Reviews for First Born
TheConjuringMind chapter 1 . 6/11/2016
Quite the twist.
Superb writing.
CatGirlFireflare chapter 1 . 8/21/2013
Ohh, sad. I guessed that maybe it was going to be twins as I was reading. And awww, RIGHT after he saw them? That's cruel. Very well-written, but stiil- of course- sad. Well done!
Lina Girl chapter 1 . 8/4/2010
Wow... I almost saw it coming halfway in, but still, really good job. :)
Black Gargie chapter 1 . 8/21/2008
OMG! I didn't expect this to happen! That was a big twist. Although dying on the day he saw his first nephew and niece was not exactly what Story had actually meant, but hey, it's cool!
Hazgarn chapter 1 . 6/26/2008
Just watched this movie tonight. I think Shaymalamadingdong would appreciate the twist in the end of your fic, that's sort of his thing anyway...
alan is stupid chapter 1 . 1/15/2008
Woah... Nice twist there. Wasn't expetcng that.
Orijin chapter 1 . 4/6/2007
I liked it, though I've never seen Lady in the Water. Still a very nice story. _
x.X.Bex.X.x chapter 1 . 11/5/2006
Wow...I liked it!
RebeccaAnn chapter 1 . 7/31/2006
Good what if...the twin thing, very clever!
Egyptian Princess of 1290 bc chapter 1 . 7/30/2006
wow! loved it. didn't see that one coming
Lovely-Aiko chapter 1 . 7/29/2006
That was pretty good.