Reviews for Johnathan The Third
DarthRuneis chapter 2 . 8/2/2006
i normally do write better but i wrote this in notepad so it was rather hard...sorry
Octavion P. N chapter 2 . 8/1/2006
Interesting. Good story.

Could use a bit more paragraphing, though. I generally split paragraphs before each person speaks, and where it makes sense in other places.

Anyway, keep up the good work!