How have i just found this amazing story of yours?! I've been reading for a week now and I absolutely love it! When he gave her the ruby necklace...my eyes were just sweating...i promise.

Wow keep up this good work

constructive criticism, in chapter 10, when they get into the Weaslys shop "Hermione stood behind him tapping her foot starting scolding at his back" I could guess what you were trying to say. Change scolding to scoldingly, then just end the sentence there? Also, the part with the photo/reporter guywhat was it like to be attacked by a mass of Death Eaters

ok i want to read it but i havn't really yet. is this a love story between Harry and Alyssa or Draco and Allysa?

This has to be the longest Sue story I've ever come across. I honestly can't fathom why or how you managed to get any good reviews.

And I seem to notice that most of the Mary Sues are written by Americans. And their usually transfer students.

Is it honestly that difficult to just make them British? I highly doubt the cultures are that different. Not to mention, has there ever been a transfer student at Hogwarts in any of the seven books? Oh, right, there wasn't one. Did you ever stop to think that maybe, just maybe, Hogwarts doesn't accept transfer students?

Wise up you stupid little American fangirl and please, for the sake of us all, stop raping Rowlings work with your horrible attempt at a self insert.

Thank you and good night.

cool!

This is my favorite story out of all of the stories here on fan fic i also read your other one that connects to this one.. so good!. inspired me to write one myself... plz write another :) -Alex

i found this chapter today and i had to finish it straight through !

This story is amazing and i freaking love it :)

OMG. That was sooooo sad! x

OHH(L) Loooove it !

Words can not describe the... MARY-SUE that is your OC. Totally unoriginal.

I loved your story! your an awesome writer and i cant wait to start reading the sequel! Great job!

I just want to say that I think your story's great and don't listen to all the people saying otherwise. Some of those comments were just plain mean and untrue. While yes it is a bit of a mary sue right now, all stories are when developing characters. Props for not letting those unnecessarily horrible people get to you and finishing the story!

u should have her end up with harry

A very, very long Mary Sue . . .

I can't read anymore. Only a half page through. It's not badly written, but . . . well, there's NOTHING original about it. Perhaps I'm expecting too much. Maybe I'm spoiled by the small coterie of desperately stupendously creative writers I read religiously. In either case, or both cases, it just looked like a Mary Sue from the very summary.

But I still had to say something. Not trying to be mean, nor PMS-y, but yeah. Try for something with maybe more of a point.