Reviews for Unwanted Surprises
ProfessorLayton123 chapter 6 . 2/19/2012
This is a great story. The chapter with Nick was the best by far. I have read a few my family fanfictions but this is the first one that made me laugh! :)
AngelEyes87 chapter 6 . 4/3/2008
Hehe, that was very funny xD I really hope you update this as it is such a good story :)
AngelEyes87 chapter 5 . 4/3/2008
LOL That was a classic scene with Michael and Ben. Well done with this :)
AngelEyes87 chapter 4 . 4/3/2008
Haha, this is very, very funny xD LOL I can just imagine Michael and Ben camping and everything going wrong lol
AngelEyes87 chapter 3 . 4/3/2008
Hehe, I really enjoyed reading this chapter xD I feel sorry for Abi and the ending was just classic lol :)
AngelEyes87 chapter 2 . 4/3/2008
LOL Ben really backs out on things! xD Great job with this!
AngelEyes87 chapter 1 . 4/3/2008
Haha, you got Susan and Ben bang on then lol
EstellaB chapter 3 . 1/26/2008
Susan walks through to the lounge, “Have you seen your father Michael?”

“Yes, he said to tell you that he’d gone to adopt an orphan.” Michael smirked.


Oh, you have these characters down pat. I think I love you. This story is awesome :D:D
Polgaria chapter 6 . 11/17/2006
First off...let me just say frig YES- someone is actually writing 'my family' fanfiction!


You're writing is funny, in canon, but reads rather like a script, not an actual story. Maybe you could try interspersing the dialogue with a bit more descriptive bits, actions, movement around the scene, that sort of thing. It makes it easier to follow by slowing the plot down. The back and forth dialogue gets a little confusing without some flow. I know, I spent years doing the same thing
AdriaRose chapter 5 . 7/25/2006
Fanatstic! Very drôle. Please update!