Reviews for One
Guest chapter 1 . 12/19/2012
This was good but it needs more maby do a sequle of when he left wuya an y sorry if anythin is spelt wrong im crap at spellin
OwlheadAthena chapter 1 . 11/23/2011
... Shit, man. I loved this so incredibly much, I don't think I'll ever be able to fully describe how I feel about this.
darlingneverland chapter 1 . 8/5/2010
I have nothing to say except that this was beautiful. I loved it.
White as Sin chapter 1 . 10/12/2008
The dialogue in this is fantastic. You've given good motivation for Raimundo's defection and he's astonishingly vulnerable though not without a prickly shield of stubborn pride. Kimiko is wonderfully caustic too and cutting in ripping all of Rai's defensive maneuvers to shreds. My one criticism is that it's far too soon for Rai to admit that he loves her, in my belief. He breaks a little too soon and while Kimiko's not an idiot, I don't think she's terrifyingly perceptive enough to drive him to such a height.

Otherwise, it was a scorching exchange in dialogue and flares of emotion.
lawlingalltheway chapter 1 . 1/17/2008
This was a great story, so beautifully sad in it's own way...

I adore it, and I think it was brave to have it end in such an 'unhappy ending' way. :]

tennisgurl13 chapter 1 . 5/18/2007
WOW! I like the theme of Rai being alone, it was really creative and fun to read! Great story! :)
TheHaiku chapter 1 . 4/13/2007
That... was unbelievable!

The creativeness... was overwhelming! Your colorful vocabulary is so...


And, I love Raikim... I CRIED WITH THIS! I read it over and over again...

I loved this so much... even before I had an account! I can't explain much in words...

Just know that you're definitely going on my favorite authors list... good job! PLEASE WRITE MORE STORIES! (like Raikim...)

~Rairox64~ P.S. sorry if it's kinda late to review this... hehe
DarkAmber112 chapter 1 . 4/6/2007
Oh my gosh, this was so sweet! I swear, I almost cried through half of it. I hope to see many more stories out of you!

Ja ne!
angel101devil chapter 1 . 1/8/2007
i love this oneshot!
Robina chapter 1 . 9/1/2006
Nice work. Poor Rai having to face Kimiko like that... I'd say this was worth staying up untill two.
thesimplyuninspired chapter 1 . 8/24/2006
Dude... This is awesome.

Haruki: ..."Dude"?

Quiet, you! -scowls at him- Anyway. There is no way I could flame this... except for its apparent AU-ness, but I'll let that slide, because this is lovely the way it is. _

So, you've got a real talent for writing. I did see maybe one punctuation error which left me confused for maybe two seconds tops, but it's nothing big. Your imagry is amazing, Rai, Kim, and Wuya were very much in-character-

Haruki: In our opinion.

-and it's really apparent that a lot of work went into this. It really paid off.

Haruki: And you need to stop saying "really".

What I NEED is you to SHUT YOUR BEAK once in a while! (...Okay, it's kinda late over here...)

Both: Great work!
kawa-kiree chapter 1 . 8/9/2006
AAH! forbidin love!

great story! plz update soon!
Nara-hime chapter 1 . 8/2/2006
Wow! You should so write a sequel to this just to have him leave Wuya and go back to Kimiko! . This fic is one of the best Xiaolin Showdown fics I've read so far! Kooties! (in the eternal words of Omi)

killua rox 123 chapter 1 . 8/2/2006
i loved it! it was so passionite! you could feel the emotions! ooh it gave me chills! write more and other stories!
CherryBlossom2 chapter 1 . 7/28/2006
is there more? huh, huh?I would like some more please! You is an awsome writer! I stay up til 2 am writing for my ppls 2! Coolness.
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