don't read much DC stuff, but this was recommended and I'm glad I did. What could have been a crack fic turned out to be a very good story. Thank you for sharing.
| HecatonchiresLM chapter 1 . 3/16/2010
I have to say I absolutely HATE the ending, but only because you made me like an OC so much
| Gundum M chapter 1 . 3/1/2010
| Vanafindiel chapter 1 . 1/12/2010
I Knew what Kelly did from there reactions of the Male JLAers. I knew something was up, so I guessed that she was a p0rn star because it would be something you don't see or read everyday. I laughed when I found out, and genuinely adored Kelly before her untimely end.
| SpiegelofNowhere chapter 1 . 12/24/2009
I hate you now. I'm crying a little, and I hate you, because you made a brilliant OC in a few thousand words and then you killed her horribly and I hate you.
Also because of the little bit about some superheroes come back, and some don't...
| WalkInEternity chapter 1 . 9/24/2009
You know those stories where there is this perfect girl who gets superpowers and everyone falls in love with her and readers call her a "Mary Sue" and hate her guts?
This story is not one of those.
Very realistic. Everyone was perfectly in character. Great writing and imagery. Loved how you written every character so that they are distinct and human (for some, not literally human).
| Jimm chapter 1 . 9/12/2009
Very interesting piece. Thanks for sharing it with us.
| dr.evil99 chapter 1 . 8/25/2009
My gosh, where do I begin? This fic was reccomended to me by a close friend/writing colleague/all around awesome girl by the name of CalliopeMused, and WOW... she said it was different, but I was not expecting this. You've managed to take humor, drama, and outright heartbreaking tragedy, and make it all work, AND keep the DC Universe characters believeably in character. (yes, I know some will say that Supes would never watch porn, even at Lois' behest, but I'll just remind those people that I remember an issue of a Superman comic where he MADE a porn video with Big Barda, so there. Granted, there was mind control involved, but hey...) Anyway, you do all those things, AND create a wonderful, compelling original character, AND dare I say throw in a bit of commentary on matters sexual... I can't even pick out specific parts to gush about, because from start to finish it's all amazing. I really don't have another word. Seriously, I've kind of grown disenchanted with fanfic over the last couple years (too much crap out there, and some might say my own stories might be in that catagory too,) but stuff like this... inspires, humbles, and restores my faith in fanfic, and sends me to gushy fanboy-land.
What can I say? I've been reading fanfic for just shy of ten years now, I reckon, and comic books for over twice that span. And I can honestly say without hyperbole that this is one of the best superhero stories I've ever read, hands down. Thank you.
(P.S.- if you'd worked the Question in here somehow, I might be looking to start a new religion on your honor right now.)
| CalliopeMused chapter 1 . 8/24/2009
I think I stopped reading, completely stopped, when I read "Though closer to mortem..."
I thought that this story was a bit silly, to start, but you changed my mind somewhere in the first few hundred words. It wasn't a gimmick, anymore. This was the first believable story about an outsider joining the Justice League, about someone from way outside of Gotham earning respect (and even a little affection) from Bats. Kelly/Kinesis is never a Mary Sue, and every scene with her reads as completely believable and down-to-earth. The on-the-civilian-job scenes are practical and surprisingly tasteful, the remark to WW about "enough light" on her ass made me laugh out loud, and her interaction with the League (especially watching as various Leaguers (Supes!) knew who she was in that earliest scene), and I adored her.
That made the ending stick. She died because she was betrayed by Nicky, and because she did the right thing. She was a hero, and a porn star, and one of those rare characters that should have every last reader and character inevitably on her side. The truce with Wonder Woman (and that conversation!) was wonderful, the bond with Batman made me smile, and Superman's confession made me laugh out loud.
| israelbauman chapter 1 . 7/31/2009
Excellent Story, except for the tragic death part, if you could have done away with that, I would have marked this as a personal favorite, but sadly, I don't do tragic stuff
| MarbleGlove chapter 1 . 7/10/2009
Wow. This was funny and silly and thought-provoking and heartrending. So just wow. Thanks for sharing.