Reviews for Unwanted Surprises
ProfessorLayton123 chapter 6 . 2/19/2012
This is a great story. The chapter with Nick was the best by far. I have read a few my family fanfictions but this is the first one that made me laugh! :)
AngelEyes87 chapter 6 . 4/3/2008
Hehe, that was very funny xD I really hope you update this as it is such a good story :)
AngelEyes87 chapter 5 . 4/3/2008
LOL That was a classic scene with Michael and Ben. Well done with this :)
AngelEyes87 chapter 4 . 4/3/2008
Haha, this is very, very funny xD LOL I can just imagine Michael and Ben camping and everything going wrong lol
AngelEyes87 chapter 3 . 4/3/2008
Hehe, I really enjoyed reading this chapter xD I feel sorry for Abi and the ending was just classic lol :)
AngelEyes87 chapter 2 . 4/3/2008
LOL Ben really backs out on things! xD Great job with this!
AngelEyes87 chapter 1 . 4/3/2008
Haha, you got Susan and Ben bang on then lol
EstellaB chapter 3 . 1/26/2008
Susan walks through to the lounge, “Have you seen your father Michael?”

“Yes, he said to tell you that he’d gone to adopt an orphan.” Michael smirked.

*snort*

Oh, you have these characters down pat. I think I love you. This story is awesome :D:D
Polgaria chapter 6 . 11/17/2006
First off...let me just say frig YES- someone is actually writing 'my family' fanfiction!

Secondly-

You're writing is funny, in canon, but reads rather like a script, not an actual story. Maybe you could try interspersing the dialogue with a bit more descriptive bits, actions, movement around the scene, that sort of thing. It makes it easier to follow by slowing the plot down. The back and forth dialogue gets a little confusing without some flow. I know, I spent years doing the same thing
AdriaRose chapter 5 . 7/25/2006
Fanatstic! Very drôle. Please update!