Reviews for Why It Hurts
76darkangel chapter 1 . 1/19/2011
this story is amazing i have read it over and over and it never gets boring i love it
Jbrito chapter 1 . 11/14/2007
The story had no dialogue. It would have had a stronger impact on a person if it showed dialogue between the dad and the child. Demonstrating a relationship between a dad that is about to leave his a family and a child being left is something strong to write about. The writer seemed to have knowledge about this topic. They showed feeling and alot of adjectives to show whet they felt. Its a good paper after all. It is good for someone that has gone through that, which is alot of kids now in days because many have divorced parents.
Mrz.T chapter 1 . 11/14/2007
I think the story was very powerful. When I first began reading the story I thought she was talking about her boyfriend until she mentioned how she hated the fact that she was born with his blood. I think that a lot of people could relate to this story because in today’s society a lot of young people are left fatherless. Some changes that I think the author could have made, was she could have gave more details on the things her father did that she didn’t agree with. Some other changes that the author could have done was added dialog because there wasn’t any. I would have liked if she would have gave more details on characters. Overall the story was good, but I wish she would have gone deeper. I didn’t really make me want to keep reading but it had a lot of meaning.
Ourakiritsu chapter 1 . 8/12/2006
Could have sworn I left a review for you, butI didn't by the looks of it. Anyways, because I don't know if you know, but there is a seperate section for Gold Digger, and I think you should repost it man. Your two stories were great.